The Witch's Sister

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The Witches Sister

(Hey guys! I am writing this story and I thought I would post it online. This pretty much starts out telling what has gone on before and this story is about the 4 kids when they were ruling in Narnia and were teenagers. Please tell me what you think. Thank You.)

Chapter 1
This is the story of 4 Kings and Queens named Peter,Susan,Edmund and Lucy who ruled in the golden age of Narnia. If you have read a book called The Lion, The Witch and The Wardrobe you would find they were just 4 average kids from London who had found a magical wardrobe and led them into the glorious land of Narnia. The eldest child Peter had fought a great battle along side his brother, Edmund in the fords of Beruna, both had almost been killed in the brutal ordeal but survived to be the High King Peter the Magnificent and King Edmund the Just. It had been at least 2 years since those events and now the 4 siblings were between the ages of children and adults. At this very moment Peter and Edmund were riding on horseback to an awful place known as the Witchs house. It had been abandoned for awhile now and the 2 had decided to maybe destroy it once and for all, but what they would find there would be somthing of a shock..
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<Turkish Delight> said:
Thanks. I`ll write more soon. I wrote it down in a note book so somtimes it takes awhile to copy it out of there. :)
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I know how you feel.My handwriting is so hard to read.
 
Chapter 2-
Both boys were quite tired and felt like they would never reach their destination when finally they saw the 2 hills. Edmund remembered them all too well, he had visited the White Witch in the very place they were traveling to. Memories fell through his mind of his past when he had been quite cruel to his family and had betrayed them, thinking the Witch would make him a prince. Just then the view of the Witch`s Castle filled both the King`s eyes and more and more Edmund wished to turn back but they still continued on. As the boys approched the castle`s entrance they stayed quite silent. As Peter slowly put his hand on the door handle he took a slow deep breath. Edmund nodded as if to tell Peter to go on and that he was ready. Peter then turned the handle and inside was a horrid and dark place covered with cob webs. Edmund looked up at the Witch`s main hall and was surprised to see her once glorious throne crumbling away.
Edmund turned to Peter and said at a whisper "It looks like it`s been abandoned for atleast 100 years, it`s hard to believe just 2 years ago she lived in this awful place."
Peter slowly walked along side Edmund then replied "I know what you mean Ed, this place is quite odd. By the lions mane, what it that? Peter quickly rushed up to a small table in the corner of the room and saw a small unusual pan pipe sitting atop a beautiful purple and royal blue cloth.
Edmund looked down at it and said "I have never seen such a curious looking pipe before." Edmund then reached out to touch it but Peter grabbed him by the shoulder. "In Aslan`s Name, Ed. What do you think you are doing? Who knows what would of happened if you had layed a hand on that pipe." Edmund looked at Peter then at the pipe, he knew his brother was right but his curiosity began getting the better of him. Without saying a word to Peter he quickly got himself free of Peter`s grasp and grabbed the pipe. Peter seemed surprised by Edmund`s act but soon found himself walking toward Edmund to see the beautiful instrument. As Edmund turned the pipe round and round in his hands he relized it looked nothing like an average pipe a faun would carry around or for that matter it had no Narnian look about it at all. Just then somthing on the pipe caught his eye, deeply carved into the pipe were some words. Edmund squinted slightly to read it but when he did this is what was written: Play The Music, Call The Danger, Seek the great enemy of Jadis.
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(Thanks for all the support everyone. I`m glad you are enjoying the story. Here is the 3rd part.)
Chapter 3-
When both boys had finished reading the interesting bit of words they looked up at each other with surprised faces. "Now don`t get any ideas, Ed." said Peter. Edmund read the words a 2nd time to himself then answered "But Peter don`t you see? It says on here Seek the great enemy of Jadis. Clearly it speaks of Aslan who os course was her worse enemy." Peter shook his head and said "No Ed. I don`t believe so we should just put it back now, after all I did not want you to touch it in the first place and.."
Just then he was interupted by the sound of music. He looked all around when suddently he relized the music was coming from the pipes and the very person playing them was Edmund himself. "What do you think you are doing?" said Peter in an angry tone.
The beautiful yet horrible song echoed through the room and the more Peter yelled at Edmund the more he played. Edmund felt bad for not obeying the High King but he had to find out what would happen if he played the pipes. Just then a circle of odd red light began to appear on the other side of the large room, each moment it became brighter and brighter until it almost blinded the 2 boys. Edmund finally decided to stop playing and all was very silent. The boys watched as suddently the light began turning different colors that don`t even exsist in our world. After atleast 10 minutes a shape began to form out of the circle and it began to look more and more like a human then a large yellow flash like lightning sparking through the room. Both boys hurried and covered their eyes in their hands and waited. After the horrid flash was over they slowly uncovered their eyes and there before them stood a tall lady that looked alot like Jadis.
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Ofcourse, Edmund doe's not listen to anyone again.Im guessing this story is about the lady that appears....Jadis sister.
 

Chapter 4-
As both boys strained to comprehend what they saw in front of them the tall woman said in an almost musical voice "Thank you, great kings for awakening me. I am the Queen Jaden of Charn. What is this strange land?"
Both boys stood silent for a few minutes until Peter bravely stepped forward and said in a nervous yet king like voice "Welcome Queen Jaden of Charn. I am the High King Peter and with me is my royal brother, King Edmund. You Miss, have come into the land of Narnia.
Jaden stared at Peter then smirked, she didn`t say anything for a moment and seemed to be thinking when finally she remarked "That is very interesting Peter that you are a High King at such a young age. Can you take me to your palace? I am in dire need of somthing to eat and drink for I havn`t been able to do so in many years." Edmund who had been quite leary of her then spoke up and said "What do you mean you havn`t been able to do so?" Jaden took a deep breath then explained "Well Edmund, my sister Jadis turned me and my army into statues. I had been in that state for many long years without ever ageing until you 2 wonderful young boys rescued me." Edmund looked up at her and relized she was only about 19 years of age, though she was charming and beautiful, King Edmund still couldn`t help feel somthing bad about her for he had known her sister all too well and he wasn`t sure if this so called "Queen of Charn" could be trusted.
Edmund slowly glanced at Peter to see what he thought of Jaden and when he did Edmund was quite surprised, his brother seemed almost enchanted by her and looked like he already trusted her very much. As Edmund trailed behind Peter and Jaden he looked back behind him and noticed a small window just letting a small bit of light shine through. When Edmund focused closer of the light he relized the light was coming from Narnia`s beautiful bright white moon. Edmund`s heart sunk. For sure that meant they had to spend the night at the Witch`s House. Edmund dreaded the thought of even having to stay a second longer, let alone 12 hours, he very well knew sleep would not come easily in this awful place.
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That raises some conflict.Not only did they meet someone who might betray, but they have to sleep in the same house with her.
Im starting to get little suspense.Good story writing.
 
(Ok. Here is Chapter 5. Hope you all like it. :) )

Chapter 5-
As Edmund slowly made his way up, next to Peter he heard his brother say to Jaden "Yes Queen Jaden you are welcome to stay at Cair Paravel as long as you wish."
Edmund wanted to protest Peter`s offer but held himself back and stayed silent. Jaden smiled and boldly put a hand on Peter`s broad shoulder and replied "Thank You Peter that is very generous of you."
As she slowly removed her hand they came to the house`s light blue door. As soon as Peter reached it he rushed in front of Jaden and opened it for her. Without saying a mere Thank You or even giving Peter a glance she mumbled to herself "Perfect."
An evil smile then spread across her face then in an instant it vanished when she saw Edmund watching her with a suspisous look in his eyes. Just then lifted her hand to touch him on the shoulder as well but before she could he quickly moved out of her way. Edmund wanted to say somthing unkind to her but again held himself back, he knew if he angered her things could possibly get worse, if that was possible. Before Edmund could escape her grasp again she re-tried her last attempt and sucseeded. Edmund slowly lifted his chin up to look her in the eyes and when he did he saw a cold hard stare and once again he felt like he was stareing into the face of the feared and hated White Witch.
She then spoke sharply by saying "Is somthing wrong little one?"
Edmund then said in a brave tone "Little one? I am 12 and the king of Narnia, age makes no difference here but if it bothers you so much that we are kings then you might as well go back to Charn and leave Narnia alone."
Jaden suddently let go of Edmund and both her and Peter seemed taken aback by Edmund`s strong remark.
"Ed." said Peter who then gave him a look as if to say to stop speaking. Jaden shook her head then said to Peter
"It`s alright Peter, I`m sure your little rebellous brother with learn proper respect in time he is still to young to understand proper edicate."
Just then Edmund burst into somthing of a rage and said "Proper edicate? How dare you act in such a vile.."
Before Edmund could keep throwing harsh words at Jaden, Peter put a hand on his mouth to prevent him from saying anymore. Peter lowered his voice to a whisper and said only to Edmund
"Ed, don`t do anything to offend her."
Edmund shook his head and got Peter to let go of his mouth and when he was free from him he said bitterly
"How in Aslan`s name can you defend this hideous Witch? You know she is evil like Jadis.
"Peter looked at Edmund in a quite percular way then said "We can`t assume anything about her, Ed."
Just then Peter turned on his heel with his long cloak flowing behind him and walked over to Jaden and sat next to her in the grass. Edmund narrowed his eyes angerily as he watched him go. Dosn`t her understand? She`s dangourous! thought Edmund. As he watched his brother apoligize to Jaden for Edmund`s actions the more and more a hatred grew inside Edmund toward Jaden. Whatever the code he planned to get her out of Narnia, whatever the cost.
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Ofcourse, this girl sounds like shes up to something-making her evil.Its obvious she a baddie.She is also using her charm to win Peter over.
Nice use of the characters i might add.
 
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