My first (short) story EVER! In celebration of Narnia Day.

[Zella]

This is really nice; I like it. Good job.

 

[Aslan's Child_1996]

Your story was awesome! I absolutely loved it!

 

[BarbarianKing]

This is really nice; I like it. Good job.

Your story was awesome! I absolutely loved it!

Hey! Thank you both for reading and commenting!!!!

 

[Steve]

Thank you for pointing this out to me! I enjoyed it a whole lot, especially the dialog in the second half. You obviously put some good thought into how both to make it work with the canon and to have its own feel and details. Good job!

 

[BarbarianKing]

Thank you for pointing this out to me! I enjoyed it a whole lot, especially the dialog in the second half. You obviously put some good thought into how both to make it work with the canon and to have its own feel and details. Good job!

Thanks for reading Steve! I appreciate it!

 

[SeaStar]

I just read this story; I think it's great.

 

[BarbarianKing]

I just read this story; I think it's great.

Thank you for reading it.

 

[Brother of Narnians]

Great work!

The story was very well written, graet work!

 

[BarbarianKing]

Woohoo!!! A new reader! Thanks a lot!! (I added you, by the way )

 

[Prince_Of_Narnia]

Nice story....I can't imagine it, I can't even write that long....and you have a nice detail.

 

[BarbarianKing]

Nice story....I can't imagine it, I can't even write that long....and you have a nice detail.

I had forgotten to say thank you. Thank you!!!

 

[Queen Abbie the Brave]

Brilliant story! I enjoyed reading it very much.

 

[BarbarianKing]

Brilliant story! I enjoyed reading it very much.

Thank you Queen Abby!! Just for that I will never shorten your name to things like QA or Queenie, or other silly thing like that!!

 

[TheGardener]

nice, very mousey.

 

[BarbarianKing]

Thank you Gardener. It's always nice to get new readers.

 

[Laurel]

Wow! I just read your story, and I really really really like it! I always love stories that tie things together and make connections, and your certainly did that: Enoch, Stone Table, and Reepicheep's prophecy all tied together! Plus it was very interesting to read your first sentence. My first reaction was "WHAT?!?" My English would call that a very effective attention-getter. Great work!

 

[Pitchike12]

This is an awesome short story!!!

 

[BarbarianKing]

Thank you to my new readers. I'm glad you liked it. Laurel: I stole that technique from a master Storyteller (sshhhh!). Only the technique, not the actual words, although it's very similar.

 

[SeaStar]

Plus it was very interesting to read your first sentence. My first reaction was "WHAT?!?" My English would call that a very effective attention-getter. Great work!

That's the reason I read this story at first. I saw the text in the box [you know, the one that shows up when you hold the arrow over the thread title] and the first sentence made me curious.

 

[Pitchike12]

That's the reason I read this story at first. I saw the text in the box [you know, the one that shows up when you hold the arrow over the thread title] and the first sentence made me curious.

The same thought as SeaStar also it made me more curios about the story....