The Witch's Sister

Ok buddy, i just read the part(FINALLY)
OK I think i know what the girl is trying to do, She is trying kill Peters trust for Edmund.She is also using her charm also again.She IS up to something definitely.
Im having some fun with your story.
 

Chapter 8-
As Peter looked down at Edmund he said to Jaden
"It`s hard for me to believe Queen Jaden. I don`t understand why Edmund would do such a thing to harm me."
Jaden looked straight back into Peter`s eyes then at his unconsious brother and asked
"Has he ever done anything bad in the past?"
Peter thought a moment then said slowly and carfully
"Well..."
Before he could say one more word he was cut off by Jaden who said
"Perhaps he is jealous of you, Peter."
Peter turned to look her in the face and said
"But... Edmund had changed. He is no longer the way he used to be."
Jaden quickly then replied with ease
"Maybe hd has gone back to his old ways, he seemed to be in quie a disagreeable mood tonight."
Peter sadly looked down at Edmund and thought to himself Maybe she is right. Maybe he had changed for the worst. Peter then snapped out of his thoughts and slowly lifted his hand and put it on Edmund`s forehead, he still heard Edmund breathing but very heavily and with what seemed like much trouble. Peter felt torn between what Jaden had said and feelings for his younger brother, he wasn`t sure what to think now, but all he was really hoping was that Edmund was live. He then thought of Lucy`s healing fire flower cordinal and at that moment he slowly heaved Edmund onto his Unicorn`s back and said to Jaden
"You may either come or stay here Queen Jaden but whatever you do I`m going back to Cair Paravel. Somthing must be done to save Edmund."
 
Jaden is trying to tell peter that Edmund "is going back to his old ways." I like that.I wonder if she will come with Peter to Cair Paravel...
 
<Turkish Delight> said:
I`ll try and write Chapter 9 somtime today so I`ll PM you when it has been posted. :)
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Ah playing the brothers against each other yet again...this must be something witches are good at. Again this is very plausible considering that the boys as kings are still the same age they were when they entered Narnia, so it's very believable that Edmund is still a bit shakier about his self esteem than Peter. Excellent, TD!!!!!!
 

Chapter 9-
Once Jaden had agreed to come with Peter they set off on their long journey back to Cair Paravel. The sky was now lighting up with the beautiful colors of pink and gold cause by the sunrise, and Edmund`s injury looked even worse in the day light.
As Peter made himself busy by loading all their things up, Jaden watched and smiled not having to do any tiring work at all.
Soon everything was ready to go and Peter let Jaden ride on his beautiful white Unicorn. As Peter walked beside his Unicorn and Jaden he said to her
"Cair Paravel is about a days journey back if we go through the woods and about a 2 days journey if we go across the great plains. Which was do you think we should go, Queen Jaden?"
Peter knew the more safe road would be the plains but he knew the woods would be much faster. He was unsure of what to do so so he waited for her to answer his question. Jaden didn`t even have to think for a minute for she knew the woods were quite dangerous and hopfully she thought that going through the woods would result in the deaths of the High King Peter and his stubborn brother King Edmund.
"Let us go through the woods."
said Jaden simply and with much grace.
No more was said from that moment on until they finally reached the edge of the woods. A beautiful falcon soared overhead and the sweet smell of trees and flowers filled the delicious Narnian air.
They then began making their was into the woods until when they looked up they could no longer see the sky and only the think branches of overgrown trees. The slightest sound of a stream deep in the forest echoed in the silence and Peter and Jaden still did not say a word. Just then they heard a twig snap and both their heads turned to where the sound had come from, and just then a small band of wolves appeared.
 
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Well, Peter really will listen to this girl, what a fool.Those wolfs don't look like good news either, maybie the old Narnian Police.
 
This is great, I can't wait for more! And you're very good at cliffhangers.... hehe

<Turkish Delight> said:
Thanks. Most people don`t like the "Bad" people in the story. LOL! :)
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Well, yeah, but it seems like there's almost always something funny said or done that has at least something to do with the bad guys. ;)
 
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