The Witch's Sister

Chapter 10-
As soon as Peter saw the group of wolves he stood back a step for he knew all to well that the wolves had been loyal to the White Witch and fought against Peter and his army in the great Battle of Beruna. Without even thinking Peter laid a hand on his srowd hild and watched the wolves whose eyes glowed like fire.
"Afraid of us?"
sneered the wolves. Peter quicly counted that there were 6 wolves in all and said back to them in a brave yet small voice
"We are just passing through these woods, we do not want any trouble so in Aslan`s name I demand you will not cause problems for I and the Queen Jaden of Charn."
The wolves eyes quickly widened at the mention of Jaden`s name and began bowing not before the High King but before Jaden and said
"We will humbly serve you, Queen Jaden."
Peter was surprised by their loyalty aand awaited a move from Jaden. Jaden smiled at having these group of creatures at her comand, she now thought over her options she could now order the wolves to kill Peter and his brother or she could carry out her own plan that had been developing in her mind from the time she met the 2 boys. After a long while of thought she decided to take her 2nd option and wait to do her plan later. She then turned to the wolves and said
"Thank you dear wolves for your support and trust in me. We shall now travel to Cair Paravel and I shall speak to you again in the near future."
Peter wondered what she meant by speaking of visiting the wolves again but excused any thoughts of bad motives behind her words. As he watched the wolves nod and dissapear into the shadows he walked over to check on Edmund and saw that he was now starting to open his eyes. Peter smiled to see Edmund becoming consious again and asked thoughtfully
"Ed, how are you feeling?"
Edmund tried to smile back and said slowly
"I..I`m. fine.."
Just then he put his right hand to his side for the pain and run through him once again. He tried to hold back his emotions caused by it but as anyone could tell he was really hurting. Peter put a hand on Edmund`s shoulder and said
"Get some rest, Ed. We have a long journey ahead to get back home."
Edmund nodded then tried to relax but the bumpy ride on the horse caused him to stay awake most of the time.
Finally it began to become night again and just when they all thought they would have to stay the night in the woods they heard the roaring of ocean waves and there before them stoof the grand castle of Cair Paravel.
 
I knew it.
Looks like the queen Jaden is smarter then I thought, although it would end all right there.But then her plans to doing anything to Narnia would fail anyway.
Each one of your parts are exciting to read.
 
Still going strong. I wonder though if you meant to switch point of view so quickly in the last chapter -- everything was being told from Peter's POV until suddenly we have the witch considering her plans, and then things are from her POV. You can do it that way, because you're the author, but sometimes it is better to stick with one POV or make a break

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like that to lets us know you are now switching POV ...

Not to be overly critical, because you are doing really well.
:)
 

Chapter 11-
As the beautiful castle and home of the 4 King`s and Queens of Narnia came into Peter`s view he burst ahead into the castle doors in somthing of a hurry amd yelled out through the castle
"Lucy, Susan come quick!"
Both Queen`s who looked amazing in their beautiful gowns asked
"Peter what happened to you? You were gone much longer than we had expected."
Peter quickly explained what had happened and when he had finished both girls gasped in disbelief at what they had heard. Lucy shook her head thoughtfully then said
"I don`t think Edmund would ever try to harm you, Peter."
Susan then said in a supiror and logical voice
"Well I believe he did, he has been somthing of a traitor before and what`s to stop him from being like the way he was again?"
Peter stood impatiently waiting until finally he spoke up and said
"Whatever the matter is he is still our brother and he need help immedatly. Lu, can you get your fire flower cordinal?"
Lucy quickly ran back up stairs and hurried back in a flash with the cordinal tightly tucked in the palm of her hand. Peter then led her outside to where outside to where Edmund still lay on his horse. Peter slowly put Edmund on the ground and watched as Lucy dripped a drop of fire flower into his mouth. Peter watched Jaden eyeing the cordinal with a quite surprised look in her eyes, she had defently never seen such a thing that could heal before. As everyone watched Edmund he slowly looked at them all and smiled for the pain was now gone and he remembered the time this all had happened before in the great battle. Lucy smiled back at Edmund then said in a sweet tone
"Oh Edmund. I`m so glad your alright."
She then wrapped him in a hug. Just as Edmund was enjoying this happy moment he spotted Jaden leaning again the wall of the castle. His strength then returned to him and he burst angerily by saying to everyone around him
"What in Aslan`s name is she doing here? She is the very one who injured me and Peter!"
Lucy looked at Jaden then at Peter and remembered he had recieved and injury as well and began to pull back his sleeve on his left arm. Peter held up his other hand to stop her then said
"No, Lu. Don`t waste your cordinal on me."
Lucy then said
"Non sence, Peter. Just because your injury is not life threatening dosn`t mean I can`t help you as well."
Even though Peter kept on protesting Lucy got around to doing it anyways and by the look on Peter`s face she knew he felt much better even though he did not admit it. No one made any comment on what Edmund had said for frankly no one had any idea of what to say at all.
 
wait, <TD> do we not find out what happens between the chapter when edmund wakes up in the field and sees Jaden with the sword and when peter tells susan and lucy and lucy cures both Peter and Edmund?
 
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