The Story of a Scout

Pierre watched as the sun crept slowly toward the horizon. He had heard the barbaric outburst about an hour before, and had gone to the outskirts of the forest to see what the problem was; it would not do for Renault to escape. What he saw was Sinbad running away from the castle with several barbarians chasing him. Pierre knew this was not normal behavior for a horse, for they run from danger, not to it. He needed to distract the barbarians and the Kilowreans in order to give him a chance to find Renault before he ran too far. Disobeying direct orders from his captain, Pierre ordered the line of archers under his command to fire. After the first volley of arrows, the war began, and Pierre rushed through the stable and around the side of the castle. He knew that he would have to find his solitary enemy and kill him. He drew his sword and walked cautiously toward the stream behind the enemy’s lines, following Sinbad’s hoof prints as they wound through the trees.
 
sorry, but i changed something at the end of this paragraph, so i posted the whole thing again...also, i think i've finished the epilogue, but i'm not quite there yet...lol


Pierre watched as the sun crept slowly toward the horizon. He had heard the barbaric outburst about an hour before, and had gone to the outskirts of the forest to see what the problem was; it would not do for Renault to escape. What he saw was Sinbad running away from the castle with several barbarians chasing him. Pierre knew this was not normal behavior for a horse, for they run from danger, not to it. He needed to distract the barbarians and the Kilowreans in order to give him a chance to find Renault before he ran too far. Disobeying direct orders from his captain, Pierre ordered the line of archers under his command to fire. After the first volley of arrows, the war began, and Pierre rushed through the stable and around the side of the castle. Because of Pierre’s intense desire for Kate, he had begun the battle as the sun neared the horizon—the battle that should have been delayed until the next day in order for things to work in his favor—for the barbarians to win.
He knew that he would have to find his solitary enemy and kill him. He drew his sword and walked cautiously toward the stream behind the enemy’s lines, following Sinbad’s hoof prints as they wound through the trees. As Pierre reached the stream, he noticed two sets of footprints leading away from it, towards the dense forest.
 
hay, like the update. i like the idea if Pierre being obsessed w/ Kate. anyways...guess where I am! pulling out of Jamaica!!! Ya mon!! but gotta go. cost 35 cents/minute to use the internet! (and its a very slow internet:( )
 
sorry about the double post. the first one didnt show up so i did the second one, and it did both. oops. and it is depressing. i do NOT want to go back to work!!!
 
Soooooooooooo... hows summer school? Im def going to have to take classes next summer if i cant get more hours this semester. OBVIOUSLY, since you havent posted, you are very busy. At least, youd better be. and is I'd a word? like, I+would=I'd? just wonderin...
 
double posting to remind you that you promised to update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! if you do not update by mon I am going to give you an frowning smiley face! evil laugh! (I cant remember how you spell it:eek:)
 
see, the thing is, i've changed my story so much that i have to completely rework it, but i like the ending, so i wanna keep that...it's rather confusing. i did try to work on it a little last night, but to no avail...i'm soooo sorry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please don't give me a frowny face!:eek:
 
well, since you tried i well postpone the frowning smiley face punishment. and my suggestion for being so stuck is to reread your original story. even though you have changed a ton, go back to the original, hand written papers you wrote during Spanish. if that doesnt help, then, im sorry to say, my suggestion is to work on something else for a while, then come back. sigh. i hope you go with my first suggestion and it works b/c the second one would kill me. oh well. see ya. dont forget, we need to have a chick flick night!!
 
it FINALLY let me back on here!!!!!!! sorry it's so short...i'll try to work on some more!


Kate and Renault found a large rock hidden by trees and bushes. As they sat there for a moment trying to figure out the safest route back to the fortress, they heard the rush of arrows and the shouts of a thousand men. Their gazes drifted in the direction of the noises and they saw arrows flying.

“What on earth happened? Our men weren’t ready! And for some reason, it looks like we started it.”
 
hay alex, it let me post so if you still cant post, send me the stuff and i'll post it! okeyday, see ya. NOT!! like i ever see anyone anymore trapped in my not-having-a-life-except-ollege-and-work phase of my non life. good night.
 
hahaha!!! I am here with the update! I can do whatever I want to the story. The sense of power is rushing t my head. I could kill Kate! HEHEHEHE! OR, I could make Renault the bad guy! Oh, the power i have! There is nothing I cannot do! but i will be a good little angel and post it as AP has written it. sigh. somtimes i dont like being an angel.

okay, this post replaces the last post, right?

Pierre watched as the sun crept slowly toward the horizon. He had heard the barbaric outburst about an hour before, and had gone to the outskirts of the forest to see what the problem was; it would not do for Renault to escape. What he saw was Sinbad running away from the castle with several barbarians chasing him. Pierre knew this was not normal behavior for a horse, for they run from danger, not to it. This must be some desperate attempt to save Renault. He’s probably already out in those woods, just waiting on his “faithful steed.” He needed to distract the barbarians and the Kilowreans in order to give himself a chance to find Renault before he ran too far.
I’m going to have to begin the war, he thought with a sudden realization. These stupid barbarians are taking far too long. Now, where’d that scout replacement run off to? Shielding his eyes from the sun, Pierre began looking for the barbarian. Together they would begin this battle, this war. In the end, Pierre knew that he would get what he wanted: Kate. No matter what it took, she would be his.
He found the barbaric scout lurking in the shadows of the trees as the sun set and clouds gathered overhead. Pierre walked carefully up to the man. The man heard him from behind and, without bothering to turn around, said, “Hello, Pierre.” A sinister grin spread across the barbarian’s face as he turned toward the startled man who had approached him.
“This war must begin tonight!” Pierre declared.
“Ah, growing impatient, are we? Well, the Captain has his own timing about these things. It’ll happen, just maybe not tonight.”
“Oh, it will happen tonight, I assure you. You and I are going to start it.”
“Oh, really? And what’ll I get out of it?”
“You can be a Duke when I become King. You can have your pick of the area which you will rule under me.”
“A Duke, hmm. Well, that sounds proper enough. What’s to be my part in this event?”
“You, sir, shall shoot an arrow up toward one of the turrets, where guards are posted. The guards will shoot back, and the battle will begin.”
“And you will ensure my safety if I am captured after the battle?”
“There will be no one left to capture you, but yes. And my word is my bond.”
“Oh, there’s one more thing: when I shoot the arrow and the battle begins, what’s to say I won’t be hit on the return volley?”
“Oh, I’m sure you’ll find a way to avoid that.”

Back on the castle wall with his troops, Pierre watched as the barbarian scout fit an arrow to the bowstring. The arrow flew over a turret and hit a Kilowrean soldier square in the chest, knocking him to the ground.
“FIRE!” shouted Pierre above the confusion. The war began, and Pierre rushed through the stable and around the side of the castle. Because of Pierre’s intense desire for Kate, he had begun the battle as the sun neared the horizon—the battle that should have been delayed until the next day in order for things to work in his favor—for the barbarians to win.
He knew that he would have to find his solitary enemy and kill him. He drew his sword and walked cautiously toward the stream behind the enemy’s lines, following Sinbad’s hoof prints as they wound through the trees. As Pierre reached the stream, he noticed two sets of footprints in the deep sand, leading towards the dense forest.

Kate and Renault found a large rock hidden by trees and bushes. As they sat there for a moment trying to figure out the safest route back to the fortress, they heard the rush of arrows and the shouts of a thousand men. Their gazes drifted in the direction of the noises and they saw arrows flying.
“What on earth happened? Our men weren’t ready! And for some reason, it looks like we started it.”
“James wouldn’t have let that happen, though,” Kate argued.
Renault’s finger quickly reached up and pressed against Kate’s lips. “Quiet,” he whispered. “I hear something.” Leaves crackled under heavy boots as someone approached the general direction of the rock. Renault slipped down the ground, moving like a cat, and pulled Kate down next to him. The rock was now between them and the oncoming stranger. The footsteps continually got closer, but Renault and Kate had nowhere to run without easily giving their location away. They tensed as the footsteps halted, leaves settling softly into the ground.
 
yeah, alex, i think it just hated you. by the way, love the update!!!!!!

Renault motioned to Kate to stay where she was. She nodded, but her eyes looked worried and scared. He gently squeezed her hand, then slipped around the side of the boulder. He scanned the ground for any shadows that might give away the stranger’s identity, but to no avail. As he began to move further around the rock, he heard a muffled scream. Kate! He rushed back to where he had left Kate, only to find her held by Pierre…with a knife to her throat.

Breathless, Euclid and I began making our way back toward the castle. A few barbarians had been distracted by our efforts, which hopefully helped Kate. I lost sight of her and Sinbad just after the barbarians began chasing them. Euclid finally reached the stable entrance at the back of the castle and nickered a greeting. I glanced up and saw Sinbad, covered with sweat but eating grass happily. If appearances could be trusted, then everything had worked out. But no wise man ever said that things were as they appeared. I took both horses into their stalls and removed their tack. I’ve got to find the Kilowrean captain and tell him what happened! Not that it matters now…
Once the horses were safely in their stalls, I headed up towards the castle walls. The soldiers were lined shoulder-to-shoulder, ready for battle. Little did they know how soon the battle would come. I barely had the chance to ask one of the soldiers where the captain was before a man only about five feet from me fell to his death, an arrow protruding from his chest.
 
Hi Alex!!
“I see you’ve managed to survive those so-called barbarians. I knew Borris and his men were too stupid to do the job. I’ll just have to kill you myself, I suppose. And if you give me too much of a hard time, I’ll kill her, too,” Pierre sneered, hoping to see shock on Renault’s face. He was met with disappointment, however, when Renault looked icily into his eyes.
“Nice to see you too, Pierre.” Renault folded his arms casually, leaning his left shoulder against the rock that he and Kate had been sitting on only moments earlier.
“How did you do it, Renault? I thought for sure the next time I saw you would be in Hell.”
Despite his fatigue, Renault’s eyes were intense as he focused on the challenge before him. “Guess you were wrong. And as for how I escaped, you were correct in your earlier statement: the barbarians are stupid. The fact that they trusted you at all is testimony to that reality. And what do you think you’re doing with Kate? This has nothing to do with her.”
“Oh, but that’s where you’re wrong, Renault. This has everything to do with her. But deep down, you know that, don’t you? You know that I’ll never rest until I have what was rightfully mine to begin with—until you stole her from me!”
“As I recall, you gave her up. But she’s not a prize to be won.”
“Romance, romance, romance. And where has that gotten you? Right here, with your ‘true love’ at the edge of her life, and you begging for it.”
“Do I look like I’m begging? If she’s really as unimportant as you say, why not let her go now so that we can settle this like men—face to face.”
“HA! Always trying to be the gentleman, but it’s a position someone like you could never earn. But alright, have it your way. Let’s fight.” Pierre jerked his left hand, the hand holding the dagger, back behind Kate’s shoulder and used both hands to shove her to the ground. Renault’s eyes followed her, quickly made sure she was alright, and resumed his collected pose.
Pierre remarked coldly, “Kate, you don’t want to see this. Go on to Filot ahead of me—I’ll meet you there later.” Kate could see the rage smoldering in Renault’s eyes. Despite her fear for his safety, she stood up and ran toward the stable, careful to stay deep enough in the forest not to draw the attention of the barbarians toward the outside of the battle. Renault’s arrows! Where could they be?

Renault’s constitution was failing. He hadn’t had any food or water in nearly twenty-four hours, he’d been tied up for almost the whole day, and he had been knocked out a couple times. And on top of it all, Renault had no weapons. He knew Pierre had at least two: his sword and his dagger. Renault’s mind, however, was still quite sharp. Pierre drew his sword, an impish grin on his face.
“Why are you doing this? Just to get back at me for something you did?”
Pierre’s sword sank slowly toward the ground. “What did I do to make you steal Kate? She was MINE!” With that, Pierre lunged at Renault, who ducked under the blade and rolled to the side.
 
just in case anyone wants one...(who am i kidding...marissa's the only one who reads this...o well) i just made a ROUGH map for my story...and b/c of the map, i'm considering writing one or two more shorter ones to include some of the other places on the map...but if anyone other than marissa decides to read this story, i'd be happy to send you a map on email or pm (if you can even do that...)

and yes, marissa, it DID actually let me on!!!! on my mom's laptop, that is...
 
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