The Basilisk of Krzywe Koło

SingingDryad~

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Ok everyone.Since i've been promising for over a month i'm gonna post my book here-and i've been failing for over a month(sorry,its the combined effects of my stupidity and balky computers).So while i try to post my book here,i thought i'de post something a little different in the meantime.
This is a real Polish legend,taking place in Warsaw.PLEASE READ THE FOLLOWING:I edited the legend,adding some things,taking away others.
And if its awful,please say so.I know my style is flawed(even though this whole idea was rather spur of the moment).Ok,rant over.Here goes!

THE BASILISK
There once lived a monster, deep in one of the cellars of Krzywe Koło of Old Warsaw. A nameless terror, people whispered about it at night. Children were told to stay away from Krzywe Koło, away from the locked vault. But not all listened…

See how she rears her head,
And rolls about her dreadful eyes,
To drive all virtue out, or look it dead!
‘Twas sure this basilisk sent Temple thence-Jonathan Swift

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It was the stifling hot summer of 1532, and Warsaw was at its full bloom of festivities and holy days. The city inns and even the lowest hostels were bursting at the seams with all the travelers stopping there, and the Royal Guard was having an extra hard job stopping all the tavern brawls and robberies. The streets were never empty, even in the dead of night.

The Rynek Glówny, come alive with all the new items merchants were selling, had become a place of the highest interest. In the Academy, even the most uptight professors gladly went with their students to the nearest pub for a tankard of mead or beer, their heated, loud discussions on astronomy and mathematics a constant source of irritation for neighbors.

And so arrived the day before the Equinox Festival. The city was in a blur as everyone readied themselves for the festivities.

The entertainers diligently practiced their feats, while red-cheeked women bent over their cooking, adding dashes of cinnamon or clove in kitchens. The streets and buildings were adorned with flowers, and everything had taken that atmosphere of something fresh,something exciting.

The Royal Family also frequently rode around Warsaw in their beautiful carriage, while their subjects bowed and waved.

And among all this excitement, one little family also was getting ready. In a smaller, shabbier part of Warsaw, a father and his two little children lived quietly.

The tata, Boleslav, was a large, kind man who had lost the use of both his legs in an accident some years before, leaving him a cripple who refused to fully accept his disability.

His two little children were his pride and joy, as his wife had died from a smallpox epidemic only five years back. He still kept a small carving of her he had made by his bed. Sometimes he thought he could almost hear his beloved calling from the Heavens, comforting him in times of need.

Eight-year-old Stas had inherited his dark blonde hair, round face and brown eyes from his mother, but the steadfastness was his father’s doing.

Little Bronka was only six, and already a beauty. Her wavy gold hair hung down her back, and two bright azure eyes glittered like stars against her rosy face.

This family was very close, and all of them were excited about the upcoming Equinox.


So on the morning of the Festival, Stas and Bronka piled onto their father’s bed. The bedroom was cramped, just like the other two rooms in the tiny house. The walls were bare except for a small wooden cross above the bed, by which the family prayed every evening. The faint smell of wildflowers hung everywhere.

“Tato, wake up!” Pleaded Bronka and Stas, shaking their father by the shoulders.
Boleslav cracked one blue eyes open, while the rest of his face remained hidden by the blanket.

“Hm? Oh well you know, I was thinking we’d stay home and-“ Boleslav began, his voice muffled. His eyes were struggling not to crinkle in a smile, but his children didn’t see that.

“Oh no! Tatusiu please no!” Cried Bronka, her face ashen.

Boleslav burst out laughing, hugging his two children. “I was joking, you two. No need to worry! Lets get up and dressed, then we’ll go!”

“Hooray!” Shouted Bronka, jumping from the bed and dashing to the room she shared with Stas, her footfalls light as a kitten’s.

Boleslav sat up, and stood, propping himself up with his two crutches. Stas helped him limp to the kitchen, a small, well-lit room, where Bronka was fruitlessly trying to reach a high shelf.

Stas immediately ran to help her, while Boleslav watched him proudly, with a note of sadness in his tired eyes.

Ever since Boleslav’s accident and the death of his wife, Stas had been the main breadwinner of the family. Boleslav worked at home, as an ironsmith, but it wasn’t enough. Bronka and Stas, if not busy with minding the house, often helped him. Boleslav, however, always tried to shoo them outside as much as possible, to play with the other children. He felt guilty, taking away his children’s free time, even though he valued their help.

The children, though young, were strong and intelligent, and Boleslav always made it a point to introduce them to all his customers.

But today there was no work to be done, a welcome change in the monotonous routine of the weekdays.
Boleslav, Bronka and Stas left the house in high sprits. It was only a short walk to the Rynek, but there was so much to see on the way that it took much longer.

Finally, they reached the old city walls, where the stoic Barbakan still towered over the other buildings. Passing through the gate, Stas glanced curiously around there were not only Poles here. He also saw many Jews-the second largest group in Warsaw. Right now they were praying, and their voices rose up, mingling with the singing of a Catholic monk nearby.

Women, arrayed in their best clothes, flitted to and fro, their bright flowered skirts swishing behind them.

The men were also in finery-the nobles in long silk żupans and high boots, the poorer in starched collars and embroidered shirts. Everyone was laughing and having a good time, and the muffled laughter of children running along the walls rang like birdsong.

Bronka and Stas stayed with Boleslav, holding his strong arms against the steadily growing crowds.

When they reached one of the alleys leading to the Rynek, Bronka laughed and clapped at some of the entertainers, the kuglarze. Juggling their colorful little balls high in the air, the minstrels sang well-remembered songs. From an open window a beautiful young woman’s sweet voice could be heard.

Pushing their way through, the trio managed to get to the center of the Rynek. Booths and curiosities surrounded them from all around, and the children could hardly keep still with excitement.

“All right, you remember the rules.” Boleslav said sternly.

“Oh yes, we know! No talking to strangers…” Bronka chirruped.

“And if we get lost we go and wait for you at the entrance of the Barbakan.” Finished Stas.

Boleslav nodded, satisfied. “I’ll give you some money-three złoty.” He said, dumping the coins in Stas’ outstretched palm.
Before Boleslav could even blink, Stas and Bronka had disappeared in the throngs of people. He laughed. “Oh those children. Let them play.” He thought, hobbling towards one of the booths.
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Thats all for now!I'll post pronounciation rules in just a sec.
 
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Thanks Glen!:)

PRONOUCIATION(pretty simple,actually):
1.Boleslav(originally Bolesław)-BOL-EH-SLAV.
2.Stas(originally Staś)STA-sh
3.Bronka(same)BR-on*-KAH
4.Sigismund(originally Zygmunt)SEE-GI-zmund
Now we're in for a toughie!
Krzywe Koło(translation:Crooked Circle)
RZ = Same hard zh as Z/dot (do not pronounce the R)
Y = Always used as a vowel, sounds like the i in IT
WE-VEH
So thats the first word down pat,guys!:D
Now for Kołó
K-C as in CAT.
O-soft oh
Ł-W as is WHY
So Krzywe Koło is good!;)
Hope it wasn't too complicated!Updates coming soon!

*on-nasal,as in French bon.
 
Good writing and a very original story. I like the fact that it is taking place in Poland. We hardly have stories here that take place in a real place (other than London or America, lol!)

There is just one thing that (to me) did not fit in. You said that Stas is 8 years old, but yet he works as an ironsmith. That is hard work and I don't think Stas is old enough to do it well and be the main breadwinner. At 8 years old, he would not have the strength to lift the heavy metals or even the hammer to hit metal with metal with enough force to make something decent. I think that if Stas were maybe 15 or 16 it would work better. Just a thought.

Anyway, the writing is good and I'm already curious about what happens next.
 
"Rynek Glowny" means the main marketplace, does it not? I see a similarity to corresponding Russian words. As for the Equinox festival: did sixteenth-century Poles really make a big occasion out of a purely secular festival of changing seasons?
 
Barbarian King:Yes,thank you for pointing that out.No,Stas is not an ironsmith,but he often helps them.He's like an apprentice.And even being only 8,he is pretty strong.;)
Also,he does odd jobs to keep some income coming.Bronka often helps too.

Copperfox:No,i don't think such a festival existed(and even if it did,i don't think the Poles would make such a big deal out of it).However,there is a Spring Festival,during which we burn the Marzanna,a human-like doll symbolizing winter.You can read about it on the Internet.:)
Oh yeah,and Rynek Główny is Main Marketplace.

Updates soon,everybody.And thank you for reading so far!!!:D
 
Update!Dun dun dun!:p

Meanwhile, Stas and Bronka were debating what to do first. Three złoty was just enough to buy a small trinket, or some sweets. The mouthwatering aroma of pączki reached Stas’ nose, and he licked his lips.

“C’mon, look!” Urged Bronka, tugging his arm. Just a few feet away there stood a small ring of people, watching a dancing bear. Bronka’s eyes darkened.

“That’s mean, using a bear as a…as a toy.” She sniffed. Stas was about to comment, when suddenly-

“On the contrary, I think its great fun!” Said a voice behind them.

Stas and Bronka turned to see a boy of about ten years, with a mop of curly brown hair and mischievous brown eyes.

“Hullo Janek.” Said Stas guardedly. Bronka only glared.

Janek was a little robber, a scourge to the greater Warsaw. Always coming up with some scheme or another, he was the envy of most children-and the absolute horror of the mothers.
Stas moderately liked him, but Bronka had never tolerated Janek.

“So what are you two doing?” Asked Janek, rocking back and forth on his toes. His eyes wandered over the stalls as he spoke, no doubt plotting some petty robbery.

“Having fun.” Stas answered mildly.

“At least we were until you came along.” Muttered Bronka, but Stas shushed her.

Janek smirked. “What are you scared of something?”

“Scared of what’s going on in your head.” Bronka shot back.

Janek absently picked at his dirty thumbnail.
“So-“ He purred. “You wouldn’t be afraid to go down to Krzywe Koło, would you?”

Bronka and Stas stiffened at the mention of the name.
“Well?” Prompted Janek.

Bronka shook her head. “We’re not supposed to go there. Our tata says so.”

“You always listen to what your tata says?” Scoffed Janek.

Bronka nodded, as if it were the most obvious thing in the world.

“Baby.” Said Janek, grinning when he saw Bronka bite her lip.

“Why do you want to go to Krzywe Koło anyway?” Stas broke in, hoping to calm the other two.

“All the other boys have done it. Some even stayed there for more than an hour. And one even got a bracelet! Out of solid gold! Do you know how much the…money would help your family?”

Stas clenched his fists. Janek had hit a nerve.

“Are you suggesting anything?” Stas challenged.

Janek stared at him defiantly. “I know you’re family is very poor, Stas. Everyone knows. Now if the boys would find out that the poor boy is also a coward…” Janek shook his head in mock-sympathy.

Bronka watched, horrified. “Don’t listen to him, Stas! He wants us to get in trouble!”

“Oh the angel of innocence has spoken!” Janek continued, and Bronka fell silent.

Stas looked down at the ground, thinking. Bronka and Janek watched anxiously.

“Fine. We’ll go, but only for a little while.” Stas decided.

Janek grinned.

Bronka stifled a cry of disbelief. “Stas! What have you done?”

The children wove their way through the swarms of people.

First Janek, grinning like a maniac, then stony-faced Stas, and finally Bronka, who was angrily wiping her eyes to stop the tears from spilling onto her cheeks.

Finally, they reached the mouth of Krzywe Koło. Stas cautiously peeked into the street- it was empty, and very quiet. Near the end lurked the dreaded vault, its rusted doors locked with chains.

Stas, Janek and Bronka crept down the dim street, until they reached the vault. Janek and Stas pulled and tugged on the chains until they loosened, and with a tremendous groaning, the doors creaked open.

The strong stench of brimstone made the children cough and sputter.
Worn stairs descended into a yawning blackness, and a chill ran down Bronka’s and Stas’ spines. Janek was ecstatic, and he immediately entered, a cloud of dust rising as his foot touched the first step.

“C’mon!” He whispered. “We’ll still be able to see everything. And you promised!”

Stas reluctantly followed Janek. Bronka hesitated, wishing Boleslav would find them now, punish them, hit them- just stop them from going to the Krzywe Koło!

Just before she stepped after the boys, Bronka took off her amber bracelet, the one her mother had worn, the one Boleslav had made.

If he were looking for them and happened to stumble upon it, he would hopefully recognize it- Bronka uttered a quick prayer, before entering the bone-numbing chillness of the vault. The bracelet lay in the sunlight right next to the entrance, glittering faintly.

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More pronounciation(this is getting fun!):

ZŁOTY=Z-woh-TI

TATA(Dad)=Tah-tah (the word changes depending when you're using it,like tato,tacie etc.But thats rather complicated,and this isn't a Polish language thread!)

PĄCZKI=P-nasal ON-CH-kee

JANEK=YAAA-neck
 
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At least two hours passed, and Boleslav was starting to worry. He was waiting at the Barbakan, the agreed meeting place.
So where were Stas and Bronka?

He once more scanned the people milling around, but it was nigh impossible. Boleslav tried to calm himself, sitting down in an alcove.

Near him stood one of the ironsmiths, his friend named Sigismund, a tall, broad-shouldered man with shifty green eyes and hollow cheeks.

“Perhaps they got lost?” Sigismund suggested, crossing and uncrossing his arms.

Boleslav shook his head no. “They know this area too well. The only logical explanation is that something happened to them…” He looked once more.

Nothing.

“They surely didn’t get robbed or anything. Bronka’s screams would have gotten everybody’s attention before any thief could even take a step away.” Sigismund said, attempting to lighten the mood.

Boleslav offered a tight little smile, and continued searching through the sea of people. He climbed onto one of the walls of the Barbakan, struggling with his crutches. Finally he stood a little higher, giving a better view.

“We should ask someone if they’ve seen them.” Sigismund said,glancing around.

Boleslav’s heart sank as it dawned what nearly impossible task that was. There must have been at least a thousand people there. Two little children were bound to go unnoticed.
Where to start looking?

“I’ll start looking, you stay here in case they come back.” Sigismund suggested.

Boleslav nodded in thanks, and settled down to wait. Sigismund disappeared into the mass of people, his bobbing head barely visible among hundreds of others.

Boleslav sighed, and settled down to wait, though nervously.
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Meanwhile the three kids weren’t having to good luck.

As Janek said, they had crept down the dust-covered stairwell, nearly killing themselves by tripping in the gloom.

Bronka was tightly clutching Stas’ icy hand, while he held on to Janek’s shirt. The three of them stopped at the bottom of the stairs, hardly able to see anything.

The faint slivers of light from the open gates illuminated parts of the room-or whatever they were in.
A high-ceilinged room, with stone demons carved onto pillars supporting the walls. Made of old, old brick, the room was very cold, a stark change after the dryness up above.

“Can’t we go back?” Whimpered Bronka.

“Shut up, baby.” Hissed Janek’s voice in the darkness. Stas slowly shuffled forward, his hands groping blindly.

“Where do we go?” He asked. „We can’t see anything.”

Bronka muttered something about hairy spiders.

“If we see a hairy spider, I’ll drop it on your head.” Threatened Janek angrily. “This way!” And he grabbed Stas’s hand, pulling him farther into the shadows.

The children’s pitter-patter footsteps echoed unnaturally loud in the long-forgotten rooms. Running their hands along the walls, they figured the first room had branched off into many separate corridors. They must be in one of them, a very low, wide one, judging by the times they had hit thier heads against the ceiling.

The children continued walking for at least ten minutes, the tunnel often changing direction.

Finally, Bronka dug her heels into the ground.

“This is far enough!” She pleaded. “Lets go back, or we’ll get lost.”

Janek started to protest, but Stas cut him off.

“Bronka’s right. Lets go back.”

Janek, muttering and groaning, reluctantly agreed. The three children turned around, intending to go back. They started the agonizing journey.

Ten minutes.

Fifteen.

Twenty.

Twenty-five.

The corridors seemed endless, and forks continued to show up. Stas and Janek were now walking blindly, with no idea which way to go.

They stopped, the horrible truth dawning on them.

“We’re lost.” Announced Stas. His voice echoed, jumping back at them, laughing at them.

Lost. Lost. Lost… In a maze of tunnels under Warsaw,in the dark.

With a monster most likely lurking nearby.
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Updates coming soon!You guys like it so far?:)
 
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Oh there'll be more scariness,i assure you...*horror music*
Updates soon,i hope i get some comments from other members.*starts editing chapters to post in a while*
 
Next part,with that some new characters.Hope you like it!:)

Sigismund elbowed his way through the crowds, heading towards the Barbakan. His search had been fruitless so far. This called for Boleslav’s help, regardless of his disability, which would slow their progress.

Sigismund spied his friend’s bulky silhouette sitting on the Barbakan walls, holding a spire for support as he leaned over to scan the people.

“Sigismund! Any luck?” Boleslav called hopefully.
Regretfully Sigismund shook his head, and Boleslav’s face fell.

“I’ll go with you. We’ll cover more ground that way.” He decided, standing up. His crutches creaked as he straightened them under himself.
Sigismund helped him step from the Barbakan walls, and both of them were immediately consumed in the crowd.

Boleslav’s crutches turned out to be quite handy, as he could easily push people out of the way. Sigismund hurried behind, his heavy footfalls lost in millions of others.

The market was chaos, the festivities still in full swing. However, that also meant there were many people to ask about Stas and Bronka. But where to start looking?
Boleslav and Sigismund worked their way forward, asking certain people whether they had seen two little children, a dark-haired boy and blonde girl… the answer was always no.

In one case Sigismund mistakenly asked a noble, who haughtily replied, “I’ve no time for petty matters of serfs like you. Get!” and struck Sigismund roughly on the head.

Sigismund backed off, cursing quietly as he bowed, one hand holding his head. A trickle of blood ran between his fingers.

Boleslav quickly hobbled over, horrified. Sigismund stumbled, sliding down the back of one of the booths.

“Get up, before we get trampled by the crowd!” Boleslav pleaded, pulling his friend up. He and Sigismund stumbled back towards the Barbakan, Boleslav half-supporting him.
When they reached the relative safety of the massive brick walls, Sigismund crouched, wiping away the blood that had turned half of his dark hair to scarlet.

“You all right? How bad is it?” Boleslav asked, trying to get a view between Sigismund’s hands.

“Not too bad. I’ll be fine.” Sigismund muttered. His voice shook slightly.
Boleslav pried Sigismund’s blood-streaked hands away from the wound, and grimaced.

A cut, not too deep, but definitely long, stretched from Sigismund’s forehead into the middle of his scalp.
“Well you can’t continue on now.” Boleslav collected, wondering what to do next. He couldn’t very well continue his search. Leaving Sigismund here would be boorish, and Boleslav was worrying how bad the cut was. What if it got infected?

Suddenly he felt a bony hand on his shoulder, and he turned to face an old, haggard woman, who reeked of herbs.
“I can help your friend.” She said in a wheezing voice. Boleslav eyed her suspiciously.
The woman’s thin, lined face was intelligent and arrogant. Her back was crooked, like a waxing moon. Frayed clothes clung to her skinny frame, and she leaned on a walking staff.
Boleslav nodded, and let the woman pass to Sigismund.

She bent over him, her bony fingers skimming the wound. Sigismund shuddered involuntarily.

The woman cackled. “Well what did you expect, sir? Wounds are wounds!” She reached into a small pouch hanging from her belt, pulling out a clump of cobwebs and bread-today known as the antibiotic penicillin. She distributed it on the worst area of the cuts, while Boleslav watched her work.

“I’m sorry about this.” Muttered Sigismund sadly.

“Ha! I should be sorry. I failed to find my children, and because of that you were injured.” Boleslav answered.

The woman’s gray eyes flickered with interest. “Children lost, you say?”

“Yes.” Boleslav explained forlornly. “My two children, Stas and Bronka. They’ve gone missing today.”
The woman straightened, obviously interested. “And how, may I ask, do these children look like?”

Boleslav and Sigismund quickly described the two children.
The woman gasped. “Did…did the little girl-Bronka, did she have an amber bracelet?”

“Why yes she did. She always wears it.” Boleslav said, hope growing inside him. “Did you see them anywhere?”

The woman nodded slowly. Boleslav practically shot off the ground, a smile stretched across his face. “But that’s very good! Where did you see them? How long ago? Did-“

The woman hissed low, her open mouth exposing a row of jagged, stumpy teeth.
“You fool! Your children I saw, and let me tell you, your little daughter was crying, clutching her brother’s arm. Next to them walked another boy, with a cunning glance and a greedy face.” The woman’s mouth twisted into a frown of worry. “They were heading towards Krzywe Koło.”

Boleslav’s paralyzed knees gave way beneath him, and he grasped the wall for support.
“Good God-please no…” He pleaded, tears gathering in his eyes.
* * *
The old woman stood, motionless, as the news sunk in.
“Are you sure it was them?” Asked Sigismund quietly.

The woman nodded. “From your descriptions. There was no mistaking the girl, and the little bracelet.”
“But…but what would they be doing in Krzywe Koło? That other boy must’ve had something to do with it.” Said Sigismund.
The woman made a spitting noise. “The question why is not important. The fact that they’re down there is!”

Boleslav stood, a sad determination on his face. “We need to find them.”

The woman practically choked on that.
“Whaaat?!” She screeched. “You think you can just strut into Krzywe Koło and find your children? The tunnels are miles long! And there's the Basilisk!”

Boleslav stiffened. “And that’s why I need to help them.” He concluded.

Letting loose a growl of frustration, the woman dug her hand into Boleslav’s arm with the force of as dagger. “You can’t go down there alone! You, a cripple!”

Boleslav turned around, angry now as well as worried for his children. “Are you saying I’m not strong enough to go down there?” He snarled.

The woman waved his comment away with. “Strong enough or not, you cannot go down there. No one comes out of there alive if they go too far.”

“Well what do you want me to do? Sit here as my children are trapped in the catacombs?” Boleslav snapped, unsuccessfully trying to wrench himself from the woman’s grasp.

“There’s only one person who can help you know!” She said, her voice shrill. “Cornelius of Gniezno! Come on, both of you!”

And she roughly pulled both of them to their feet with strength disproportional to her size.
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Sorry I haven't commented sooner, I've been very busy with tests and schoolwork.;)

ooh, very creepy and well written ;)

I agree.

I'm curious about this old woman, too, and what she's going to do about the kids and that basilisk. (Yikes.)

Oh, and Janek is an annoying bully.:D
 
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