The Story of a Scout

Boom! The crack of thunder pulled me away from my dreams one stormy day. But while I am on the subject of dreams, please allow me to tell you a story. In the days of King Arthur, in a parallel universe, events once occurred which I feel must be written down. Oh, and pardon me for not introducing myself. My name is Alexa Martin, and I am a prophetess. Because of my gift, I witnessed these events many years ago as I slept through a storm. Some of these events I witnessed myself and some were later told to me. This is a tale of love, lies, and justice, and is worthy of retelling. All that follows is the story of a scout.

The sound of drums woke me from a deep sleep. It was the middle of the afternoon. I sat up slowly, for something was different. The ground seemed to be moving, rocking back and forth. I sat up a bit more and realized that I was in a small boat in the middle of a sea. I had never been to this place before. Everything was so different. I could smell the salt in the air. An itchy brown robe over a linen dress replaced my comfortable cotton pajamas. There was a staff which appeared to be only slightly taller than me in the bottom of the boat. The boat had a single white sail, billowing full of wind as it was propelled toward this foreign country. The only reason that I was not completely freaking out was because this had happened once before. Well, not this exactly. But I had been taken to some alternate world and had played some part in that world’s history. I did not know what world I was in this time, but I had an extreme sense of foreboding, as though great evil were about to occur. The war drums sounded closer. I was moving pretty fast across the choppy sea as I approached the mainland.
Thump. Thump. Thump. Thump.
The war drums beat steadily. Slowly the enemy approached the last remaining outpost of Kilowre. The women and children had already been taken to safety in Kilowre’s sister country, Filot, which lay across the Yenosk Sea. All of the women, that is, except for Kate, a young stable girl. Kate had insisted on staying in Kilowre, for she said the only two things she truly treasured were to remain there as well: the horses and the man she loved. This man’s name was Renault. He was a scout for the Kilowrean army. Also, she reasoned, if she did need to escape at a moment’s notice, she could always mount a horse and ride quickly to the shore of the Yenosk, where a ship awaited her.
The drums grew steadily closer. The Kilowreans knew that if they did not make a stand against the barbarian army, the entire island would be destroyed. The walls of the city were strong and thick with three lines of able-bodied soldiers. But there were whispered fears among the men that their strength of arms would not save them. And the enemy’s army approached ever faster.
Renault had received his assignment from his commanding officer, James. He knew what to do, for he had done it many times, though never so close to his home. He would sneak through the shadows toward the enemy’s camp and attempt to gain an advantage for the Kilowrean army. The enemy’s trenches were dug, the fires lit as the sun sank below the horizon. Renault waited patiently for the clouds to gather over the autumn moon. There were still leaves on the trees which lined the mall before the castle; leaves which Renault planned on hiding behind. He feared though that the leaves on the ground could hinder his progress and make finding him much easier. As darkness fell and the moon waxed full behind its veil of clouds, Renault began to move toward the trees. Silently and cautiously he approached the barbarian ranks. The enemy’s armor flickered red in the glint of the fires.
 
Renault’s quiver full of arrows lay on his arched back as he crouched in the shadows of the trees. His bow was slung over his neck and one shoulder, and a dagger was strapped to his ankle above his lightweight shoes. His breathing was quiet and rhythmic. He was prepared should the enemy get too close. Renault’s tall, lean frame slid easily across open spaces and closer to the enemy trenches. As he approached, he heard a commotion among the barbarian soldiers ahead of him. He got slightly closer and lifted himself silently into a tree, where he could be hidden but could also see the enemy. As Renault looked on, he began to understand the disturbance in the night air. In the distance, standing among the red-armored barbarians, was one of Renault’s comrades: Pierre.
That traitor. I’ll get him for this. Anger grew in Renault, but he knew he must control himself or his position would be compromised. So he watched and waited. Because he could not hear the men, Renault was forced to guess what was happening. But it was all too clear: through hand gestures and the joviality of the barbarians, Renault knew that Pierre was giving the barbarian captain some sort of plans.
Sometime later, when the moon was past the middle of the sapphire sky, Pierre began to return to the castle. He moved toward the left side of it, where he could enter through the stables. Renault waited a moment, then descended the tree and crept after him. As Pierre neared the stable door, he began to look around to make sure that he had not been seen. Renault tried to duck behind the corner of the castle wall, but he was a split second too late. A slow smile started across Pierre’s face as he saw the edge of Renault’s bow when he jumped behind the corner. Pierre nodded to the darkness, turned around, and entered the stable.
When Renault heard Pierre’s footsteps again, he moved toward the stable door. Suddenly from behind Renault heard three quick steps of heavy boots. As he turned and moved his hand toward his dagger, Renault’s world went black.
 
thanks guys! just so you know, by posting this story, i'm also kinda asking for help. in answer to you, aslanfollower, i really want to make the person in the boat an active character in the story, but i only added her in my more recent revisions...
as the story progresses, i would LOVE any suggestions of how to make it better or make the woman in the boat a more active character...thanks for reading!!!
 
The first thing that comes to my mind is that the woman in the boat could have some knowledge with a direct bearing on Pierre's plan. For example, Pierre could have told the barbarians to go to a side gate in a defensive wall, where an accomplice of Pierre's would open it to let them in. The woman in the boat could turn out, though herself innocent, to be the wife or sister or something of Pierre's fellow traitor. She would then have a choice of loyalties to make.
 
well, the story is actually already written...except the very end...

i'm thinking that the woman, who is a prophetess (which, as far as i have now in the story, only means that she "goes places" in the past while dreaming), but i can't decide if she should have a big role in the story or just be the one telling it...
a thought just came to me...i could make her help somehow in the final battle, but i need to incorporate her into the middle of the plot more...

pina, have you not read the version w/ the woman in it yet??? i thought you had...sorry if not!
 
As I cautiously approached a dark castle lit from the front by the eerie glows of fires, I heard a thunk as I saw a man hit the ground. Another man entered the castle through the stable door. His heavy boots clunked and thudded against the cobblestone, though he wore scout’s clothing; his presence, I assumed, was merely to be sure no one noticed the true scout’s absence. But he was wrong. For you see, apparently the true scout was more well-known than he thought; well-known, at least, in the stable.

Renault slowly awoke, his head spinning. It was still night, although he could see the beginnings of a sunrise appearing on the eastern horizon. The pre-dawn air and the moist dew chilled him to the bone. He tried to move, but found he was bound hand and foot. He tried to swallow the cotton-like taste and dryness in his mouth, but found it impossible. A rag had been put inside his mouth and was held in place by another rag wrapped around his head. As he came to his senses, he realized that he must be behind enemy lines, a prisoner of war.

“He’s awake,” said a gruff voice from above Renault. The barbarian captain came toward him and knelt to look Renault in the face. In the flickering firelight, Renault could see a long scar running down the man’s face.
The captain, after a good look at Renault, grabbed him by the gag tied around his mouth and pulled Renault to a sitting position. Then the captain stood and spoke harshly to Renault:
“We know this whole situation must be very confusing to you. You were rumored to be such a good scout. Ha! But we got you! And our plans will go easily enough now. Pierre will get his share out of the deal, and we’ll get the island. You will die eventually, burning along with the rest of your people. And that little girlfriend of yours…well, we won’t touch her, but Pierre most certainly will! Ha ha ha!”
Rage boiled inside Renault’s soul. He strained against the ropes that bound him hand and foot. His hands were tied harshly behind his back and his legs at the knees and ankles. The ropes cut into his skin, though he still fought them. His attempts were futile. The barbarians just laughed at his effort. In one last endeavor, Renault almost made it to his feet, but the barbarian captain met Renault’s face with his fist.

The horses reared and pawed in their stalls. They knew something was wrong. The man in the stable looked familiar, but they could sense a difference. No, it was not Renault. One horse in particular, Sinbad, acted as though he were wild. Fire kindled in his ebony eyes, and his jet-black coat shone with sweat. If the man entered Sinbad’s stall, the man would die a very painful death. And yet that was just the horse the man was instructed to take out of the stable. The stranger did have some sense, however, and did not enter the stall. Instead, he took in his surroundings and exited the stable. He planned on walking around the back of the castle to find its weaknesses.
Kate, the stable girl, was awakened from her uneasy sleep in the loft overlooking the stable. By the time she had descended her ladder, most of the horses had quieted down. Sinbad, though, was still in an uproar. Kate quickly entered his stall without fear; Renault had taught Sinbad that it was alright for Kate to be near him. Kate calmed the enormous black stallion with her voice first, then with her hand gently stroking his nose, just as Renault had shown her many times. Kate was unaware of what had upset the horses, but she knew it must have been very strange. Sinbad would not have reacted like that if it was someone he knew. Yes, he would have been nervous and acted defensively if anyone but Renault or herself had approached his stall, but nothing like this.
Since it was nearly dawn and she suspected that something had happened to Renault, Kate decided to stay awake. She climbed her ladder again, pulled it up behind her, and changed into black pants, a black shirt, and boots. She then tied her long auburn hair out of her way, grabbed an apple from her table, and lowered her ladder. After she was back on the floor of the stable, Kate hid her ladder behind a large pile of straw used for the horses’ bedding. She began eating her apple quickly as she gathered Sinbad’s tack. After she finished her apple, Kate fed the core to her small bay gelding, Euclid. On her way back to Sinbad’s stall to put on his tack, she heard footsteps coming from the inner part of the castle. She ducked into Sinbad’s stall just as Pierre entered the stable.
 
i haven't decided yet...but i figured that will somehow allow for more dialogue, which seems to be a problem in my stories...lol...so is your thing working now, pina?
 
obviosly, it isnt working, but we figured out a solution! and did you ask me something? don't think so. oh well. see ya...sometime. oh yeah, i finished that trilogy. the ending was HORRIBLE! it ruined the entire trilogy!
 
Renault’s dreams were consumed with visions of Pierre and Kate. When he awoke, however, he realized that his circumstances in reality were almost as bad as those in his dreams. Thoughts of Kate flooded his memory. Thoughts of when they first met; thoughts of Kate’s last whispered words to him the night before: be careful. He knew he had been careful, but obviously not careful enough. Now they would all die. And Renault could have prevented it, merely by not being caught. But, he reminded himself, I was set up. Pierre has wanted his chance with Kate for some time now. Plagued by these thoughts, Renault decided that he must live through this day, if only to see Kate’s face once more. He began to think of an escape plan, but his thoughts drifted back in time to when he and Kate first met…

The horse’s hooves cantered lightly over fields of new flowers. The young woman’s long white gown flowed beautifully behind her. Her hair was down and her face glowed in the afternoon sun.
That was how Renault and Kate first met. Or at least that was how Renault saw it through his star-struck eyes. In reality, Kate had just finished exercising her homely little bay gelding, Euclid. As she dismounted and turned to face him, Renault introduced himself, bowing slightly at the waist. Taken aback by this act of chivalry to a poor girl such as herself, Kate was rendered speechless. Finally, she was able to mutter her own name and offer a clumsy curtsy. After actually understanding her name, Renault struck up a casual conversation with the girl of his dreams.
 
and yes, marissa...i added alot to this flashback section...


A friendship bloomed quickly. Nearly every single day they would meet at the stable and exercise their horses together. Each of them wanted their friendship to turn to something more, but neither pushed the matter. Eventually, though, Renault decided it was time to voice his feelings. He asked her to go with him on a ride to the Yenosk shore. She readily agreed, as he expected. It turned out to be a nice, warm day, so they decided to dismount at the beach and walk barefoot on the cool sand. As they led their horses down the beach, Renault took Kate’s hand. They stopped walking as Kate faced him.
“Kate, I’ve been thinking. Well, there’s no easy way to say this, but…I love you.”
Kate’s eyes lit up briefly, but then her countenance fell.
“What’s wrong, Kate? I know, I probably should not have said that so soon, but it’s true. And I was always taught…”
“No, no. It’s not that. It’s…well, my father promised me at birth to another man. But…I love you, not him. He’s a monster.”
“Don’t worry. I’ll talk to your father. He seems to be a very understanding man. We can figure something out so that we can be together.”
They turned back along the beach and began walking again, hand-in-hand.
As soon as they returned from the beach, Renault quickly put Sinbad away and went to find Kate’s father. When Renault found Kate’s father, he was speaking with the man to whom Kate was promised. He waited quietly for a moment outside the door, listening.
 
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