There used to be a Narnia forum called "The Valiant Mouse Inne," where I was a member. (I was already using the name "Copperfox.") When it began to die down, I was fortunate enough to learn that THIS forum had lately gotten started. The first gave me some diversion when my FIRST wife had passed away, and this one did as much for me after my SECOND wife passed away.
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Copperfox
jasmine tarkheena
I use the name jasmine tarkheena on other forums, Narniaweb and The Lion's Call. I actually use it as a combination of my real name and a Narnia-related name. I kind of have wanted to be a Calormene, and my favorite character is Emeth. I relate so much to him as being someone who seeks the Truth.
Copperfox
Post 21 in your story: near the start, should "welcome" be in past tense?
Near the bottom: it might be better to say that Tirian and Jewell killed the Calormenes "IMPULSIVELY."
Near the bottom: it might be better to say that Tirian and Jewell killed the Calormenes "IMPULSIVELY."