Seaside Musings

First post!
:D

Alright, to the story...

Satisfied that her brief relaxation time would not be cut short, the Queen lay back and closed her eyes. Her hair waved quietly in the cool breeze coming in from the sea. Her nose flared at the sting of the fresh, salty smell of the azure waters. The waves were rolling in busily, grumbling loudly, but for all their rumbling, the beach was still peaceful. The sound of the waves was like a sweet, soothing melody, making her drowsy.
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I love this detail. Makes you really picture it well in your mind.

I also really like how much character you really pumped Susan with. Especially in fan fictions, it's hard sometimes to get the characteristics of the characters correct. I think you did a fantastic job, eh?

Don't let it be a one shot thing, NN - keep writing! :)​
 
wow, thanks :)
i didn't think i'd get a reply so fast :D thanks for your input!

and yes, im trying to work on some other stuff. we'll see how it goes :D
 
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