Ginny_JillPole
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Just starting this new story and I wanted to share it. Comment and please, help!!!!
I know what it comes next but I can't just get it on. I need professional help for :
- My English mistakes
- A writer's hand's what I need, lol.
Hope you like it!!!
AUTUMN’S FANTASIESBy Ginebra Flower
Prologue
Year 1715 a.C.
“They’re getting nearer!” Zulas screamed. “They’ll catch us!”
Dora, Zulas, Fengie and Merf were barely flying. They increased the speed on their feet. They didn’t want to be caught.
“No way, Zulas!” Dora told her. “We’ve got to resist!”
“Why? What’s the point?” Fengie tried to support Zulas.
“Exactly, she’s right!” Zulas said. “They’re killing us! They’re destroying our world, what else can we do?”
“We must NOT give up!” Dora answered. “They won’t get us! Now, let’s keep going!”
The voices of men behind them made them shiver. At last, they found the Willow Wood.
“Come on! Only a little bit more!!” Dora said. They were at the limits of the Wood. They stopped and waited there, with the heart on their mouths. The nymphs found that the trees were dead.
“What’s the point?” Whispered Fengie.
“We will fight for what’s ours!” Dora shouted. “We’ll avenge our fallen children, brothers, fathers, mothers and friends. We’ll fight for the surviving of our people! We won’t give up! Not now!”
Finally, Dora, Zulas, Merf and Fengie caught the glimpse of the torches of men and their shapes furiously running to them, with death in their eyes. Men stared at the nymphs with surprise and hate. Carrying weapons and torches, evil men walked slowly to the young nymph girls.
They hated them for what they were.
“This is the day of our revenge.” Dora encouraged her friends, as she noticed her brother’s eyes in middle of the archers behind, protecting her. “This is the day when we’ll take what belong to us! This is the day that, in all worlds, shall be worth of remembrance because of those who didn’t break down at men’s evilness! This is the day of our triumph!” One precious, brilliant tear fell from her eye. “NOW!”
From everywhere around the wood, around the trees, shadows covered them. Shapes of unknown creatures stood beside Dora and the other nymphs. But the Shadows, the horrors of nightmares, stood before the army, to protect the magical creatures.
A shining, strong thunder fell and Dora, the nymph, the only blood heir of Summer, the Magical Kingdom, ran first to face the children of men with a fierce smile on her face.
I know what it comes next but I can't just get it on. I need professional help for :
- My English mistakes
- A writer's hand's what I need, lol.
Hope you like it!!!
AUTUMN’S FANTASIESBy Ginebra Flower
Prologue
Year 1715 a.C.
“They’re getting nearer!” Zulas screamed. “They’ll catch us!”
Dora, Zulas, Fengie and Merf were barely flying. They increased the speed on their feet. They didn’t want to be caught.
“No way, Zulas!” Dora told her. “We’ve got to resist!”
“Why? What’s the point?” Fengie tried to support Zulas.
“Exactly, she’s right!” Zulas said. “They’re killing us! They’re destroying our world, what else can we do?”
“We must NOT give up!” Dora answered. “They won’t get us! Now, let’s keep going!”
The voices of men behind them made them shiver. At last, they found the Willow Wood.
“Come on! Only a little bit more!!” Dora said. They were at the limits of the Wood. They stopped and waited there, with the heart on their mouths. The nymphs found that the trees were dead.
“What’s the point?” Whispered Fengie.
“We will fight for what’s ours!” Dora shouted. “We’ll avenge our fallen children, brothers, fathers, mothers and friends. We’ll fight for the surviving of our people! We won’t give up! Not now!”
Finally, Dora, Zulas, Merf and Fengie caught the glimpse of the torches of men and their shapes furiously running to them, with death in their eyes. Men stared at the nymphs with surprise and hate. Carrying weapons and torches, evil men walked slowly to the young nymph girls.
They hated them for what they were.
“This is the day of our revenge.” Dora encouraged her friends, as she noticed her brother’s eyes in middle of the archers behind, protecting her. “This is the day when we’ll take what belong to us! This is the day that, in all worlds, shall be worth of remembrance because of those who didn’t break down at men’s evilness! This is the day of our triumph!” One precious, brilliant tear fell from her eye. “NOW!”
From everywhere around the wood, around the trees, shadows covered them. Shapes of unknown creatures stood beside Dora and the other nymphs. But the Shadows, the horrors of nightmares, stood before the army, to protect the magical creatures.
A shining, strong thunder fell and Dora, the nymph, the only blood heir of Summer, the Magical Kingdom, ran first to face the children of men with a fierce smile on her face.