Another, (yes, another!) fan-fic!!! except this one has a catch...

Nicki, you have to post more soon so I will be able to read it within the five free minutes I have at college this week. :p Seriously, good work! You're doing a great job.

The only thing that bugged me was in that last bit, Lucy's behavior seemed rather out of character. Perhaps if you explained it more...
 
It will be revealed in time. more cause you asked. :D


Lucy tried not to smile through her scowl as she walked past the group of girls. She could feel the quiet one watching her.

“Excuse me?” said a pretty voice from behind Lucy. The young girl turned to see the brunette walked up to her. “Is something wrong?” she asked in a genuinely concerned voice. Lucy saw immediately why she had caught Ed’s eye. The girl’s brown hair was almost auburn, but not quiet, and some curls had escaped from behind her ears to frame her lightly freckled face. Her soft, light brown eyes were surrounded by dark, curly lashes.

“No, not really. My brother was just being… well, a brother,” Lucy said as she rolled her eyes. The girl smiled.

“I wish I had a brother,” she said thoughtfully.

“You can have mine!” Lucy said, and they both laughed. Lu knew that Edmund was watching them; she could feel his eyes burning into the back of her head. She chose to ignore him. “I’m Lucy, what’s your name?”
“Jennifer. Do you go to Barsimfa’s?”

“Yes! And my sister does too. Her name is Susan. She’s back at home helping mum with dinner right now, though. Do you go there? I don’t remember seeing you.” Jennifer shook her head.

“This will be my first semester. Is it a nice school?” Lucy shrugged her shoulders.

“I guess it’s all right, for a school anyway.” Jennifer nodded in agreement.

“Where does your brother go?”

“He goes to Hindan House, just across the road from ours. My other brother goes there as well, but this is his last year. He’ll go to university next fall. Do you have any siblings?” Lucy asked as they walked down the path away from a very sulky Edmund.

“No. Like I said earlier, I wish I did. It’s worse now that I’m not in the House with the other girls.”

“What do you mean?”

“Well, I used to live in the Girl’s House in South London, but a family has sponsored me, so now I live with them, and they are the ones who are sending me to boarding school.” Lucy stared at her hard for a moment.

“Did you… did you know Kathy Molls?” Lucy asked quite suddenly. Jennifer looked at her with a very surprised look on her face.

“Why, yes! Yes, I did! How do you know here?”

“She’s our house cleaner. She told us how she used to live at the Girl’s House. She’s the most wonderful person,” Lucy gushed. Jennifer smiled.

“She always was the kindest girl there. She and I were very good friends. Very good friends,” she said, with the last part almost a whisper. Lucy wondered what she could have meant by that, but she didn’t ask. “How is her son, Josian?”

“Oh, I honestly don’t know,” said Lucy sadly. “I’ve not had the chance to see him yet.”

“You really should; he’s absolutely the sweetest baby ever.”

“Kathy doesn’t talk about him much,” Lucy said softly as the two girls reached the edge of the park. “I have to go now; my mum will want me to help with dinner. It was so nice to meet you. Perhaps I’ll see you around?”

“Yes, and if not, then at school when the semester starts.”

“All right; goodbye!”
 
Great! You've updated alot this week..
Yay! New characters and more names for me to remember...
I'm not quite good at that..
I already forgot the girl's name..
 
Wait! Did the Pevensies know about Katiana's baby? I didn't think they knew. I have to go back and re-read the whole thing.
 
BarbarianKing said:
Wait! Did the Pevensies know about Katiana's baby? I didn't think they knew. I have to go back and re-read the whole thing.
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I didn't write that they did, but Lucy asked about the baby, I guess. I did not flesh out what Katriana told them, but Lucy and Edmund know about Josian. However, they are under strict orders not to say anything to the rest of the family.
 
SusanTheGentleHornblower said:
I didn't write that they did, but Lucy asked about the baby, I guess. I did not flesh out what Katriana told them, but Lucy and Edmund know about Josian. However, they are under strict orders not to say anything to the rest of the family.
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thanks for explaining. Phew! I thought I was getting senile!
 
you're welcome, Michael!


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Edmund sat with his arms crossed in front of him. Why had Lucy acted like that? It just wasn’t her nature to have such outbursts. Not only that, but it had messed with his plans to observe that girl. He sighed and settled back on the bench. She had been gone quite a long time. A harsh, ugly laugh came from his right, and he turned to see what it was. There was the girl sitting on a bench further down! A boy slightly younger than himself was hanging over the arm rest, laughing at something. She coolly ignored him and continued reading the book that was in her hands. He tried to pull it out of her hands, but she just turned so that her back was to him. He walked around in front of her so that he was right in her face. Edmund felt heat rising in his face.

“Hey!” Ed called over to the boy. “Why don’t you mind your own business and leave her alone?”

“Why don’t you mind your own business?” The boy sneered back at Edmund, who was now becoming very cross with this tormenter. The boy turned back to the girl and got right in her face as he said something else to her. She turned her face away, and Ed could see how upset she was by whatever the boy had said. Edmund suddenly got up. That was the last straw.

The boy was so far in the girl’s face that he never saw Edmund running full speed at him. Edmund heard the boy’s breath get knocked out of him as he plowed him over. Ed’s hat fell of his head onto the ground as he wrestled with the boy. Finally Edmund felt he had a good enough hold on him to punch him right in the face. They boy cried out for him to stop, so Ed let up for a minute.

“I told you to mind your own business. Do you think you can do that now?” Ed asked, still holding the boy pinned under him. The boy nodded. “I can’t HEAR you!”

“Yes!” yelled the boy. Edmund got up off the kid and hauled him up with him.

“If I ever see you bothering her or anyone else again, I’ll knock you worse,” Edmund warned him. The boy wiped his bloody nose and stumbled off as fast as he could. Ed watched him for a minute to make sure that he wasn’t coming back. After that, he turned around to see the girl staring at him. His face colored and he looked down. “Sorry about that. He won’t bother you again.” Edmund shoved his hands in his pockets and was about to walk away when her voice stopped him.
 
I don't think he should've punched the kid. I've dealt with little boys like that, all you have to do is give them a stern look and show 'em that your stronger. No actual violence is necessary--just the promise of some. Ah, well...when its the girl you're in love with--I guess we must make allowances:p
 
Ok, Edmund likes making wrong right, and he likes the girl, so I feel the fighting is justified. And the boy wasn't so little, just a little younger than Edmund, so I really hope he didn't come across like that, because then the girl could have just taken care of it. :rolleyes: that's why she needed Ed.


Edit: No more for this week or next. I have so much to study for. I have a test tomorrow and a test Thursday, a quiz today, a paper due next week, a test and a midterm next week, and I'm not even sure what else. *sighs*
 
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Aww, poor you! I had some tough days too, Monday I had eight (!) classes and today we had a big running test (and I hate running and I stink at it!)... And next week I will have a lot of tests too, because the teachers have to have grades... It's always like that the week before the grades have to be in..
Good luck with your tests!
 
SusanTheGentleHornblower said:
Ok, Edmund likes making wrong right, and he likes the girl, so I feel the fighting is justified. And the boy wasn't so little, just a little younger than Edmund, so I really hope he didn't come across like that, because then the girl could have just taken care of it. :rolleyes: that's why she needed Ed.


Edit: No more for this week or next. I have so much to study for. I have a test tomorrow and a test Thursday, a quiz today, a paper due next week, a test and a midterm next week, and I'm not even sure what else. *sighs*
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its okay nick if your stressed don't worry bout it it will makes us even more eager for your next installment get your rest and study hard. Good way to keep your priroties in order.
 
Thanks for understanding, guys! and thanks, GtV! :)

say, would anyone be interested in me putting up the songs that I listened to while I was writing each scene? like... almost like theme music? or a soundtrack kind of idea? just a thought. let me know what y'all think on it.
 
Yes!!! :D I thought I was the only one who writes while listening to music. ^_^ Totally put them up. Not that I'm going to be writing any romatic scenes, mind you. :p
 
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