Rache_san
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So, howdy. This is a story I'm currently writing... my friend and I came up with our own version of NaNoWriMo, called AlmoNaNoWriMo, because we felt the need to change a few rules as to adjust to our school schedules... anyways, it's like, from today until December 31st... and this is the story I'm doing for it. I have a chapter so far, but I'm curious to see what others think about it! I haven't shown the entire thing to anyone before, so yeah... here's the first chapter.
Swirls
There it stood. That little ominous piece of ripped paper. I spotted it immediately as I groaned and leaned over to kick my cat, Beau, off the bed. Why did it torment me like this? Why did it exist? In my own room!? Leaned up against my stack of sci-fi, fiction and vampire romance library books by my red, bulky flashlight and the blue bottle of Fabreze room freshener that was on the wooden table near my bed, it held itself up high with one simple half-sentence on it, written in my Mother's handwriting.
Of Silence waved only at Sara.
I stared at that paper, then to my door. How did it get in here? The door was still locked to keep Lewis out. The windows had been sealed shut for a very long time, and nothing else was out of place. It was just there. Whatever small, trivial thoughts had crossed my mind when I woke up were driven out as I saw it.
As I stared at that small, mindboggling paper, I heard my Father go into the bathroom nearby. Maybe it was Lewis. Either way, it was time to get up. Ignoring the further mystery of this random paper, I dragged my feet to my oak dresser and fuddled around to find my grey capris and favorite band t-shirt. Taking the necklace of red organza that had red and black velvet beads on it off of my bin and tying it around my neck, I grabbed the Special Kitty catfood and filled Beau's bowl up. After deciding he would not starve today, I left my room and ran through the hall to the kitchen to get there before anyone else. I would fix my hair and brush my teeth later. There was no way I was about to miss out on a good breakfast.
"Hey, Megnut," my Father said as he walked out of his room and saw me leaning against the counter in the kitchen through the hallway.
Feeling off today, I simply smiled at him as he headed toward the bathroom. It would be impolite for me to say anything to him, because I had a mouthful of waffle.
"Hey, dweeb," Lewis said as he walked past me to get to the refrigerator. He was your typical 19-year-old annoyance. I glared at him with a look of askance as I munched down on the waffle, showing off a slight smirk to wait for his horror.
"Oh," he gasped as he stood up straight after frantically searching through the freezer. "You didn't."
"Yeah, I did," I replied in a laughing voice after taking the last bite, prepared to run for it. He simply walked past me to the other side of the room, reached up to grab the spatula off the hanging rack and came at me with it. I flew out of the room, tearing across the house, running in circles. He stubbed his toe on a chair as we ran through the computer room that held the ancient piano and dining table for the second time around, and I was able to make my escape to the back bathroom.
"I'll get you later!" I heard him yell from across the house. Dad would chew him out for that.
I laughed at my near escape as I stood in the tiny room, then searched to find the light switch. Grabbing the nearest brush I skillfully combed through the left side of my hair as I held the toothbrush in my other hand, thankful that my electric one was back there. Looking up in the mirror, I had to stop. Every single time I saw that face it hurt. I was a constant reminder to myself, a spitting image of my late Mother. It had been almost two years since her mysterious death, and I could not bring myself to stand that face any longer. I had her piercing brown eyes, her soft, wavy brown hair, her slender nose, her small mouth. Every part of me was her. I do not know how my Father stood it.
Fighting back unwanted tears, I hurried to get the rest of my hair decent and gently pushed the door open, going back to the kitchen. Luckily, Lewis had found the salmon and decided to make a salmon and mayonnaise sandwich instead of beat me to a bloody pulp with the plastic spatula. That would have hurt. I sidled past him to get some milk out of the refrigerator, only to find he had finished it off, leaving the lemonade. My most hated drink.
"Thank you," I spewed out in the most sarcastic voice I could muster up. I guess he got his payback after all.
"What's all this?" I heard my Father's strong voice come from behind us. He had just walked in, hearing my saracasm and knew that Lewis was being a jerk again.
"He drank all the milk," I pathetically sighed a complaint.
"Drink water," Lewis rudely suggested before Dad could get a word in.
"Hey, now," he interrupted our feud. "I'll get you some Milo's on the way back from work, alright? You two behave today," he said, walking out of the kitchen and down the hall towards the living room. "If that's possible," he added.
"Jerk," I muttered to Lewis when I heard the door lock.
"Fruitcake," he retorted. I gave him a smack on the shoulder and in return got an even harder one. After making myself some Peppermint Tea I pushed through the swinging red door that only went one way and sat down at the dining table, getting out my history, science, math, Bible, and literature books. The Lord of the Rings study could wait until tonight after I finished the latest chapter, "Flotsam and Jetsam".
The math was not all too hard. I had gotten better lately, going from having a tutor to getting a different, self-teaching book. History was more reading, this time depth about Good Queen Bess and England's defeat over Spain. Science was more Biology. Ick. Bible was another study on the Old Testament, about the lessons to be learned from Ruth. My literature was the best of all, though. Poetry from Poe, Frost, to a short story from Katherine Mansfield. I was addicted to words, and a complete novel junky. My studies seemed easier than they should have been.
It took me about three hours to finish up, but after I did I grabbed my Nikon camera that was a present from Aunt Sophie three Christmas' ago and went to go outside, slowing down as I passed by the TV to annoy Lewis again. Chaining the front door behind me and flipping the lock on the screen door, I looked across the yard and gasped. Apparently, Dad had called his friends to help him move in some monkey grass. The entire yard was full of it. As I walked off the porch, I stood on the marble level and walked to the end of it towards the gated backyard. The flowers were beginning to bloom, and a white blossom had appeared on the tree infront of me. It was my Mother's favorite flower, her favorite tree. I picked the single flower, the only one I could spot on it after searching the tree, and gently placed it in my hair, turning to look in the reflection of the front windows. It looked good. I cringed as I saw my face again, never getting used to it. Taking my camera, I went over to the tree again and snapped a close up of a small white bud.
Looking across the yard, there was not much else to take pictures of. I looked to my left, towards the mass of bushes and saw the red berries appearing. They were coming out to say hello to the sun, too. Trudging through the thorny bushes, stopping to say hello to Lewis's turtle, Leo, I took a couple of pictures of the berries from different angles. It was early afternoon, and the sun was blinding most of my views.
Giving up on my yard, I put the camera back in its case, strapped it around my shoulder and got my tall purple bike from the front porch. It was a pleasant ride to the park. I always loved the feel of the wind in my face. Hardly anyone was out this time of day, other than Mr. Lawler and the other seniors that did not have anything else to do but yardwork. I didn't have to avoid other kids, or people driving home because they were all at work, or school.
It was eight blocks from my house to the park, so it did not take too long. I slowed down as I approached the park, going up the driveway and avoiding the dirt hill to come down on the grassy part of it. I softly rode around the running track twice then went up the sharp hill to the swings, forced to get off my bike and roll it up there. I could not help but smile when I saw they had all showed, once again, as they did every day.
Andrea and Joy were my age. Drea had dark brown curly hair, with green eyes and a strong spirit. Joy had the punk look going on, with a short brown pixie, but her eyes were the "soft, fall in if you aren't paying attention" kind of brown, with her gorgeous dark skin. Guys went insane over her. We had been friends since we were seven, and knew each oher like sisters. Monika was a fairly new friend, having only known her for three years, also being a year younger than us. She had delicate, thin, shoulder-length wispy black hair, and blue eyes. Chester was the oddball of the group, being the only guy, and two years younger than us. To make him even more curious, he was your average light skinned, redhead, freckle faced dork. We love him, though. Together, the five of us made up our own special homeschooled group. After having met at this park around this time for so long, cops stopped asking why we were not in school.
"Meghan!" Drea shouted as she ran up and hugged me. "You're late! Why?"
"Math," I told her while rolling my eyes. She inspected me, looking first in my eyes then pulling away and looking at my entire body. I could not tell what she was looking for, if anything. She hid things very well.
"Is that why you look so beat? Math?"
Swirls
There it stood. That little ominous piece of ripped paper. I spotted it immediately as I groaned and leaned over to kick my cat, Beau, off the bed. Why did it torment me like this? Why did it exist? In my own room!? Leaned up against my stack of sci-fi, fiction and vampire romance library books by my red, bulky flashlight and the blue bottle of Fabreze room freshener that was on the wooden table near my bed, it held itself up high with one simple half-sentence on it, written in my Mother's handwriting.
Of Silence waved only at Sara.
I stared at that paper, then to my door. How did it get in here? The door was still locked to keep Lewis out. The windows had been sealed shut for a very long time, and nothing else was out of place. It was just there. Whatever small, trivial thoughts had crossed my mind when I woke up were driven out as I saw it.
As I stared at that small, mindboggling paper, I heard my Father go into the bathroom nearby. Maybe it was Lewis. Either way, it was time to get up. Ignoring the further mystery of this random paper, I dragged my feet to my oak dresser and fuddled around to find my grey capris and favorite band t-shirt. Taking the necklace of red organza that had red and black velvet beads on it off of my bin and tying it around my neck, I grabbed the Special Kitty catfood and filled Beau's bowl up. After deciding he would not starve today, I left my room and ran through the hall to the kitchen to get there before anyone else. I would fix my hair and brush my teeth later. There was no way I was about to miss out on a good breakfast.
"Hey, Megnut," my Father said as he walked out of his room and saw me leaning against the counter in the kitchen through the hallway.
Feeling off today, I simply smiled at him as he headed toward the bathroom. It would be impolite for me to say anything to him, because I had a mouthful of waffle.
"Hey, dweeb," Lewis said as he walked past me to get to the refrigerator. He was your typical 19-year-old annoyance. I glared at him with a look of askance as I munched down on the waffle, showing off a slight smirk to wait for his horror.
"Oh," he gasped as he stood up straight after frantically searching through the freezer. "You didn't."
"Yeah, I did," I replied in a laughing voice after taking the last bite, prepared to run for it. He simply walked past me to the other side of the room, reached up to grab the spatula off the hanging rack and came at me with it. I flew out of the room, tearing across the house, running in circles. He stubbed his toe on a chair as we ran through the computer room that held the ancient piano and dining table for the second time around, and I was able to make my escape to the back bathroom.
"I'll get you later!" I heard him yell from across the house. Dad would chew him out for that.
I laughed at my near escape as I stood in the tiny room, then searched to find the light switch. Grabbing the nearest brush I skillfully combed through the left side of my hair as I held the toothbrush in my other hand, thankful that my electric one was back there. Looking up in the mirror, I had to stop. Every single time I saw that face it hurt. I was a constant reminder to myself, a spitting image of my late Mother. It had been almost two years since her mysterious death, and I could not bring myself to stand that face any longer. I had her piercing brown eyes, her soft, wavy brown hair, her slender nose, her small mouth. Every part of me was her. I do not know how my Father stood it.
Fighting back unwanted tears, I hurried to get the rest of my hair decent and gently pushed the door open, going back to the kitchen. Luckily, Lewis had found the salmon and decided to make a salmon and mayonnaise sandwich instead of beat me to a bloody pulp with the plastic spatula. That would have hurt. I sidled past him to get some milk out of the refrigerator, only to find he had finished it off, leaving the lemonade. My most hated drink.
"Thank you," I spewed out in the most sarcastic voice I could muster up. I guess he got his payback after all.
"What's all this?" I heard my Father's strong voice come from behind us. He had just walked in, hearing my saracasm and knew that Lewis was being a jerk again.
"He drank all the milk," I pathetically sighed a complaint.
"Drink water," Lewis rudely suggested before Dad could get a word in.
"Hey, now," he interrupted our feud. "I'll get you some Milo's on the way back from work, alright? You two behave today," he said, walking out of the kitchen and down the hall towards the living room. "If that's possible," he added.
"Jerk," I muttered to Lewis when I heard the door lock.
"Fruitcake," he retorted. I gave him a smack on the shoulder and in return got an even harder one. After making myself some Peppermint Tea I pushed through the swinging red door that only went one way and sat down at the dining table, getting out my history, science, math, Bible, and literature books. The Lord of the Rings study could wait until tonight after I finished the latest chapter, "Flotsam and Jetsam".
The math was not all too hard. I had gotten better lately, going from having a tutor to getting a different, self-teaching book. History was more reading, this time depth about Good Queen Bess and England's defeat over Spain. Science was more Biology. Ick. Bible was another study on the Old Testament, about the lessons to be learned from Ruth. My literature was the best of all, though. Poetry from Poe, Frost, to a short story from Katherine Mansfield. I was addicted to words, and a complete novel junky. My studies seemed easier than they should have been.
It took me about three hours to finish up, but after I did I grabbed my Nikon camera that was a present from Aunt Sophie three Christmas' ago and went to go outside, slowing down as I passed by the TV to annoy Lewis again. Chaining the front door behind me and flipping the lock on the screen door, I looked across the yard and gasped. Apparently, Dad had called his friends to help him move in some monkey grass. The entire yard was full of it. As I walked off the porch, I stood on the marble level and walked to the end of it towards the gated backyard. The flowers were beginning to bloom, and a white blossom had appeared on the tree infront of me. It was my Mother's favorite flower, her favorite tree. I picked the single flower, the only one I could spot on it after searching the tree, and gently placed it in my hair, turning to look in the reflection of the front windows. It looked good. I cringed as I saw my face again, never getting used to it. Taking my camera, I went over to the tree again and snapped a close up of a small white bud.
Looking across the yard, there was not much else to take pictures of. I looked to my left, towards the mass of bushes and saw the red berries appearing. They were coming out to say hello to the sun, too. Trudging through the thorny bushes, stopping to say hello to Lewis's turtle, Leo, I took a couple of pictures of the berries from different angles. It was early afternoon, and the sun was blinding most of my views.
Giving up on my yard, I put the camera back in its case, strapped it around my shoulder and got my tall purple bike from the front porch. It was a pleasant ride to the park. I always loved the feel of the wind in my face. Hardly anyone was out this time of day, other than Mr. Lawler and the other seniors that did not have anything else to do but yardwork. I didn't have to avoid other kids, or people driving home because they were all at work, or school.
It was eight blocks from my house to the park, so it did not take too long. I slowed down as I approached the park, going up the driveway and avoiding the dirt hill to come down on the grassy part of it. I softly rode around the running track twice then went up the sharp hill to the swings, forced to get off my bike and roll it up there. I could not help but smile when I saw they had all showed, once again, as they did every day.
Andrea and Joy were my age. Drea had dark brown curly hair, with green eyes and a strong spirit. Joy had the punk look going on, with a short brown pixie, but her eyes were the "soft, fall in if you aren't paying attention" kind of brown, with her gorgeous dark skin. Guys went insane over her. We had been friends since we were seven, and knew each oher like sisters. Monika was a fairly new friend, having only known her for three years, also being a year younger than us. She had delicate, thin, shoulder-length wispy black hair, and blue eyes. Chester was the oddball of the group, being the only guy, and two years younger than us. To make him even more curious, he was your average light skinned, redhead, freckle faced dork. We love him, though. Together, the five of us made up our own special homeschooled group. After having met at this park around this time for so long, cops stopped asking why we were not in school.
"Meghan!" Drea shouted as she ran up and hugged me. "You're late! Why?"
"Math," I told her while rolling my eyes. She inspected me, looking first in my eyes then pulling away and looking at my entire body. I could not tell what she was looking for, if anything. She hid things very well.
"Is that why you look so beat? Math?"