DestinyLies
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Thanks bunches!!!!
Just writing...
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that was so cute!
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LOL Thanks!!!! 
What do you want me to do now??? More Joe and Kandie??? What????
How about the first time they met [or rather re-met??]
DestinyLies
What do you want me to do now??? More Joe and Kandie??? What????How about the first time they met [or rather re-met??]
DestinyLies
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you are the writer but I would like to see how they met...or perhaps him in the army or on the front lines...just a few thoughts
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Ok......let's see.... [first he's not in the war Joe joined the army BEFORE the war started but I don't know if I'm gonna have him stay in the Army after the war starts....hmmm]
.....I stumbled up the hill sliding several times because of the rain. I noticed a large mansion was at the top of the hill. Two boys were talking on the front porch.
"Joe." One boy spoke to the other and pointed at me.
The boy whose name was obviously Joe turned, and looked straight at me. Our eyes locked, he ran out to me, I noticed he was about to speak but then everything went black....
Joe Guyer caught the girl as she collapsed. Lucas- his friend he had been talking to when the girl had come into his yard- had called for Joe's mother who had come out onto the porch. She now told him to carry the girl inside and up to one of the spare rooms...he obeyed.
[most of the time I won't write it like this I will just still be using me and I and such for Kandie]
I stirred awake sometime later. I opened my eyes and saw a girl about my age sitting by my bed.
"You're awake!" She smiled at me. "I'm Jane Guyer. Joe-he's my brother- he carried you inside after you fainted in our front yard. I think he likes you. He says you look familiar too. What's your name?"
"K-Katherine." I stuttered. "But people call me Kandie."
[originaly I didn't have Kandie tell them her name until a few days later but I'm editing the story as I go. I'm still re-writing the first as there was too much physical contact between Joe and Kandie]
"That's pretty." Jane stood."I'll go get mama." She turned and left the room.
Guyer. I thought the name sounded familiar but I couldn't remember if I had ever known any Guyers. I looked up as Jane entered the room followed by woman around 35 or so obviously her Mom and the most gorgeous boy I had ever seen. His brown hair hung over his forehead his chocolate-brown eyes stayed on me the minute he entered the room causing me to blush.....
More later! How was that MJ?????
~DestinyLies
.....I stumbled up the hill sliding several times because of the rain. I noticed a large mansion was at the top of the hill. Two boys were talking on the front porch.
"Joe." One boy spoke to the other and pointed at me.
The boy whose name was obviously Joe turned, and looked straight at me. Our eyes locked, he ran out to me, I noticed he was about to speak but then everything went black....
Joe Guyer caught the girl as she collapsed. Lucas- his friend he had been talking to when the girl had come into his yard- had called for Joe's mother who had come out onto the porch. She now told him to carry the girl inside and up to one of the spare rooms...he obeyed.
[most of the time I won't write it like this I will just still be using me and I and such for Kandie]
I stirred awake sometime later. I opened my eyes and saw a girl about my age sitting by my bed.
"You're awake!" She smiled at me. "I'm Jane Guyer. Joe-he's my brother- he carried you inside after you fainted in our front yard. I think he likes you. He says you look familiar too. What's your name?"
"K-Katherine." I stuttered. "But people call me Kandie."
[originaly I didn't have Kandie tell them her name until a few days later but I'm editing the story as I go. I'm still re-writing the first as there was too much physical contact between Joe and Kandie]
"That's pretty." Jane stood."I'll go get mama." She turned and left the room.
Guyer. I thought the name sounded familiar but I couldn't remember if I had ever known any Guyers. I looked up as Jane entered the room followed by woman around 35 or so obviously her Mom and the most gorgeous boy I had ever seen. His brown hair hung over his forehead his chocolate-brown eyes stayed on me the minute he entered the room causing me to blush.....
More later! How was that MJ?????
~DestinyLies
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I think it's a nice break personally but I like the wy you write
HEHEHE, I don't mind....
YAY! I am so hopless and you are good
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Thanks so much! Your comments mean alot! As I don't let many people read my writing...I'm a little shy.I think it's a nice break personally but I like the wy you write
HEHEHE, I don't mind....
YAY! I am so hopless and you are good
But I love people reading it on here!!!
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well Keep it up
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Thanks....hmmmmmmmmm what to write what to write??????????????
Oh heres part of my Rose Fairies....
Destiny is a "Rose fairy" she lives in a rose and was sent by her father to Landon. The two become friends and oddly Landon finds himself falling in love with the inch tall fairy. As Destiny's birthday wish she wants to be able to become human size because she too has fallen in love with Landon. Marissa and ALyssa [I think are the head fairies names] grant her wish. Destiny then goes to Landon's prom where he sees her...they confess their feelings for eachother then, while dancing Destiny faints...as her rose begins to wilt. Only by Landons' kiss and his whispered "I love you" did she stay alive...... This is after all of that Landon's step dad has just yelled at him for who knows what.
Destiny fluttered down from the vase holding her roses. She watched Landon pace his room. "What's wrong?" She asked the young man.
"My step dad." Landon clenched his fists trying to control his anger.
Destiny grew human size and stood infront of Landon."What did he do?" She watched Landon's face soften.
"He got mad at me for coming home two minutes late lastnight." Landon sat down on his bed.
Destiny studied the boy, his [green?] eyes flashed, and his hair hung over his forehead. "Landon..."She spoke his name. "Were you trying to get home by curfew?" She asked.
"You are not taking his side are you?" Landon accused.
"No. I'm just asking." Destiny shrank back away from him.
"Of course I was,Des, if I wasn't I wouldn't have gotten home just two minutes after curfew." Landon reached towards her. "Come here I didn't mean to yell at you."
Destiny took his hand and let him pull her to him......
How's that??????
~DestinyLies
Oh heres part of my Rose Fairies....
Destiny is a "Rose fairy" she lives in a rose and was sent by her father to Landon. The two become friends and oddly Landon finds himself falling in love with the inch tall fairy. As Destiny's birthday wish she wants to be able to become human size because she too has fallen in love with Landon. Marissa and ALyssa [I think are the head fairies names] grant her wish. Destiny then goes to Landon's prom where he sees her...they confess their feelings for eachother then, while dancing Destiny faints...as her rose begins to wilt. Only by Landons' kiss and his whispered "I love you" did she stay alive...... This is after all of that Landon's step dad has just yelled at him for who knows what.
Destiny fluttered down from the vase holding her roses. She watched Landon pace his room. "What's wrong?" She asked the young man.
"My step dad." Landon clenched his fists trying to control his anger.
Destiny grew human size and stood infront of Landon."What did he do?" She watched Landon's face soften.
"He got mad at me for coming home two minutes late lastnight." Landon sat down on his bed.
Destiny studied the boy, his [green?] eyes flashed, and his hair hung over his forehead. "Landon..."She spoke his name. "Were you trying to get home by curfew?" She asked.
"You are not taking his side are you?" Landon accused.
"No. I'm just asking." Destiny shrank back away from him.
"Of course I was,Des, if I wasn't I wouldn't have gotten home just two minutes after curfew." Landon reached towards her. "Come here I didn't mean to yell at you."
Destiny took his hand and let him pull her to him......
How's that??????
~DestinyLies
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interesting concept but I know you can write less dry.
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Thanks!!!
I'll write more ASAP!!!!! I really didn't like that myself...the Destiny/Landon tidbit....
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OMG I had the weirdest dream lastnight...it was about me and a guy who lived in space....like in a space station....he kept calling me...but I never was able to answer and finaly I called him back during the lunar eclipse and got his voicemail...I left a message and then waited for him to call me back....should I write it out????????????
~DestinyLies
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sounds odd but why not. sometimes dreams make really great stories.
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I"ve already typed /written alot out! Here it is:
I sat on my bed and stared down at my cell phone. 2005-115-2469. The mysterious number glowed on the screen. I had been receiving calls from this strange number for over a month, but I had never had the courage to call it back. The only message I had was a text that simply said: Please call during the lunar eclipse. That was it. No name. Nothing. Only that simple request. And tonight was the lunar eclipse.
I looked out through my window at the night sky, at the silvery disk that was partially covered. I glanced back down at my phone fifty minutes until the eclipse. The time surprisingly went by quickly. I went and got me a Dr. Pepper from the kitchen downstairs. Then went outside on the roof of my two-story house that I shared with my best friend Amber ________. I drank the Dr. Pepper and set the empty can beside of me. I looked up at the sparkling stars in the night sky. I smiled as a memory came into my head. My very first boy friends last name had been Starkey, and the times we had said something about seeing the same stars flashed in my mind. He was gone now though. I hadn't spoken to him since he had gotten his number changed because he switched phone services because of bad reception. That was the only boy I had ever loved and he wasn't the only boy I had dated. Finally it was one minute until total lunar eclipse. When the count down on my phone flashed zero I found the familiar number, pressed send, held the phone to my ear, and waited…. no ring, not even a tone. Suddenly a voice spoke, voicemail…."Hey, Candi, this is Daniel. I am not able to answer because of the eclipse. Leave a message if you want. Bye…" a few seconds later I heard a beep. And though I don't know why I left this message: "Hey…Daniel. This is Candi, I was calling…well to see who you are really. Call me back when you can. Bye." I pushed end, hanging up. "What did I just do? Who is Daniel? And where does he live?" I spoke out loud to my self. I waited until midnight to receive the call, but I didn't. So after turning the volume on my phone completely off, I lay down and went to sleep.
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"So you called the number?" My best friend and roommate Amber asked me the next day as we carried our trays of food towards a table in the packed malls food court. We had been in and out of stores all day searching for Amber's niece a birthday present- but the child's birthday was in a month but Amber wanted to make sure she got it in time. And now at 12:00 noon we stopped to eat lunch at the food court.
"Yes, and I got a voicemail speaking directly to me." I set my tray of Chinese food down on a table with four chairs around it and sat down in a chair.
Amber took the chair across from me. "Do you see Jared?" She asked searching the area for her boyfriend who was supposed to meet us here.
"Uh, yeah. He's coming this way." I motioned towards the black haired boy heading straight for our table.
"So who was it?" Amber asked as Jared sat down in the chair next to her.
"Who? Candi's mystery called?" Jared looked at me then at Amber.
"Yes. His name is Daniel. That's all I know." We prayed over out food. I forked some of the sweet chicken into my mouth, chewed and swallowed. "He sounded nice."
"A lot of guys sound nice" Amber pointed out. "Did he ever call you back?" Amber asked taking a bite out of her own food.
I shook my head." No. I waited until midnight."
"Have you checked this morning?" Jared asked before shoveling his own food into his mouth.
"No." I retrieved my cell phone out of my pocket book. I had one missed call, I viewed it…it was from Daniel. "He called!" I felt excitement swelling up inside me.
"When?" Amber asked, leaning across the table.
"At twelve fifteen last night." I moaned." I missed it."
"He'll call back." Jared said knowingly.
"How do you know?" Amber looked at her boyfriend.
Jared shrugged. "It's simple." He put a piece of chicken in his mouth, chewed and swallowed. "The guy has been calling you for two months. And you never answered. You finally call him back and when he returns your call you're a sleep. He'll call back. I know guys trust me." Jared sat back in his chair.
"Are you hoping he does?" Amber looked at me. "You are a guy." She said to Jared.
I shrugged." I don't know." I sipped my Dr. Pepper through a straw.
Amber smiled at me. She knew I did. "Yeah."
"It's a good thing too, because if I wasn't a guy I wouldn't be dating you." Jared smiled at his girl friend.
I smiled at the two they had been dating for almost a year now, but had known each other much longer.
We finished our food, threw away the trash, and continued shopping. We finally found a __________ that Amber thought Cameron Grace would like and I agreed.........
Well????
~DestinyLies
**The ______[blanks] are where I haven't thought of a name or something.
Here it is: I sat on my bed and stared down at my cell phone. 2005-115-2469. The mysterious number glowed on the screen. I had been receiving calls from this strange number for over a month, but I had never had the courage to call it back. The only message I had was a text that simply said: Please call during the lunar eclipse. That was it. No name. Nothing. Only that simple request. And tonight was the lunar eclipse.
I looked out through my window at the night sky, at the silvery disk that was partially covered. I glanced back down at my phone fifty minutes until the eclipse. The time surprisingly went by quickly. I went and got me a Dr. Pepper from the kitchen downstairs. Then went outside on the roof of my two-story house that I shared with my best friend Amber ________. I drank the Dr. Pepper and set the empty can beside of me. I looked up at the sparkling stars in the night sky. I smiled as a memory came into my head. My very first boy friends last name had been Starkey, and the times we had said something about seeing the same stars flashed in my mind. He was gone now though. I hadn't spoken to him since he had gotten his number changed because he switched phone services because of bad reception. That was the only boy I had ever loved and he wasn't the only boy I had dated. Finally it was one minute until total lunar eclipse. When the count down on my phone flashed zero I found the familiar number, pressed send, held the phone to my ear, and waited…. no ring, not even a tone. Suddenly a voice spoke, voicemail…."Hey, Candi, this is Daniel. I am not able to answer because of the eclipse. Leave a message if you want. Bye…" a few seconds later I heard a beep. And though I don't know why I left this message: "Hey…Daniel. This is Candi, I was calling…well to see who you are really. Call me back when you can. Bye." I pushed end, hanging up. "What did I just do? Who is Daniel? And where does he live?" I spoke out loud to my self. I waited until midnight to receive the call, but I didn't. So after turning the volume on my phone completely off, I lay down and went to sleep.
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"So you called the number?" My best friend and roommate Amber asked me the next day as we carried our trays of food towards a table in the packed malls food court. We had been in and out of stores all day searching for Amber's niece a birthday present- but the child's birthday was in a month but Amber wanted to make sure she got it in time. And now at 12:00 noon we stopped to eat lunch at the food court.
"Yes, and I got a voicemail speaking directly to me." I set my tray of Chinese food down on a table with four chairs around it and sat down in a chair.
Amber took the chair across from me. "Do you see Jared?" She asked searching the area for her boyfriend who was supposed to meet us here.
"Uh, yeah. He's coming this way." I motioned towards the black haired boy heading straight for our table.
"So who was it?" Amber asked as Jared sat down in the chair next to her.
"Who? Candi's mystery called?" Jared looked at me then at Amber.
"Yes. His name is Daniel. That's all I know." We prayed over out food. I forked some of the sweet chicken into my mouth, chewed and swallowed. "He sounded nice."
"A lot of guys sound nice" Amber pointed out. "Did he ever call you back?" Amber asked taking a bite out of her own food.
I shook my head." No. I waited until midnight."
"Have you checked this morning?" Jared asked before shoveling his own food into his mouth.
"No." I retrieved my cell phone out of my pocket book. I had one missed call, I viewed it…it was from Daniel. "He called!" I felt excitement swelling up inside me.
"When?" Amber asked, leaning across the table.
"At twelve fifteen last night." I moaned." I missed it."
"He'll call back." Jared said knowingly.
"How do you know?" Amber looked at her boyfriend.
Jared shrugged. "It's simple." He put a piece of chicken in his mouth, chewed and swallowed. "The guy has been calling you for two months. And you never answered. You finally call him back and when he returns your call you're a sleep. He'll call back. I know guys trust me." Jared sat back in his chair.
"Are you hoping he does?" Amber looked at me. "You are a guy." She said to Jared.
I shrugged." I don't know." I sipped my Dr. Pepper through a straw.
Amber smiled at me. She knew I did. "Yeah."
"It's a good thing too, because if I wasn't a guy I wouldn't be dating you." Jared smiled at his girl friend.
I smiled at the two they had been dating for almost a year now, but had known each other much longer.
We finished our food, threw away the trash, and continued shopping. We finally found a __________ that Amber thought Cameron Grace would like and I agreed.........
Well????
~DestinyLies
**The ______[blanks] are where I haven't thought of a name or something.
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interesting...I think you could have written it better...no I know you could have but it was really interesting are you going to finish it?
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Yes...I am editing as I write it.
Thanks!! I"ll add something new later. I"m leaving for Jamaica Friday!!!!!!!!!
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I am back! Did ya'll miss me??? Well I thought I had posted something but ....no. So here I go.
I unzipped my duffel bag and put a tshirt inside. Turning aroud I started to get more clothes out of my drawers. I looked up as I heard the door open. "Hey." I smiled at Joe.
"Hey." Joe had a confused look on his face."Where are you going?"
"Camp. They asked me to fill in for Jill. She is getting married this weekend and will be on her honeymoon next week. I know I told you about it." I continued adding clothes into the bag.
"I remember. I just thought you would stay here." Joe leaned against my bed.
"I would but I promised them I would three months ago." I told him.
"So you would wrather go watch a bunch of screaming kids, than stay here with me?" Joe's voice sounded hurt.
"No!" I yelled. I didn't like where this was going. "NO! How could you think that? But I can't break a promise that I made three months ago because you got a leave, Joseph." I stopped packing and looked up at him.
"Then there was really no use in me coming back. I come back to see you." Joe was starting to yell. "And when I do you have to go to camp."
"I'm only going to be gone for five days,Joe. That's not even half of your leave." I fealt tears sting my eyes.
"So what am I supposed to do while you're gone?" Joe paced to the window.
"Go hang out with Lucas and your other friends. Whatever you want to do, Joe." I softened my voice.
"I haven't seen you in six months, Katherine. I want to spend time with you." He turned back to me. "But I don't guess you want to spend time with me."
"Joe, stop! I love it when you come home, I would love to stay home and spend time with you but I can't just tell them I can't come two days before I'm supposed to show up, because you got a leave." I fealt my voice shaking.
"Maybe I should just go back then!" Joe yelled."Because, there is no reason for me to stay."
"NO!" I shook my head. "We'll have plenty of time together when I get back. I didn't know you would be home this week when I promised to do the job. And neither did you." I fealt a tear slip down my cheek. "Please, try to understand."
Joe stood there a few seconds before leaving the room.
That's when I fell to the floor on my knees and cried...
Well???????? That wasn't the original and I liked that one better. If I need to revise let me know!
DestinyLies
p.s I think it's too short.... But I don't know how to lengthen it....
I unzipped my duffel bag and put a tshirt inside. Turning aroud I started to get more clothes out of my drawers. I looked up as I heard the door open. "Hey." I smiled at Joe.
"Hey." Joe had a confused look on his face."Where are you going?"
"Camp. They asked me to fill in for Jill. She is getting married this weekend and will be on her honeymoon next week. I know I told you about it." I continued adding clothes into the bag.
"I remember. I just thought you would stay here." Joe leaned against my bed.
"I would but I promised them I would three months ago." I told him.
"So you would wrather go watch a bunch of screaming kids, than stay here with me?" Joe's voice sounded hurt.
"No!" I yelled. I didn't like where this was going. "NO! How could you think that? But I can't break a promise that I made three months ago because you got a leave, Joseph." I stopped packing and looked up at him.
"Then there was really no use in me coming back. I come back to see you." Joe was starting to yell. "And when I do you have to go to camp."
"I'm only going to be gone for five days,Joe. That's not even half of your leave." I fealt tears sting my eyes.
"So what am I supposed to do while you're gone?" Joe paced to the window.
"Go hang out with Lucas and your other friends. Whatever you want to do, Joe." I softened my voice.
"I haven't seen you in six months, Katherine. I want to spend time with you." He turned back to me. "But I don't guess you want to spend time with me."
"Joe, stop! I love it when you come home, I would love to stay home and spend time with you but I can't just tell them I can't come two days before I'm supposed to show up, because you got a leave." I fealt my voice shaking.
"Maybe I should just go back then!" Joe yelled."Because, there is no reason for me to stay."
"NO!" I shook my head. "We'll have plenty of time together when I get back. I didn't know you would be home this week when I promised to do the job. And neither did you." I fealt a tear slip down my cheek. "Please, try to understand."
Joe stood there a few seconds before leaving the room.
That's when I fell to the floor on my knees and cried...
Well???????? That wasn't the original and I liked that one better. If I need to revise let me know!
DestinyLies
p.s I think it's too short....
But I don't know how to lengthen it....
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You are an amazing writer!!! I am such a big fan right now! I loved everything youve written there all sooo good!