Fan-Fic, a different side of the heroes of Narnia

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He glared at the other man and walked past him. “Hey Peter! I was joking!” He called after him. Peter stopped and looked back, “well it wasn’t funny Ed.” He sighed and kept walking, Ed stared after him. What’s his problem? He shrugged and walked to the room Cara was in. He knocked on the closed door and slowly opened it. He stared at a girl sitting on a bed talking to Lucy. She was the most beautiful girl he had ever seen. She looked at him; he felt his knees go weak. “H…hi,” he stuttered. He saw Lucy grin. “Cara, this is Edmond, Ed for short. Ed this is Cara.” Cara smiled slightly, “hello.” Ed leaned heavily on the door, she had the most beautiful smile.​
“Ed is my brother,” Lucy told Cara; she looked at Ed and gave him a look that said ‘stop staring’. Ed coughed, “I’m going to go see if dinner’s ready.” He turned and walked into the hall, quickly closing the door.​
Cara jumped up as soon as she door closed. “I have to leave,” she said to Lucy and Tumnus.​
“Cara, calm down,” Lucy said. “What’s wrong? Why did you scream when you saw Peter?” Cara stared at her, “you know him?” She asked quietly. Lucy laughed slightly, “of course I know him, he’s my brother.” Cara collapsed onto the bed. “Your brother?” She whispered. Lucy nodded, “yes. Cara, what’s wrong? You look sick.” Cara looked up at him, “I’m not feeling very good; I think I’ll just rest.” Lucy looked at Tumnus, “alright, I’ll bring you some dinner.” She glanced at Tumnus and they left the room, leave Cara alone.​
Cara lay on her bed for a while, she stared at the wall. She finally got up and walked over to the balcony. She looked out, it was beautiful here. Cara jumped slightly and turned around; someone was knocking on her door. She slowly walked over and opened the door. A girl about her age was standing there. She was gorgeous; she looked like an older Lucy. “Hi, I’m Susan,” she said finally, “I’m Lucy’s sister.” Cara smiled, “I’m Cara.” Cara opened the door the rest of the way. Susan handed her a tray with food on it, “enjoy your dinner,” she said coldly. She turned and left Cara standing there, staring after her. She walked back into her room and closed her door. Cara set the food on the table and laid back down, she didn’t feel like eating now. She pulled the blankets on the bed over her and cried herself to sleep.​
Cara woke up and looked around, it was dark outside. She got up and walked over to the sack her mother had given her and opened it. She pulled out a piece of bread and ate it, she reached in for another piece, her hand hit something hard. Cara slowly pulled it out of the bag. It was a carved wooden box, with gold on it. She slowly opened the lid, there was a note. She picked it up and opened it. This was your mothers; was all it said. Cara gently picked a necklace out of the box; it was gold with a crystal sun on the front of a gold pendant. She looked at it for a moment then put it around her neck. It felt cool against her skin, it felt like it belonged there.​
 
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Cara looked up, she heard someone walking outside her door. She slowly stood up and walked over to her door. She pressed her ear to the door and listened, the person was walking down the hall. She slowly opened the door and walked out; she saw someone walk around the corner. Cara walked out and silently closed the door behind her; she walked down the hall after the person. She stopped at the corner and looked around. She saw Lucy and Ed standing on a balcony. Cara slowly got closer; she hid behind a large pillar in the shadows. They’re voices drifted back to her.​
“Ed, I’m worried about him,” Lucy said quietly, “he’s always working, he never sleeps and he hardly eats, its not good for him.” Ed sighed audibly, “I know Lu, but you know Peter, he wants to be the best he can be.” Lucy walked over to the railing and looked around, “I just wish he wouldn’t work so much, he never has any fun,” she looked back at Ed, “we hardly ever see him.” Edmond walked over to her, “Maybe we could help him with his work, he doesn’t need to do all of it on his own.” Lucy shook her head, “Susan offered today, but it ended in an argument,” she looked up at Ed, “I have an idea.” Ed looked at her slightly excited, “well what is it?” He asked when she didn’t say. “Why don’t we go on a pick nick tomorrow, Peter will have to come, and we will get to have some fun.” Ed smiled, “I guess you do have something in your head.” Lucy glared at him and turned around. “We should go back to bed; we’ll have to get up early tomorrow to have everything planed before Peter can object.” Ed nodded, “uh, Lu, can we invite Cara to come with us?” Lucy looked back at Ed, her eyes wide, “you like her? Ed!” Lucy laughed, “you don’t know her.” Ed blushed slightly, “I just thought that since she’s a guest here we should invite her.” Lucy smiled knowingly, “alright, I’ll ask, but I don’t think she’ll come, not after the way she reacted when she saw Peter.” Ed grinned, “maybe seeing the high king of Narnia was to much for her.”​
Cara’s eyes widened, king? She wondered, they are the rulers of Narnia. She looked up and saw Lucy and Ed start to walk towards her; she quickly and silently dashed down the hall and back to her room. She closed the door silently after her and leaned against it.​
 
Here's a little more, sorry its not very much, I've been really busy.


Cara looked up she could hear people walking in the hall; she jumped in her bed and closed her eyes. She heard them walk past and two doors close. She breathed a sigh of relief slowly drifted into sleep.​
The next morning Cara woke to sun shinning through the window onto her face. She yawned and sat up, she could her voices outside her room. Someone knocked on her door. Cara got up and walked over and opened it, it was Lucy and Ed. Queen Lucy and King Ed, she corrected herself.​
 
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Lucy smiled, “good morning Cara,” she glanced at Ed, he was smiling and staring at Cara. “We are going on a pick nick and were wondering if you’d like to come?”Cara glanced at Ed then looked at Lucy, “I’d love to.” Lucy grinned, “wonderful,” she looked behind her and was handed something, it was a box. She looked back at Cara, “this is for you, I hope its fits.” She hands the box to Cara; she took it and look at it. “Its one of my sister’s old dresses, she doesn’t wear it anymore, and you needed something to wear.” Cara looked up at her and smiled, “thank you.” Lucy grinned again, “your welcome, we’ll be back in a little while to get you for the pick nick.” She grabbed Ed’s arm, “come on Ed.” Cara closed the door as Lucy dragged Ed away.​
 
It's spelled picnic. And when you say something like "I like reading too" the "too" has two "o"s.
I hope you don't mind me being critical (I'm terrible when I'm in the mood). :p

Up till now, I like it. I like your style of writing, and I'm looking forward to more. :)
 
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