A Game of Sabacc

Well, the idea has some potential, but the way it is written does not. Sorry.
I know you said this was just a pilot. Did you mean a draft? I had to force myself to read the two posts because the beginning wasn't that great. Partly because I really don't care how someone walks or moves. I just want to know what they're up to. I hope you edit it well.
 
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