Sonnets Here, In-House

For GGray


From Victor Hugo to Ray Bradbury,
I trace great authors able to make prose
Compelling, with no need for fantasy;
Gee-Gray, potentially you're one of those.

You say that you live on a farm with cats,
But you make readers live inside a town
Where mirrors can teach lessons to young brats,
And recklessness can bring a biker down.

The junk-food menace you have well revealed,
And cheating at flag football you rebuke.
In Cambria there must be some nice field
Which grew you to be a creative nuke.

Now I can say that your high praise I sang.
Reciprocate! Go read my "Alipang!"
 
Copperfox said:
For GGray


From Victor Hugo to Ray Bradbury,
I trace great authors able to make prose
Compelling, with no need for fantasy;
Gee-Gray, potentially you're one of those.

You say that you live on a farm with cats,
But you make readers live inside a town
Where mirrors can teach lessons to young brats,
And recklessness can bring a biker down.

The junk-food menace you have well revealed,
And cheating at flag football you rebuke.
In Cambria there must be some nice field
Which grew you to be a creative nuke.

Now I can say that your high praise I sang.
Reciprocate! Go read my "Alipang!"
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Thanks for the sonnet, Copperfox!:D
 
Probably, among native Filipinos, both A's in that name would be pronounced "ah." But since my hero in "The First Love of Alipang Havens" grows up in the United States, I assume that everyone around him would say his name using the short-A sound as in "angle." That vowel sound is actually rare in human language worldwide, though we do share it with French.
 
Copperfox said:
Probably, among native Filipinos, both A's in that name would be pronounced "ah." But since my hero in "The First Love of Alipang Havens" grows up in the United States, I assume that everyone around him would say his name using the short-A sound as in "angle." That vowel sound is actually rare in human language worldwide, though we do share it with French.
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I meant where the stress is placed. But thanks, that was interesting.
 
Copperfox said:
Probably, among native Filipinos, both A's in that name would be pronounced "ah." But since my hero in "The First Love of Alipang Havens" grows up in the United States, I assume that everyone around him would say his name using the short-A sound as in "angle." That vowel sound is actually rare in human language worldwide, though we do share it with French.
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I imagined it being pronounced "AL-ih-payng". "Al" rhyming with 'pal' and 'ih' being 'ih' like in 'sit'.
 
For the Jester


In sonnets, you need syllables which fit;
The nickname "Josh the Jester" fills the slit.
This friend of ours loves reading Holy Writ--
That means the Bible, Holy Spirit lit.

Our Jester was away from us a bit,
Which could have put his friends here in a snit;
But he returned, with courage and with grit,
Flew like a baseball to the catcher's mitt.

The Jester has devoted all his wit
To serving Christ, Who overcame the pit
Of sin and death, and strode right out of it
To give us an eternal first-aid kit.

So, Josh the Jester, hang around this time!
(Yes, twelve lines was enough with just one rhyme.)
 
Copperfox said:
For the Jester


In sonnets, you need syllables which fit;
The nickname "Josh the Jester" fills the slit.
This friend of ours loves reading Holy Writ--
That means the Bible, Holy Spirit lit.

Our Jester was away from us a bit,
Which could have put his friends here in a snit;
But he returned, with courage and with grit,
Flew like a baseball to the catcher's mitt.

The Jester has devoted all his wit
To serving Christ, Who overcame the pit
Of sin and death, and strode right out of it
To give us an eternal first-aid kit.

So, Josh the Jester, hang around this time!
(Yes, twelve lines was enough with just one rhyme.)
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I like how this one rhymes.

BTW, I showed the sonnet about me to my mom and she liked it.:D
 
Here, Zella, is one from much earlier in the history of this thread, in which I managed the same rhyme ALL the way through, with the help of repetition:


In Honor Of BENISSE:
Requested By MGG-Took

Our famed Vanessa, sorely needing peace,
Found some in the compassion of Benisse,
Who knows the way Alzheimer's will increase
Life's pain--but pain cannot defeat Benisse.

A live-in mother, struck by this disease,
Receives her care from loving, kind Benisse.
Chess games, of all things, also bring release
Of stress, thanks to the husband of Benisse.

The memory decline, with each caprice
Of new forgetting, wearies poor Benisse,
Her courage, though, shines like the golden fleece
For Nessa, who thinks highly of Benisse.

Our not-so-little Dutch girl gains new lease
On hope and faith, from friendship with Benisse.


"Bear one another's burdens, and so fulfill the law of Christ." -- Galatians ch. 6
 
Copperfox said:
For the Jester


In sonnets, you need syllables which fit;
The nickname "Josh the Jester" fills the slit.
This friend of ours loves reading Holy Writ--
That means the Bible, Holy Spirit lit.

Our Jester was away from us a bit,
Which could have put his friends here in a snit;
But he returned, with courage and with grit,
Flew like a baseball to the catcher's mitt.

The Jester has devoted all his wit
To serving Christ, Who overcame the pit
Of sin and death, and strode right out of it
To give us an eternal first-aid kit.

So, Josh the Jester, hang around this time!
(Yes, twelve lines was enough with just one rhyme.)
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Haha! Gee thanks papa Joe1 I feel loved :)
 
Some are harder to write than others, and I never timed one exactly; but I would guess that an "average" sonnet, from the moment I begin thinking about it until the moment it's completed, takes about forty minutes. I am helped in this by a longtime habit of purposely thinking about unusual pairings of rhyming words; if you look in "Marketplace of Technique," you will see some of my rhyme listings.
 
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