The City of Ember - What Was Never Told is Now Told by Me

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This story is entirely and completely (mostly) fan-fiction. All of these people and events are not true and are from my imagination and Jeanne DuPrau’s imagination only. No part of it is/was/will be true nor was it written by a published author (except for the very beginning). It is for mine and other fan’s enjoyment. Also, I must give credit to the author of the book, Jeanne DuPrau, for sparking an idea in my mind to write a fan fiction about what was never told in the book or in the movie. It would help you better understand what I’ve written here if you’ve actually read the published book by Jeanne DuPrau or seen the movie (based on the book) by someone whose name escapes me at the moment. If you don’t understand something, don’t be afraid to ask, for you shall be answered. With that being said—hope you enjoy!


"It's Ember," Lina whispered.

They could see the tiny bright streets crossing each other, and the squares, little chips of light, and the dark tops of buildings. Just beyond the edges was the immense darkness.

"Oh, our city, Doon. Our city is at the bottom of a hole!" She gazed down through the gulf, and all of what she had believed about the world began to break apart. "We were underground," she said. "Not just the Pipeworks. Everything!" She could hardly make sense of what she was saying.

Doon crouched on his hands and knees, looking over the edge. He squinted, trying to see minute specks that might be people. "What's happening down there?"

"Could they hear us if we shouted?"

"I don't think so. We're too far up."

"Maybe if they looked into the sky they'd see our candle," said Lina. "But no, I guess they wouldn't. The streetlamps would bee too bright."

"Somehow, we have to get word to them," said Doon, and that's when the idea came to Lina.

"Our message!" she cried. "We could send our message!"

And they did. From her pocket, Lina took the message that Doon had written, the one that was supposed to have gone to Clary, explaining everything. In small writing, they squeezed in this note at the top:

Dear People of Ember,
We came down the river from the Pipeworks and found the way to another place. It is green here and very big. Light comes from the sky. You must follow the instructions in this message and come on the river. Bring food with you. Come as quickly as you can.
~Lina Mayfleet and Doon Harrow


They wrapped the message in Doon's shirt and put a rock inside it. Then they stood in a row at the edge of the chasm, Doon in the middle holding Poppy's hand and Lina's. Lina took aim at the heart of the city, far beneath her feet. With all her strength, she cast the message into the darkness, and they watched as it plunged down and down.

"When do you expect they'll be coming?" Lina asked, once again facing Doon.

"As soon as they can. We should stay in this area for at least a day or so, and if they don't come, then..."

"Then what?" Lina asked fearfully, glancing at Poppy, who was skipping off in another direction. She scrambled after her sister and grasped her hand.

"We should try to find other civilizations, I think."

"You don't think there are actually other people out there?" A look of horror came over Lina's face. "Like...rabid people? People gone absolutely crazy with hunger? ...Cannibals?"

Doon grimaced and shook his head. “There might be, but I don't think we'll run into any of them," he said, for their sake.

Poppy began jumping up and down. "Wanna run wanna run wanna run!" she shrieked, tugging on Lina's hand.

"Not now, Poppy." Lina shushed her sister. "Me and Doon are trying to talk. We can have fun later."

Poppy started to whine and writhe, and Doon knelt down next to her face. "Hey Poppy," he cooed, "Lina doesn't know anything about fun. We're going to have some fun. We're going to play some tag. Ready? Set? Tag! You're it!" He tapped Poppy on the shoulder and took off running. Poppy tore out of Lina's grasp and dashed after Doon, giggling with delight. Lina crossed her arms over her chest and watched the two of them chase each other around; worried that Poppy would trip over lumps in the earth. After a couple moments she joined in, and she got tagged by Poppy, so she began running after Doon. She was faster than him and soon tagged him, and he gave up and they all fell in a tangled heap on the ground.

When Lina caught her breath, she stood up, brushing herself off. "Well that was fun, wasn't it?"

Doon was still sitting on the ground. He didn't answer. He was looking at Poppy, who was curled into a ball with her face out of sight. Doon pushed Poppy's hair out of her face and saw that her eyes were squeezed shut and her face was a slight green color.

"Lina, she doesn't look too good," Doon said, concerned. Lina knelt down once again and took her sister up in her arms.

"Poppy, what's wrong?" Lina whispered in her sister's ear. "What's the matter? Don’t you feel good?"

Poppy shook her tiny head and burst into a fit of coughing. Lina cuddled her and whispered the Voices in her ear, rocking her back and forth. Poppy soon fell asleep, and Lina set her down in the tall grass and covered her with her red Messenger's jacket. Then she looked up at Doon.

"Do you think she'll get better soon?" Lina asked.

Doon shrugged. "How should I know? I'm no doctor. Maybe some rest will do her good. In the meantime, we should wait for the other citizens of Ember to arrive."

Lina nodded somberly, staring at her sister's peaceful face. Then she looked at the big ball of light in the sky, and saw that it was in a different spot than it had been when it appeared. It was getting lower in the other direction. She wondered if it would disappear again, and the whole place would once again be dark. It seemed like the cycle in Ember, when, during daytime, the lights would be on all day, but then at night, the lights would turn off from nine at night to six in the morning. But this ball of light didn't have a generator controlling it. This ball of light seemed to control itself.

The sky began turning crimson, and the big ball of light sank lower behind the horizon. About half of it was still showing.

"It's going to get dark again." Doon said what she was thinking. Lina didn't answer, just sighed.

I miss by bed in Ember, Lina thought. I miss my bed, I miss my house, I miss my closet, I miss the yarn shop. I miss Mrs. Murdo, I miss Lizzie, but most of all I miss Granny. Oh Granny, if only you could see me now. What if she can see me now? Lina imagined that Granny was watching her from somewhere, smiling down on her, proud of her. She smiled with that warm information. Oh Granny, if only you knew how much I miss you. Oh yeah, and, thanks for the help, Granny. Without you I wouldn't be here.

With that thought she looked back up at the sky, which was pitch black by then, and lay down in the grass next to her sister. After a couple quiet moments, Doon lay down on the other side of Poppy.

"Doon?" Lina whispered. Doon grunted in reply. "Supposing the others don't come by tomorrow night?"

Doon sighed, rolling over to look at her. "What do you think will happen?"

"I don't know," Lina thought for a moment. "I think they will come."

"Well, you never know. Our message could've landed on someone's roof, or in a gutter, or anywhere. That's why, if they don't come by tomorrow evening, we have to leave here and..."

"And what?" Lina asked, her voice rising. "Why do you keep trailing off like that?" She dropped her voice back to a whisper after Poppy stirred a little in her sleep; for fear she would wake her younger sister up.

"I don't know. Go to sleep, Lina." Doon rolled over and said no more. Lina narrowed her eyes and looked up at the tiny little lights sprinkled across the sky.

“Doon,” Lina said again. Doon groaned this time. “I’m glad you’re with me.”

Doon reached out to grasp her hand. “I’m glad you’re with me, too.”

And with that, Lina slept.
 
Continued...

The next morning, the big ball of fire once again rose into the sky, and Lina woke up to find she was ravenously hungry. Poppy was up skipping around some trees that Doon was climbing. Was she the only one still asleep? It looked like it. She stood up and approached the other two.

“Morning, sleepyhead,” Doon teased, hopping down from a tree. Poppy squealed and ran over to squeeze Lina around the waist.

“Do we have any food left?” Lina asked, rubbing her stomach.

Doon shook his head, eyeing Poppy. “I’m afraid not. This little rascal decided to either eat it all or feed it to the large bugs this morning.” (When he said large bugs he really meant birds, but none of them knew what birds were.) Lina’s face fell, but Doon continued. “Anyhow, there’s still plenty of those purple fruits from yesterday. Over there on that bush.” He nodded once to a big spring of undergrowth in the east direction, and Lina followed his gaze. She sighed, realizing she would have to be content with that.

“I can’t wait till the others come with food,” Lina mumbled, plucking a purple fruit off the bush.

“Well, don’t expect to wait too much longer. It’s already nearly halfway through the day. If they don’t come soon we’re going to have to start off on our own.”

Lina stopped in her tracks, and the fruit fell from her mouth, mid-bite. “Halfway through the day?” she asked, shocked. Doon glanced at Poppy and nodded. Poppy licked her lips and ran over to the fruit bush, picking a fruit and handing it to Lina.

“Here go,” said Poppy, pushing the fruit into Lina’s hands. “’Nother one!”

Lina took hold of the fruit but didn’t eat it. “But—we—that’s—“ she stuttered, feeling rather stupid. Poppy picked another fruit and gave it to Lina, who didn’t pay much attention to it. “Couldn’t we stay another day?”

Doon’s dark eyebrows came together to make one large line. “We could try, but it wouldn’t do much good. There’s probably much more out there than we could ever get staying here in the same place. We might even run into civilization.”

Poppy picked another fruit and shoved it into Lina’s hands. Frustrated, Lina shouted, “Stop!” Poppy jumped, shuddered, sat down, and began to sob. Lina bit her lip, shot Doon a pleading glance, and sat down next to Poppy. “Sssh, ssh, it’s okay,” Lina comforted her sister, patting her on the back and handing her a fruit. Poppy took a bite, turned green, rolled over, and threw up in the grass.

Doon made a face, backed up a little, and asked, “Do you think it was the fruit or the fact that she was already sick?”

Even Lina backed up a little, pulling off her sister’s shawl and replying, “I don’t know: we haven’t vomited yet, and we ate plenty of the fruit. I bet it was her sickness.”

Poppy started crying some more, and smacked her sister on the top of her head. “No no no no no!!” she shrieked, stomping her feet. Lina sighed, picking up the spoiled shawl between thumb and forefinger and turning to Doon.

“Could you please watch her while I go wash this in the river?” Lina asked, taking a step towards the river. Doon nodded and sat down next to Poppy on the grass. Poppy was ripping up handfuls of grass and throwing them up in the air, despite having just vomited all she had eaten in the past day. Doon picked a couple pieces of grass out of Poppy’s hair while watching Lina dip the shawl in the river. As soon as the shawl was dripping wet, Lina pulled it out of the water and began wringing it out. “Too bad we don’t have any soap,” Doon heard Lina say as she finished wringing out the shawl. Lina sniffed it and scrunched up her nose. She held the shawl at arms length as she re-approached the other two.

“Cold, cold!” Poppy said, holding out her hands for her shawl. Lina shook her head.

“No Poppy, putting this on would only make you colder. It has to dry, first.” Lina hung the shawl from the tree, setting it to dry. “In the meantime, you need to get a wash yourself.”

Poppy squirmed as Lina took hold of her and started peeling off Poppy’s clothes. She shivered as Lina sat her down in the shallow river but soon began playing with the water, and occasionally splashed Lina with it. When Lina had had enough of the splashing, she pulled Poppy out and dried her best as she could. Then she put all of her clothes back on her, and Poppy was all clean and dry. Poppy ran over to the tree and started jumping with her hand outstretched, trying to get to her shawl. Doon reached up and grabbed it for her and put it on her, and she cuddled it and rolled around in the grass. But then Lina distracted her with some more fruit so that she wouldn’t get dirty again right after she had been washed. After that Doon watched Poppy while Lina washed up in the river, and then they swapped positions so that Lina watched Poppy while Doon washed up in the river. When that was finished they all picked some more fruit, feeling clean and refreshed and happy.

So they all sat in a circle, eating their fruit, until night began to fall that evening. Lina and Doon exchanged a glance and Doon said, “We’ll leave first thing tomorrow morning.” Lina felt a sick feeling in her stomach but didn’t say anything that would anger Doon. She could tell he was already impatient about leaving, and putting it off for a night was already pushing it. So that night there was the same routine—they watched the sun set and as soon as it was completely dark they went to sleep. But in the middle of the night they were awoken by noises.

“What’s that?” Lina whispered, taking hold of Poppy.

“It sounds like people,” Doon said. “But I can’t see anything in this rotten light.”

After a couple moments their eyes adjusted to the darkness and they could presently see shapes moving in the distance. Lina gasped and held Poppy closer, as Doon stood up and went over to investigate. Lina heard voices and could tell that whatever or whoever it was, it wasn’t going to cause any harm. After a couple minutes Doon came back over to her and whispered, “C’mon, Lina. Stand up. I’ve got a surprise for you.” Lina gasped as she approached the vague shapes. She could tell who it was. There was Mrs. Murdo, and Clary, and Doon’s father, and Lizzie (who threw her arms around her neck and hugged her), and some other kids from her school that she recognized, and loads of other people that she knew from Ember but couldn’t quite put a name to.

“They’re here?” Lina asked, grinning at Doon. He nodded. “They’re here!” She went about everyone, greeting them, even the people she didn’t know and never will know. Even the people she wasn’t too fond of! She was so glad everyone was there. Except for…

“Hey, where’s the mayor?” Doon asked no one in particular, saying what Lina was thinking once again.

Mrs. Murdo sighed. “He’s…no longer with us.”

“Neither is Looper,” Lizzie put in, with a snicker. “I can’t believe I ever liked him!”

Lina smiled and shook her head. “Well…” she trailed off and looked off to the east for the sunset. “The big, round ball of fire should be coming up soon!”

“What are you talking about, child?” Clary asked.

“Watch.”

Everyone turned their heads to the east sky and watched as a small sliver of orange began sliding its way up out of the ground. “It’s like magic!” Lizzie exclaimed, watching with her eyes open like a child’s. Lina nodded, glancing at Doon, who winked at her. She giggled and looked down at Poppy, who was clapping her hands excitedly. Mrs. Murdo picked Poppy up and twirled her around.

“Oh, careful,” Doon warned her. “You wouldn’t want her to vomit all over you, like she did yesterday. She’s a little sick.”

“Eew,” Mrs. Murdo grimaced at Poppy and set her back on the ground. Lina, Doon, and Poppy all began laughing together. Then Lizzie joined in, and a couple kids from school, and Clary, and Doon’s father, and eventually Mrs. Murdo did, too.

By the time they stopped laughing the big round ball of light was all the way in the sky, although it was still far east.

“Well, should we go, then?” Doon asked, hefting his pack and glancing at Lina. Lina nodded in agreement.

“Why, go where?” Lizzie and Mrs. Murdo chorused, looking confusedly at Lina and Doon. Doon shrugged.

“I don’t know—just somewhere. We should try to find civilization or something. It can’t be good to stay in the same place for a long time. Pretty soon we’re all going to run out of food. There’s not many of those purple fruits left, and with everyone here they’re going to disappear real quick. If just about everyone’s here that should mean there’s about…four hundred of us, am I right?” He looked at Lina, who nodded. “And anyway, since we don’t have a mayor around to tell us what to do anymore…” Doon trailed off, looking around at everyone’s confused faces.

Mr. Harrow spoke up. “That’s my boy, taking control of the situation,” he said, smiling at his son in a fatherly way. Doon smiled back, and continued.

“So I propose we take a vote. Who votes for going on to see what we can find here?” Just about everyone raised their hands. He shot an “I told you so” look at Lina, who rolled her eyes in a joking way. “And who votes for staying here in the same place and doing nothing?” A couple of strangers raised their hands, but soon lowered them again once they saw how very few they were. Doon sighed with content. “Well, its settled, then. If everyone has everything they need and everyone’s present then we shall be off!” He took Lina’s and Poppy’s hands and they all set off, not knowing where they were going or where they were coming from. But they all had one thing in their hearts, and that was this: We are the citizens of Ember, and we are united and strong. We will find a way through this, and we’ll do it together.

Then again, that was before they came across Sparks. But that, my friend, is a different story. An entirely different story altogether.
 
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Continued just a lil more...

And from there I think you can basically guess what happened after that—they came across the people of Sparks, and all of that Misery Business happened, and so on, and so on… I’ve just, I’ve always wondered what happened after they sent the message down to Ember—I’ve wondered how they got there and what they had to go through and whatnot. So I guess this fills up that empty space. I don’t know about you but I liked it!
 
Hi Maddie! Because I was interested in the subject, I read this new story of yours... well, the first post so far. While I was reading it, I realize you are a good writer. Your story reads well and you developed it very smoothly. I know what you were writing about because I've seen the movie, but not read the book.
I thought you did a great job with it, and you posted it in a readable format (with paragraphs separated and stuff). You did a great job with this. I will definitely read it whenever you post. Great job!
 
Cool story! I just watched the movie, and I also wondered what happened after they sent the message. This does a good job of bridging the gap. Why did Poppy get sick, though? You never answered that. ;)
 
Cool story! I just watched the movie, and I also wondered what happened after they sent the message. This does a good job of bridging the gap. Why did Poppy get sick, though? You never answered that. ;)

Well I never knew why she got sick, but in the second book it says that she was sick. Although it never explained why. :D So I just figured that I could put she just...got sick! LOL. ;)
 
I just watched the movie and I think this fits it pretty well.;)

Now I need to read the book that goes with it... I love it when movies have books to go with them.... Or rather books have movies to go with them.:p;)
 
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