jesusfreak
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Chapter 5 is coming soon! i have it all typed up and everything. i'll post it as soon as i have the time! thanks everyone!
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Chapter 5
As I step out of my room. I see Caroline leaning against the door, just where I left her, sleeping. I glance out the sliding glass door to our little balcony. The potted plants sit there, beautiful, in a world full of ugly.
I will go outside and concentrate. Maybe I will be able to get this stupid voice of mine to work. I step up to the glass door, shoving it out of my way, as I step onto the balcony. The war, summer air hits, making a contrast with the cool air of the apartment. The sun is hitting my face, my arms; my entire body is soaking it in. I stretch my arms like I ready to take off as I feel the suns healing warmth. It is touching my heart. I sigh. That was exactly what I needed.
The sun is taking its western path down, taking that warm light with it by the minute. Bright reds and golds color the sky, contrasting with the darkening sky in the east.
The railing’s bars are wide enough that I can stick my legs between them. I sit down and gaze out.
With the cool air-conditioned at my back and the beautiful sunset facing me, I concentrate on turn my thoughts into spoken words.
I sit. Nothing comes to me. I can think of nothing that would improve my present condition.
“Hey Melony.” Jacob’s kid voice scatters my thoughts. I look up and see him on the next balcony over to my right. I stand up, pulling my legs out from between the bars.
I flash the brightest smile I can muster, hoping that’ll convince him of my sincerity.
“Isn’t it beautiful? Look at all the colors!” Jacob sits down the same way I had been. I retake my seat, leaning my head against the cool, iron bars in front of me.
We’ve sat here a while. The sky is dark now and the stars are starting to poke out. Cool summer air is rustling through my hair. It is wonder to sit out here underneath the stars, surrounded by potted plants. I laugh at the thought, being in a juggle of potted shrubbery.
My soft laugh has jerked Jacob from his thoughts. He is gazing at me now. His eyes fixed in mine.
“Melony, since you’ve gotten here, you haven’t said one thing to me.”
Those eyes! They’re boring into me. What do I say? What do I do?
I point to myself.
“I?” Jacob mutters, looking confused.
I shake my head.
“No.”
I make motions with my hands showing the action of speaking.
“Speak? You can’t speak?”
I nod my head wilding and put on a huge grin. Jacob is the first to know. He alone, knows my secret. Sharing, mended a piece of my deeply broken heart.
Ok! So there it is!! I know I made you all wait FOREVER!!! like 2 months! sorry!!! well here's some more! Feedback please! i can't post more, until you give me reviews! I love you all! Thanks!
~Jesusfreak
As I step out of my room. I see Caroline leaning against the door, just where I left her, sleeping. I glance out the sliding glass door to our little balcony. The potted plants sit there, beautiful, in a world full of ugly.
I will go outside and concentrate. Maybe I will be able to get this stupid voice of mine to work. I step up to the glass door, shoving it out of my way, as I step onto the balcony. The war, summer air hits, making a contrast with the cool air of the apartment. The sun is hitting my face, my arms; my entire body is soaking it in. I stretch my arms like I ready to take off as I feel the suns healing warmth. It is touching my heart. I sigh. That was exactly what I needed.
The sun is taking its western path down, taking that warm light with it by the minute. Bright reds and golds color the sky, contrasting with the darkening sky in the east.
The railing’s bars are wide enough that I can stick my legs between them. I sit down and gaze out.
With the cool air-conditioned at my back and the beautiful sunset facing me, I concentrate on turn my thoughts into spoken words.
I sit. Nothing comes to me. I can think of nothing that would improve my present condition.
“Hey Melony.” Jacob’s kid voice scatters my thoughts. I look up and see him on the next balcony over to my right. I stand up, pulling my legs out from between the bars.
I flash the brightest smile I can muster, hoping that’ll convince him of my sincerity.
“Isn’t it beautiful? Look at all the colors!” Jacob sits down the same way I had been. I retake my seat, leaning my head against the cool, iron bars in front of me.
We’ve sat here a while. The sky is dark now and the stars are starting to poke out. Cool summer air is rustling through my hair. It is wonder to sit out here underneath the stars, surrounded by potted plants. I laugh at the thought, being in a juggle of potted shrubbery.
My soft laugh has jerked Jacob from his thoughts. He is gazing at me now. His eyes fixed in mine.
“Melony, since you’ve gotten here, you haven’t said one thing to me.”
Those eyes! They’re boring into me. What do I say? What do I do?
I point to myself.
“I?” Jacob mutters, looking confused.
I shake my head.
“No.”
I make motions with my hands showing the action of speaking.
“Speak? You can’t speak?”
I nod my head wilding and put on a huge grin. Jacob is the first to know. He alone, knows my secret. Sharing, mended a piece of my deeply broken heart.
Ok! So there it is!! I know I made you all wait FOREVER!!! like 2 months! sorry!!! well here's some more! Feedback please! i can't post more, until you give me reviews! I love you all! Thanks!
~Jesusfreak
NarniaFan95
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PLEEEEEEAAAASSSE POST MORE!!!!!! I love this story!
jesusfreak
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Thanks! But you'll have to tell your friends! I'll need more reviews to get me to post more! thanks!
jesusfreak
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Thanks Rhyanidd! There will be more 
... probably tomorrow! soooo yep! i have it all typed up and ready to go!
... probably tomorrow! soooo yep! i have it all typed up and ready to go!
jesusfreak
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Hey! Chapter 6 is here!!! But there's a catch for this chapter. You'll only get part of it at a time!!!!! hehe. i guess i'm just trying to build suspence! so here's part one of chapter six!
Chapter 6 - Part one
“Wow… I wasn’t expecting that.” Jacob looks bewildered.
I hold up my index finger.
“One second?”
I nod and run into the house. I grab a pad off the kitchen counter and a pen out of the drawer.
A pulsing energy is gushing through me. My hands are shaking with giddy excitement.
I run to the balcony. Jacob is standing up against the railing. His head is in his hands and his elbows are resting on the railing. He’s starring
out into space, thinking I guess, waiting for me.
He turns at my quick footsteps. I rest the pad of paper on the railing. In a shaky hand I write, “You’re the only one who knows. I haven’t told anyone else.”
I lean as far over my railing as I can risk and Jacob does the same. He takes the pad of paper and quickly reads it.
“What do you mean you haven’t told anyone? How does your mother not know? How long have you not been able to talk?”
We exchange the paper again. “Only for a couple days, but I don’t think its coming back. I’ve tried. Nothing.”
“That’s so weird. Why do you think you lost it? There has to be some reasonable explanation.”
I stare at the ground. Oh, how I don’t want to tell him! What will I tell him?
OOKKKK!!! there it is!!!!!!!!!!! feedback!
Chapter 6 - Part one
“Wow… I wasn’t expecting that.” Jacob looks bewildered.
I hold up my index finger.
“One second?”
I nod and run into the house. I grab a pad off the kitchen counter and a pen out of the drawer.
A pulsing energy is gushing through me. My hands are shaking with giddy excitement.
I run to the balcony. Jacob is standing up against the railing. His head is in his hands and his elbows are resting on the railing. He’s starring
out into space, thinking I guess, waiting for me.
He turns at my quick footsteps. I rest the pad of paper on the railing. In a shaky hand I write, “You’re the only one who knows. I haven’t told anyone else.”
I lean as far over my railing as I can risk and Jacob does the same. He takes the pad of paper and quickly reads it.
“What do you mean you haven’t told anyone? How does your mother not know? How long have you not been able to talk?”
We exchange the paper again. “Only for a couple days, but I don’t think its coming back. I’ve tried. Nothing.”
“That’s so weird. Why do you think you lost it? There has to be some reasonable explanation.”
I stare at the ground. Oh, how I don’t want to tell him! What will I tell him?
OOKKKK!!! there it is!!!!!!!!!!! feedback!
NarniaFan95
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Is she ever gonna speak again? This is getting better and better each time. Please post more!
jesusfreak
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As I said, chapter 6 is going to come in little pieces... so here's part 2!!
Chapter 6 - Part 2
“Well?” Jacob is leaning over his railing with the paper. I look up at him. Obviously, my face says it all. “Why are you scared? Don’t worry, you can tell me anything.”
His reassurance didn’t help me any. I slowly take the paper from him. What was I going to say?
Yea, I know... that's all for now!!! u'll get more soon... ha, i'm getting really excited! all this building up! ha, i hope i can write a good end to this chapter. ; )
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Chapter 6 - Part 2
“Well?” Jacob is leaning over his railing with the paper. I look up at him. Obviously, my face says it all. “Why are you scared? Don’t worry, you can tell me anything.”
His reassurance didn’t help me any. I slowly take the paper from him. What was I going to say?
Yea, I know... that's all for now!!! u'll get more soon... ha, i'm getting really excited! all this building up! ha, i hope i can write a good end to this chapter. ; )
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NarniaFan95
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You're good at building up anxiousness....
But thats a good thing!
But thats a good thing!
jesusfreak
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Anyone wondering what's gonna happen next??? hehe! anyone excited??? hahaha, well, you'll have to wait a bit longer! more will be hopefully be coming out soon! Thanks all my readers and PLEASE tell your friends if you like this story... I need more readers if i'm gonna keep writing!
umbrellaxscenexcore
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Um...what exactly is this a fanfic of? 
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:Ginny_JillPole
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Aww, sissie, you're doing it great! I printed it for I can read it on my bed, lol. I don't like reading too much on my computer heehee. You are a great writer... I'll be a cinema director (Only three years to receive myself of it) so, someday i could start working on some script, lol... Now i'm dreaming!!! ahahaha, I'm proud of you, Jesusfreak. You're awesome. i miss you lots.
Your oldest sister.
Ginny
Your oldest sister.
Ginny
jesusfreak
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Um...what exactly is this a fanfic of?
well, nothing exactly... persay... lol...
well, i read a book that sparked my interest on the subject (the book is called like Wenny has Wings or something like that)(parents splitting up because a death of a child
ok and also... i read the twilight series... which will influence later in the book ; )
and then i guess i was listening to some music that sort of had the feel of this book....
AND lol... i was watching one of the Fallen movies??? has anyone seen those? just randomly watching those... and that sort of got me writing and gave me another idea for later in the book... and... hmmmm... well...
i guess it's not really a fanfic of anything really! = ) hehe! = )
OHHHH! and also, i have had people ask me if this happened to me! NO! absolutely not! this has never happened to me... none of my own life experience are in this book AT all... this is totally from my amagination and those sorce of information i listed up there! = )
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jesusfreak
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Thank You Darling!!!!
hehe! ik! i hate reading on the computer! = )
really!? you think i'm a good writer??? lol! = ) thanks! it just sorta flows out! you know what i mean?
you'll be amazing! don't worry about it!!!! = ) hehee = ) those dreams (if you put them in God's hands) can become something truly AMAZING!!! I'm praying for you Ginny!!!
awww!!!!! thanks!!!!!!!!!! that means a lot!!
omgosh! i miss you too!!!! we haven't talked in forever!!!
LOVE YOU LOTS AND LOTS!!!!!
Your little sis,
~Jesusfreak!
jesusfreak
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ok everyone! ik it's been a while since i've posted something new and i just got another chapter back from our amazing editor, Miss Amanda! so i'll post that soon! and also, a new chapter coming sometime this March. = ) yeppers! = )
Also, my good friend Ginny and I might have a big surprise in story for all you amazing readers!!! ; ) keep an eye out for that!
Love ya all!
God Bless!
~Jesusfreak!
Also, my good friend Ginny and I might have a big surprise in story for all you amazing readers!!! ; ) keep an eye out for that!
Love ya all!
God Bless!
~Jesusfreak!
Ginny_JillPole
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Oh, yeah, guys. We DO have some surprise. Some of you may know it. Please, don't talk about it in this thread.
Love and thanks for the support to my sister's amazing story, it means a lot to me too, lol.
jesusfreak
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Oh, yeah, guys. We DO have some surprise. Some of you may know it. Please, don't talk about it in this thread.
Love and thanks for the support to my sister's amazing story, it means a lot to me too, lol.
yep! thanks for all your suppost Ginny!
it means a lot to me! YEA! lolyea, we'll release stuff about this special little surprise soon!!! yippy!!
and yep! i am posting the rest of chapter 6 today! lol, you guys had to wait forever! sorry about that!
and i'm working really hard on chapter 7! it's got a couple surprises, so you guys better review or maybe i won't post anymore!!!! lol, anyway, reviews make my fingers type faster!!!!