Oh! sorry guys for not posting in forever, i'm just not sure really what do do with the story at the moment. i don't know if i can continue it, but i'll try...
one more thing. i'm going away for a week or two, just to let you guys know. but when i get back i'll see if i can save the story...
Don't say you won't finish it! Say you won't finish it FOR NOW. Come back when you are ready and resurrect the thread. I'll continue reading!! Take your time and take care.
It's a great idea, so don't give it up completely. If you don't want to continue it for now (as Des said), then drop it for the moment. And then your sub-conciousness will continue playing with the idea, coming up with random scenes, working out new characters... and then days/ months, or even a couple years later, you'll end up putting pen to paper again! And I'll be there reading over your shoulder.
Or maybe not. Either way is fine. But I'd like to say that I've really enjoyed what you've written, and you've got some pretty good ideas flouting around. Keep writing! Maybe not this, but some other things.