Redemption

tottyfruitty said:
Mwhahaha
Next installment will be done tonight (British time), I promise!
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"So do you know what you want?" Austin asked as they walked out of class.
"Want for what?" she asked.
He laughed "your birthday silly"
"Oh right...........nothing........"
"What? You must want something"
".........." she did but it was something or rather someone he couldn't give her.
"Okay you want me to surprise you don't you? Well that's fine. And your par.."
"No.........no I don't want a party, no present, nothing. Actually I would just prefer it if we just pretended like it was just another day okay?" She replied opening her locker.
"Don't be stupid Loralei why would we do that? You're turning 18 and you only turn 18 once. It's going to be huge"
"I said NO!..........." she exclaimed angrily.
He stopped talking and just stared at her along with other students walking the halls.
"Whats her problem?"..........."I could never say no to Austin" she heard them gossip.
She slammed her locker shut and began to walk to her next class.
"See you at lunch then" Austin said silently as he walked to his own class.
Loralei felt aweful. She shouldn't have shouted at him and how was he to know. Nobody knew..........she felt so alone in her pain. She got to her class and stood by the door.
"Are you coming in Loralei?" asked Amanda.
"Err no........I've got a free period" she lied turning around and walking fastly towards the entrance of the school. She slowed down when she walked out not wanting to attract attention to herself. This was the first time she had skipped class but with all of Austins talk about her birthday it started to bring back bad memories that Loralei had tried to forget.

She sat in the cafe sipping her milkshake. She fingered the green crystal on her necklase and a tear fell from her eye as she had another flash back.

Tristan opened the door and let the woman and the child pass.
"Thank you" she said
"You're welcome" he replied walking into the building. He walked casually to the counter.
"Hello and welcome to the ice skating ring. Can I help you with something?" The young woman behind the counter asked.
"Yes, could you please tell me where I can find Miss Dawson"
"Well she's training a class right now but if you sit down over there" she said pointing towards the common room "I'll let her know you're waiting".
Tristan nodded and sat down on one of the chairs. He watched the keen skaters walk by and those who hadn't even attempted getting on the ice leave. He tapped his fingers patiently on his knee as he waited for Loralei.

"Loralei.......there's a young and rather cute guy waiting for you in the common room" Melinda told her.
"Maybe it is my lucky day after all" she joked taking her skates off. She turned to her class "Thanks guys, you were all brilliant and Jimmy keep practicing on those moves okay". She put her shoes on and walked to her bosses office. "I'm done for the day...."
"Actually I was wandering if you could lock up. I wouldn't ask but Melinda has to go and get Carrie from nursery and I have a meeting to attend" he pleaded.
"Sure" she could never say no to anyone.
"Thanks Loralei" he replied getting up and leaving the room.
"Sure........." she mumbled to herself. She began to switch the lights off until she got to the common room. There he was, still sitting there after all this time. "Tristan?" Loralei mumbled to herself. It was hard to recognise him because he had a cap on. He was wearing blue denim jeans, a light green hoodie and a dark blue baseball cap with NY on it.
"How long have you been here for?" Loralei asked when she finally got the courage to go and talk to him.
"Oh not long........about an hour or so" he replied smiling "are you locking up?"
"Yes.........sorry but its closing time"
"Great.......I came here for my lesson and you're kicking me out" Tristan replied getting up from his seat.
"I'm really sorry but...." she began "well I suppose Dave wouldn't mind" she added. Looking into his eyes, she found it hard to turn him away "but just for half an hour".
"30 minutes and I'll be gone".
She smiled "Okay but you're going to have to take that cap off. It's a health and safety rule".
He took it off revealing his sandy blonde hair. He ran his hand through it.
 
tottyfruitty said:
They entered the school gates which had the writings 'Welcome to Mckinley High' spread across them. Even before you entered the school you would know that it was made and meant for the prestigious and richer people.
Austin and Loralei walked passed the car park. The cars ranged from BMW's to Mercedes and Range Rovers and these kids weren't even 20 yet.
Brianna stepped out of her Mercedes covertable. She placed her sunglasses on, put her gucci hand bag in her hand and locked her car. She walked past Austin and Lorelai.
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Here is what I was talking about,

tottyfruitty said:
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Entering through the large gates to the school yard Lorelai still couldn’t help but look up at the huge sign above them that read 'Welcome to Mckinley High'. Even before you entered the school you would innately know by the perfectly trimmed grass and seemingly gody layout of the place that this school was meant for the prestigious and rich that tossed around places such as France and Spain for vacationing spots like you would say the beach.
Austin and Loralei walked through the parking lot past cars ranging from BMW's to Mercedes to Range Rovers and most of them had been birthday gifts to kids younger than Lorelai. Brianna stepped out of her brilliantly waxed, spotless, midnight blue Mercedes convertible that she had gotten for her sweet sixteen with a click as her Prada heals met the pavement. She put her sunglasses on, grabbed her Gucci hand bag and with a push of a button the headlights flashed with a high pitched double beep, locking her car.
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Ok, I may have gone a little overboard here but I just want to ill illustrate that with a little description and cutting the chop to a minimum it paints a more vivid picture. honestly I can't wait for the next update :D
 
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Thanks for your editing but I didn't want to attract too much attention to the school. Its not really a main or important part of the story so I wanted to keep the description nice and short ;) but I see what you mean :).

Haha charming and dangerous.......interesting combination.

Nex installment will be in by tomorrow.
 
I understand that you wanted to keep the description to a minimum but even with that its a good idea to paint a picture so everytime you mention the school or the school kids the reader can see it. Like I said I may have gone a bit overboard btu I just wanted to illustrate what I was saying. Like I said before can't wait for the new instalment :D
 
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~Grateful * Surrender~ said:
I understand that you wanted to keep the description to a minimum but even with that its a good idea to paint a picture so everytime you mention the school or the school kids the reader can see it. Like I said I may have gone a bit overboard btu I just wanted to illustrate what I was saying. Like I said before can't wait for the new instalment :D
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Her cell phone began to virbrate as it sat on the table infront of her. She flipped it open and looked at the caller ID 'Austin...' she thought hesistating before she flipped it shut. She wasn't in the mood for chatting and she knew he'd only want to come and find her. Loralei wanted to be alone....with her thoughts and memories.

Austin waited for Loralei to pick up her cell hone. He was waiting for her outside the canteen. She didn't answer. He sighed and placed his cell back into his pocket. 'Maybe he should have dropped it when she had asked him to or was she just playing hard to get' Austin thought when Brianna walked over to him.
"Hey......where's Loralei?"
"I don't know"
"Oh, well I hate to see a fellow student all alone at lunch time........so why don't you come and join us" Brianna suggested motioning to the table that occupied mostly jocks and cheerleaders.
He would rather go and find Loralei and make sure she was okay.
"I should go and find her"
"Austin........I think you should just give Loralei some space. She'll be back"
He shrugged "okay. Actually I was wandering if you could do me a favour...." he began as they walked over to the table.

Loralei got onto the ice. She did it so blissfully anyone would have thought she had been born to skate, unlike Tristan. He stumbled onto the ice and held on tightly to the sides.
"Wow this really is slippery" Tristan said tightening his grip.
"Well it is ice" Loralei replied turning around.
"Haha...maybe this wasn't such a great idea" he said trying to get off the ice.
She moved quickly towards him "so you're just going to give up? You haven't even tried........"
He glanced at her and then at the ice and finally at his feet.
"Come on........I'll help you" she said reaching out her hand.
"How do I know you're not going to lead me to the middle and leave me?" he asked.
"You'll just have to trust me"
He hesistated before he finally took her hand. They moved slowly and stayed close to the sides.
"This isn't that bad" he admitted. Loralei smiled. They began to move a little faster and Tristan still held on tightly to Loraleis hand.
"Do you think maybe we can move away from the sides now?" she asked but without waiting for an answer she began to lead him into the centre of the ice rink. Without realising it Tristan had let go of Loraleis hand and was now skating freely by himself.
"Oh my goodness.........." she exclaimed swerving round so that she was now facing him and skating backwards
"What? Is there something wrong?"
"You're doing it. You're skating"
"I am" he replied excitedly.
"Wow either you knew how to ice skate and just lied about it or I'm a really awesome teacher".
Just as Loralei said that, like she had jinxed it, Tristan stumbled and fell. Luckily Loralei had been skating infront of him so she caught him. They bumped noses. "I'm sorry........that was my fault" Loralei admitted. "I jinxed it". They were so close now that Loralei could feel the warmth air from his breathing. He smiled "maybe I'm not that good after all" he replied.
She had never been this close to anyone before, especially not a guy. It was the strangest but most exciting feeling. Her heart beated so fast that she thought it was going to pop out of her chest. She blushed slightly and he noticed. Unknowingly she was still holding onto him but he didn't mind. She looked into his eyes. They were shinning brightly, reflecting the light. They glistened perfectly and looked like green crystals.

"More coffee?" the waiter asked.
"No thank you" Loralei replied. She glanced at the clock on the wall. She was alarmed to see what it told her. '2:00 no way' she thought.
"Excuse me, is that clock still working?" she asked.
"Erm yes why?"
"So it's really two o'clock?"
"Yes...........you've been sitting there for 3 hours now. Is everything okay?"
She was so embarrassed. They probably thought she was a little crazy. Some weird kid sitting by the window looking dazed and out of it.
"Yes" she replied getting up and quickly walking out. Loralei glanced back and made a mental note of the name of the cafe. She'd never enter there again.
There was no point returning to school now so she headed for the park.
Thinking about it Loralei realised that Tristan had never been bad at ice skating. He had known all along how to skate. No one was that fast at learning, especially with something like ice skating. She smiled slightly. He had just pretended to be bad just to get close to her.

The lights suddenly flickered off.
"Are you okay?" Tristan immediately asked as Loralei let go of his arm.
"Yes............what happened?" she asked slightly creeped out.
"Stop wasting time Tristan. You were sent here to protect her now focus and get the job done" a voice whisphered into his ear.
The lights flickered back on.
"That was so weird. Thats never happened before"
"Did you say something just then?"
"No why?"
"No reason" Tristan replied. He knew why the lights had flickered off and he knew who had caused it. "I better get going. I promised my dad I'd help him move some hey for the horses" he said skating back to the exit.
"Wait...........are you okay? you look a little shaken" Loralei said as she skated after him.
"Yeah, I'm fine. This has been fun. Thanks"
"You're welcome. Maybe we could finish off the lesson some other time"
"Maybe...."
She sighed silently. 'Had she scared him off with her blushing and weird stares?' she thought.
"Maybe you can come down the farm sometime" he suggested noticing she looked a little upset.
"You live on a farm? Really?"
"Yeah, I know. It sounds a little weird. It's my aunts and uncles farm" he replied placing his hat back on. "I'm sure they wouldn't mind. Anyway see you around Loralei" he added before walking out.
She smiled as she watched him leave.
 
~Grateful * Surrender~ said:
glad to help in any way that I can
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"Hey"
"Hey" Loralei replied looking up. Austins face was complelely submerged by the bright sun but by his voice she knew it was him.
He sat down next to her under the huge tree.
The tree sat comfortably in the centre of the green park. To her right she could see the playground which had swings, slides and even a tree house. To her left Loralei saw the huge circular pond that was the home to not only fishes but also swans and ducks. It was so peaceful that whenever she wanted to get away from anyone and everything she'd just come down to the park, sit under the tree and drift off.
"I missed you at lunch"
"I wasn't really hungry, sorry"
"But you had time for a muffin"
"How did you know?" she asked 'was he spying on her?'
"You've got some on your face" he replied trying not to laugh.
"Oh" she blushed slightly and quickly got her mirror out. No wander she had been getting strange looks.
"I heard you missed class today......Brianna gave me this to give to you. It's her notes" he retrieved the folder from his bag and handed it to Loralei.
"Brianna? Really?" she asked surprised.
"Yes. It's not like I could have stolen them from her" he said saracastically
"Thanks..........I'm sorry about shouting at you. I didn't mean to......" she looked down at the notes "I just haven't slept in a really long time and the last thing I want to talk about is my birthday" she admitted.
"I understand" he replied sympathetically. "I'll drop it" he looked up at the sky 'for now anyway' he thought.
"Especially after what happened last year"
"What do you mean?" he asked raising an eyebrow.
"Oh it's nothing." she quickly replied. She hadn't meant to say that out loud.
"Well I better get going".
Austin stood up and helped her up. "But we're good?"
"Yeah. See you tomorrow". They parted ways.
She was still holding the folder in her hand. She glanced at it as she walked. 'Brianna.....why?' she thought when she bumped into a runner.
"Sorry"
"It's okay" he replied.
Loralei looked up immediately. That voice was all too familiar. She was dissappointed. The guy that she had run into had dark brown hair, brown eyes and a moustache.
"Sorry again". Her face saddened and she kept walking. Her necklase lit up.
He glanced back 'always apologising' he thought. He turned back around and carried on running.

She decided to walk the longer way home. It was still bright outside and dinner wouldn't be ready until late anyway. Loralei stopped when she got to the bank though. She stood infront of it just staring inside through the window. Another flashback but this one wasn't as nice as the others.

"Yes.......no way.......that can't be true" the woman behind Loralei had been talking on her cell for the past 20 minutes that she had been in the line.
"Mommy I'm hungry"
"Just a minute darling. Let mommy just get some money out"
"I'm hungry.........I'm hungry"
Loralei watched the little girl tag at her mothers dress continuously. She stopped, looked at Loralei and carried on pulling.
"Next please" the que moved forward slightly. She had been waiting in line for 30 minutes. Her cell rang.
"Hello"
"Hey Lor, it's me"
"Hey Tristan"
"Where are you? We were supposed to meet 20 minutes ago"
"Yeah, sorry but I'm at the bank and there is a major hold up at the que. I shouldn't be that much longer. I'm sure you can wait"
He laughed slightly "I'm getting hungry and the waitress is getting a little impatient. Why don't you just make yourself invincible and skip the que?" he joked.
"You know I can't do that. But I'll hurry over as soon as I'm done" she replied.
'You can do a lot more than you think' he thought "Okay. I'll see you in a bit"
She smiled "okay. Bye". Whenever she spoke to Tristan it made her all tingly inside. It had been 6 months since they had started dating. Loralei had been nervous about the whole thing. Tristan was her first official boyfriend but her parents had loved him so she knew she was with the right guy. She felt like she could be her true self around Tristan but sometimes it felt like he was hding something from her.
Just as it was her turn the doors slammed open. Four guys, all dressed in black, hurried in. They had masks on and were holding rifles.
"Everybody hit the ground, NOW!" one of the guys, probably the leader, shouted raising his weapon. Everyone fell to the ground including Loralei.
"Mommy whats.." the child was quickly gagged by her mother. "Sssh darling."
The woman had dropped her phone on the floor.
"As long as you do what we say and there is no funny business no one will get hurt" the man said.
The other guys headed over to the counter. "Empty out everything into this bag" they demanded. The bankers did as they were told. Loralei watched as all the cash was put into the bags. The woman saw that they were distratced and probably from fear she tried to make a run for it. The guy instinctly shot her.

Tristan sat in the restaurant when he heard what he thought was a gun shot. His first thought was Loralei. He got up quickly, grabbed his jacket and ran out.
"I thought he'd never leave" the waitress told a colleague. He ran for the bank but he had to be careful. There was a lot of traffic and if he did anything out of the ordinary people would notice.

They had three bag fulls of cash but the police had already been allerted. They surrounded the bank. The woman layed on the ground, in a pool of her own blood, still and not breathing.
"Right........you! Get up" he looked straight at the woman with the child. "Both of you! You'll be our first hostages"
"No.......please.....take me alone. Not my child" she pleaded crying hysterically. One of th other guys grabbed her by the hair "he said get up!" she squealed in pain.
"No please. Take me instead. Please don't hurt them" Loralei stood up "I'll be your hostage" she didn't know why she had just agreed to sign her own death warrant but she knew she couldn't sit back while this little girl could become motherless.
"Fine! You'll be next though" he insisted pointing at the lady with his gun.
Loralei raised her hands up. She hoped by some miraculous miracle that there was a hidden door or something for the police to enter through.
 
ooc:OMGH I just wrote like a whole chapter but lost it cos I wasn't logged on!!! ARGH!!!! I'll try and re write it later but if not I wont be on for the next two weeks or so so you'll have to wait a while for the next installment.
 
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