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BYE!!!!!!!! Sweet dreams!!
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Joe and Kandie Chapter 2 (even though I'm not done with chapter 1) "Popcorn and M&Ms"
I set my plate of food down on the table, then turned to go get the butter that had been forgotten to be put on the table almost running into Joe who was trying to balance his own plate in one hand as well as hold the fat bucket of butter in the other.
“Sorry.” I apologized as I reached for the butter and set it down on the table.
“Thanks.” Joe set his plate down and pulled my chair out for me.
“Thank you.” I smiled as him as I sat down, he sat down in a chair beside of me. “Try the yams. I made them.”
“OK.” Joe put a forkful of the yams into his mouth. He nodded. “They’re delicious.”
“Really?“ I looked at him skeptically. (is that a word)
Joe nodded again. “Yes, really?” His brown eyes held honesty.
“Thanks.” I picked up my own fork and began eating.
Joe tensed up and looked over to my right side. I furrowed my brow and followed his gaze. Jonah sat in the seat to my right. I looked back at Joe, his jaw was set and his brown eyes flashed anger at his brother. I reached over and squeezed his hand. We looked up at he sound of aloud crash in the kitchen. Joe jumped up and rushed to the kitchen. I followed.
The sight in the kitchen made us both laugh. Austin sat in the floor with turkey stuffing all over him, the dishtowel he had tripped on sat beside of him.
“Austin Isaiah Guyer!” Melissa, Austin’s mom stood in the door way. “What happened?” She asked.
“I tripped mom.” Austin mumbled.
Joe reached down his hand to help his cousin stand. “You all right?” He asked.
Austin took Joe’s hand and stood to his feet. “Yeah, thanks.” He brushed him self off.
Joe nodded then lead me back to the dinning room where we finished eating.
Later, I stood wrapped in a thick blanket on the front porch watching the sun set. The orange disk barely showed above (the mountains) turning the clouds pink.
“Hey.”
I turned at the sound. I smiled at Joe. “Hey.” He came up beside of me.
“Are you cold?” Joe asked teasingly. He leaned against the banister.
I nodded and pulled the blanket tighter around me. “Mm-hmm.”
“Do you need a hug?” Joe’s smile melted me. His dark eyes teased.
“Yes.” I stepped into his open arms immediately feeling his warmth. “Much better.”
We watched the sun set and still remained outside.
“I think Austin was embarrassed when he saw you in the kitchen after he slipped.” Joe said after a few minutes of silence.
“I know. Poor Austin.” I looked out across the Guyers front yard. A familiar wolf lay underneath a tree. I smiled at her.
“Come on we better go on inside before someone comes to look for us.” Joe took his arms out from around me.
“All right.” I could still fell the pressure of his arms as I followed him inside. “It’s warm in here.” I remarked taking off the blanket.
“Let’s go see what everyone else is doing.” Joe led me to the living room.
Once we were inside the room we sat down on the couch with Joe’s parents.
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DestinyLies
Chapter 2
Popcorn and M&Ms
Popcorn and M&Ms
I set my plate of food down on the table, then turned to go get the butter that had been forgotten to be put on the table almost running into Joe who was trying to balance his own plate in one hand as well as hold the fat bucket of butter in the other.
“Sorry.” I apologized as I reached for the butter and set it down on the table.
“Thanks.” Joe set his plate down and pulled my chair out for me.
“Thank you.” I smiled as him as I sat down, he sat down in a chair beside of me. “Try the yams. I made them.”
“OK.” Joe put a forkful of the yams into his mouth. He nodded. “They’re delicious.”
“Really?“ I looked at him skeptically. (is that a word)
Joe nodded again. “Yes, really?” His brown eyes held honesty.
“Thanks.” I picked up my own fork and began eating.
Joe tensed up and looked over to my right side. I furrowed my brow and followed his gaze. Jonah sat in the seat to my right. I looked back at Joe, his jaw was set and his brown eyes flashed anger at his brother. I reached over and squeezed his hand. We looked up at he sound of aloud crash in the kitchen. Joe jumped up and rushed to the kitchen. I followed.
The sight in the kitchen made us both laugh. Austin sat in the floor with turkey stuffing all over him, the dishtowel he had tripped on sat beside of him.
“Austin Isaiah Guyer!” Melissa, Austin’s mom stood in the door way. “What happened?” She asked.
“I tripped mom.” Austin mumbled.
Joe reached down his hand to help his cousin stand. “You all right?” He asked.
Austin took Joe’s hand and stood to his feet. “Yeah, thanks.” He brushed him self off.
Joe nodded then lead me back to the dinning room where we finished eating.
Later, I stood wrapped in a thick blanket on the front porch watching the sun set. The orange disk barely showed above (the mountains) turning the clouds pink.
“Hey.”
I turned at the sound. I smiled at Joe. “Hey.” He came up beside of me.
“Are you cold?” Joe asked teasingly. He leaned against the banister.
I nodded and pulled the blanket tighter around me. “Mm-hmm.”
“Do you need a hug?” Joe’s smile melted me. His dark eyes teased.
“Yes.” I stepped into his open arms immediately feeling his warmth. “Much better.”
We watched the sun set and still remained outside.
“I think Austin was embarrassed when he saw you in the kitchen after he slipped.” Joe said after a few minutes of silence.
“I know. Poor Austin.” I looked out across the Guyers front yard. A familiar wolf lay underneath a tree. I smiled at her.
“Come on we better go on inside before someone comes to look for us.” Joe took his arms out from around me.
“All right.” I could still fell the pressure of his arms as I followed him inside. “It’s warm in here.” I remarked taking off the blanket.
“Let’s go see what everyone else is doing.” Joe led me to the living room.
Once we were inside the room we sat down on the couch with Joe’s parents.
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Lucy but Taller
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its awesome.
As awesome as it can be.
As awesome as it can be.
DestinyLies
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Thanks! Which part? Which one? haha
Lucy but Taller
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*breathes* PRESSURE!!!!AHHHH!!!!!*runs out of room*
lol j/k.you give great descriptions.
Popcorn and M&Ms....funny title.....
lol j/k.
you give great descriptions.Popcorn and M&Ms....funny title.....
Truman
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That's a pretty good start. Breaks the ice, a bit. I was thinking about what might've really happened with Austin... going into Sherlock Holmes-mode,
But still, a nice intro... you've gotta get the "Christmas tree hunting" scene in; it just has to be in for developing the story between Joe and Kandie... if you could. The only thing I object to is the "I melted" line. That's another slightly overused phrase. It's a good phrase! It's just getting old, though. To me, anyway.
Breaks the ice, a bit. I was thinking about what might've really happened with Austin... going into Sherlock Holmes-mode, Things like that go through my head.
But still, a nice intro... you've gotta get the "Christmas tree hunting" scene in; it just has to be in for developing the story between Joe and Kandie... if you could. The only thing I object to is the "I melted" line. That's another slightly overused phrase. It's a good phrase! It's just getting old, though. To me, anyway.
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Haha...yeah I know at first I was going to take it out but I didn't.That's a pretty good start.
Things like that go through my head.
Thanks LBT...yeah you'll see why I named it that later.
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Christmas Tree Hunting pt 1...
Here is more of chapter 1!
“When are we going?” Joe asked his mother.
“In a few minutes. Jane, you should probably get Kandie some warmer clothes.” Mrs. Guyer then left the doorway.
“OK. Come on, Kandie.” Jane stood and motioned for me to follow her.
I laughed for the first time in a long time. I looked back at Joe before following his sister out of the room. He shrugged and laughed as well.
As I followed Jane to her bedroom she told me where several of the closed doors led into the house. The library, Jonah’s bedroom, Joe’s bedroom, guest rooms, and studies for each of the three Guyer children. Finally we reached Jane’s bedroom. “It’s a little messy, sorry.” She apologized before opening the door.
I stepped in the room and stopped in shock. I thought my bedroom at home was big, but Jane’s was huge! And no where near messy. A big cherry wood dresser stood to one side next to a full length mirror, a door leading into a bathroom was next to that, a big pink fluffy chair stood in the corner. The huge window seat took my breath away, the cushion along the seat was pink as were the curtains. The double doors on the next wall by the window led into a walk-in closet, the night stand and queen size bed were next both with pink upholstery. A desk with a pink chair sat closest to the door. A pink Apple computer sat on the desk.
Jane had skipped over to her dresser and was now looking through the drawers for clothes. “You look to be about my size, just a little shorter.” She said as she pulled some shirts out of a drawer. “Try them on.” She tossed them to me.
I closed the door before pulling my shirt over my head and trying the white long sleeved shirt Jane had given me. The arms were a little long but other than that if fit perfectly.
“Great!” Jane smiled as she looked at me. “This is fun.” She went to her closet next in search for a pair of jeans, or warm pants. Once she found the right pair I tried them on as well. “We can just roll up the legs a little and that will do it.” Jane said as she rolled up the pant legs. She straightened up and stood back expecting her work. “I think that will work. It’s not like we’re going hiking through the snow. So it won’t be as cold.” She said. “But it is way more fun in the snow.” She added.
I smiled at her. “I don’t doubt it.” I looked down at my outfit. “Thanks for letting me borrow them.” I said.
“You’re welcome.” Jane smiled, her hazel eyes sparkled with laughter. “I don’t mind. It’s like having a sister.”
“I guess so. I’m happy to oblige.” I leaned against the bed. “My twin, Sarah, and I share clothes all of the time.” I said. Sarah, what would she think of me running away? I wondered.
“OK. We are ready to go.”
I looked towards the now open door. A boy who looked a lot like Joe stood in the doorway. That must be Jonah. I thought.
“We’re coming, Jonah.” Jane told him. “Here.” She handed me a coat and then slipped into hers. “Jonah is my twin. So it’s harder to share clothes with a boy.” She laughed.
I laughed as well as I slipped my arms into the coat. I followed Jane out of the room and down stairs where the rest of the family was at.
“Are we ready?” Mr. Guyer asked.
“Yes.” Every one nodded in unison.
“All right. Joe, go get Lightning we will need his help to pull the tree home.” Mr. Guyer ordered.
“Yes, sir.” Joe headed out.
“Can I go with you?” I asked him.
“Sure.” Joe shrugged but he was smiling.
I followed him outside to the barn. “Who is Lightning?” I asked as we headed towards the big barn.
“My horse.” Joe replied. “He’s a big black stallion.” He opened the doors to the barn and flicked on the lights. I followed him to a stall with the name “Lightning” on the door. “Hey boy.” Joe greeted the horse as he opened the stall door. Joe grabbed the halter hanging on a nail by the door and stepped inside the stall. Lightning snorted and stuck his nose out towards the hand Joe stretched out towards him. “Good boy.” Joe patted the horse on the nose. He slipped the halter over Lightning’s’ head and lead him out of the stall. Lightning sniffed at my shoulder, I raised my hand letting him smell my hand before I touched his nose.
I am still typing so I will add as I type more.
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Here is more of chapter 1!
“When are we going?” Joe asked his mother.
“In a few minutes. Jane, you should probably get Kandie some warmer clothes.” Mrs. Guyer then left the doorway.
“OK. Come on, Kandie.” Jane stood and motioned for me to follow her.
I laughed for the first time in a long time. I looked back at Joe before following his sister out of the room. He shrugged and laughed as well.
As I followed Jane to her bedroom she told me where several of the closed doors led into the house. The library, Jonah’s bedroom, Joe’s bedroom, guest rooms, and studies for each of the three Guyer children. Finally we reached Jane’s bedroom. “It’s a little messy, sorry.” She apologized before opening the door.
I stepped in the room and stopped in shock. I thought my bedroom at home was big, but Jane’s was huge! And no where near messy. A big cherry wood dresser stood to one side next to a full length mirror, a door leading into a bathroom was next to that, a big pink fluffy chair stood in the corner. The huge window seat took my breath away, the cushion along the seat was pink as were the curtains. The double doors on the next wall by the window led into a walk-in closet, the night stand and queen size bed were next both with pink upholstery. A desk with a pink chair sat closest to the door. A pink Apple computer sat on the desk.
Jane had skipped over to her dresser and was now looking through the drawers for clothes. “You look to be about my size, just a little shorter.” She said as she pulled some shirts out of a drawer. “Try them on.” She tossed them to me.
I closed the door before pulling my shirt over my head and trying the white long sleeved shirt Jane had given me. The arms were a little long but other than that if fit perfectly.
“Great!” Jane smiled as she looked at me. “This is fun.” She went to her closet next in search for a pair of jeans, or warm pants. Once she found the right pair I tried them on as well. “We can just roll up the legs a little and that will do it.” Jane said as she rolled up the pant legs. She straightened up and stood back expecting her work. “I think that will work. It’s not like we’re going hiking through the snow. So it won’t be as cold.” She said. “But it is way more fun in the snow.” She added.
I smiled at her. “I don’t doubt it.” I looked down at my outfit. “Thanks for letting me borrow them.” I said.
“You’re welcome.” Jane smiled, her hazel eyes sparkled with laughter. “I don’t mind. It’s like having a sister.”
“I guess so. I’m happy to oblige.” I leaned against the bed. “My twin, Sarah, and I share clothes all of the time.” I said. Sarah, what would she think of me running away? I wondered.
“OK. We are ready to go.”
I looked towards the now open door. A boy who looked a lot like Joe stood in the doorway. That must be Jonah. I thought.
“We’re coming, Jonah.” Jane told him. “Here.” She handed me a coat and then slipped into hers. “Jonah is my twin. So it’s harder to share clothes with a boy.” She laughed.
I laughed as well as I slipped my arms into the coat. I followed Jane out of the room and down stairs where the rest of the family was at.
“Are we ready?” Mr. Guyer asked.
“Yes.” Every one nodded in unison.
“All right. Joe, go get Lightning we will need his help to pull the tree home.” Mr. Guyer ordered.
“Yes, sir.” Joe headed out.
“Can I go with you?” I asked him.
“Sure.” Joe shrugged but he was smiling.
I followed him outside to the barn. “Who is Lightning?” I asked as we headed towards the big barn.
“My horse.” Joe replied. “He’s a big black stallion.” He opened the doors to the barn and flicked on the lights. I followed him to a stall with the name “Lightning” on the door. “Hey boy.” Joe greeted the horse as he opened the stall door. Joe grabbed the halter hanging on a nail by the door and stepped inside the stall. Lightning snorted and stuck his nose out towards the hand Joe stretched out towards him. “Good boy.” Joe patted the horse on the nose. He slipped the halter over Lightning’s’ head and lead him out of the stall. Lightning sniffed at my shoulder, I raised my hand letting him smell my hand before I touched his nose.
I am still typing so I will add as I type more.
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Christmas Tree Hunting pt 2
STILL TYPING!!!
“Can he fit into the woods?” I asked.
Joe laughed. “Yes, he can.” He assured me. “We would take one of the other horses if he couldn’t.”
“Come on.” Joe said softly so not to scare the horse. We led Lightning out of the barn and over to where the rest of the Guyers’ had gathered. “OK. Let’s go.” Joe said once we reached them.
“All right.” Mr. Guyer turned and led us into the woods.
I walked with Joe and Lightning as we searched for the perfect Christmas tree. “I am sure I will be in major trouble when I get home.” I remarked.
“Would your mom have made you go home already if you were?” Joe asked.
“That’s a good question.” I looked ahead of us. Jane was the closest to us but she was not in hearing distance. “I hope I’m not. I would like to spend more time with your family.” I said. “I mean I love my family they just…” I paused, “I don’t know how to explain it. They are like your family but different.”
“It’s OK. You don’t have to explain.” Joe said. “If it means anything I would like for you to spend time with my family.” He guided Lightning around a tree stump.
“It does mean something.” I told him. “If I’m not grounded I would like to see you.”
“Well let’s pray that you’re not grounded.” Joe said. “I think even if you were grounded you could come when you get ungrounded.” He added. “I would like you to.”
I smiled. “So would I.” I stepped over a small fallen tree. “We will have to wait and see, I guess.”
“I guess.” Joe repeated.
We walked a little ways in silence, listening to his family talk ahead of us and the leaves crunching underneath our feet. Lightning would stop every once in a while to eat the dead leaves and Joe would have to jerk his head back up and make him continue walking. “Come on, Lightning.” Joe coaxed the horse. He made a clicking noise with his mouth and pulled on the lead rope. Lightning obeyed and continued walking.
“He is a good horse, he’s just stubborn sometimes.” Joe told me. “Sometimes I’ll take him out for a ride just to think.” He stopped and looked up at a tree. “Too tall.” He remarked and continued walking. “Maybe we could go trail riding sometime.”
“I would like that.” I smiled up at him. “I will let you know when I can.”
“OK.” Joe’s own smile got bigger. “I’ll remember you owe me.”
I laughed. “All right.” I looked ahead as I noticed the other members of the Guyer family circling a tall tree. “ I think they found it.” I nodded towards them.
“Maybe. Let’s go see.” Joe headed towards his family. “Did you find one?” He called.
“Maybe.” Jane called back to him.
“It’s big.” I remarked as Joe and I came up next to his sister.
“I think it is just right.” Mr. Guyer called from the other side of the massive tree. “Came here, Joe.” He said.
“Here, hold Lightning.” Joe handed the lead rope to me, and went around the tree to his dad.
I took the rope and waited.
“I think it will do just fine.” I heard Joe say.
“Jonah, do you have the axes?” Mr. Guyer asked his other son.
“Yes, sir.” Jonah replied from behind me. He stepped around me and handed one axe to his brother.
I jumped at Jonah’s voice. I hadn’t known he was behind me.
“OK, girls, get far back.” Mr. Guyer told us. We did as he said.
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“Can he fit into the woods?” I asked.
Joe laughed. “Yes, he can.” He assured me. “We would take one of the other horses if he couldn’t.”
“Come on.” Joe said softly so not to scare the horse. We led Lightning out of the barn and over to where the rest of the Guyers’ had gathered. “OK. Let’s go.” Joe said once we reached them.
“All right.” Mr. Guyer turned and led us into the woods.
I walked with Joe and Lightning as we searched for the perfect Christmas tree. “I am sure I will be in major trouble when I get home.” I remarked.
“Would your mom have made you go home already if you were?” Joe asked.
“That’s a good question.” I looked ahead of us. Jane was the closest to us but she was not in hearing distance. “I hope I’m not. I would like to spend more time with your family.” I said. “I mean I love my family they just…” I paused, “I don’t know how to explain it. They are like your family but different.”
“It’s OK. You don’t have to explain.” Joe said. “If it means anything I would like for you to spend time with my family.” He guided Lightning around a tree stump.
“It does mean something.” I told him. “If I’m not grounded I would like to see you.”
“Well let’s pray that you’re not grounded.” Joe said. “I think even if you were grounded you could come when you get ungrounded.” He added. “I would like you to.”
I smiled. “So would I.” I stepped over a small fallen tree. “We will have to wait and see, I guess.”
“I guess.” Joe repeated.
We walked a little ways in silence, listening to his family talk ahead of us and the leaves crunching underneath our feet. Lightning would stop every once in a while to eat the dead leaves and Joe would have to jerk his head back up and make him continue walking. “Come on, Lightning.” Joe coaxed the horse. He made a clicking noise with his mouth and pulled on the lead rope. Lightning obeyed and continued walking.
“He is a good horse, he’s just stubborn sometimes.” Joe told me. “Sometimes I’ll take him out for a ride just to think.” He stopped and looked up at a tree. “Too tall.” He remarked and continued walking. “Maybe we could go trail riding sometime.”
“I would like that.” I smiled up at him. “I will let you know when I can.”
“OK.” Joe’s own smile got bigger. “I’ll remember you owe me.”
I laughed. “All right.” I looked ahead as I noticed the other members of the Guyer family circling a tall tree. “ I think they found it.” I nodded towards them.
“Maybe. Let’s go see.” Joe headed towards his family. “Did you find one?” He called.
“Maybe.” Jane called back to him.
“It’s big.” I remarked as Joe and I came up next to his sister.
“I think it is just right.” Mr. Guyer called from the other side of the massive tree. “Came here, Joe.” He said.
“Here, hold Lightning.” Joe handed the lead rope to me, and went around the tree to his dad.
I took the rope and waited.
“I think it will do just fine.” I heard Joe say.
“Jonah, do you have the axes?” Mr. Guyer asked his other son.
“Yes, sir.” Jonah replied from behind me. He stepped around me and handed one axe to his brother.
I jumped at Jonah’s voice. I hadn’t known he was behind me.
“OK, girls, get far back.” Mr. Guyer told us. We did as he said.
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Truman
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Gettin' juicy! Very nice chemistry you've got going... The last update you've made so far is very well-written. Sure a couple of spelling errors... actually I just saw one, and that was probably a typo.
And man, does Jane have a pink room or what? Even a pink laptop; that's just... actually it sounds like what my sister would've had if she had her way with her room when she was Jane's age (she's 17 now, so I doubt she'll want everything pink).
Very good; I noticed that and immediately loved it. Sure, it's really a trifle compared to the rest of the story (to be frank, I have no idea why I just mentioned it), but it's just something that caught my eye and I wanted to let you know I liked the change.
A lot of times you have "I will be going (seeing; leaving; etc. you get it)" or "It is" in the dialogue. Nothing wrong with that, but it seems like they'd shorten their speech... You don't usually hear people saying every word, usually they shorten themselves to "It's" or "I'll" "Wouldn't"; lots of apostrophes. Sometimes it's necessary to have "I will" etc., writing out every word, but... you know what I mean.
The story is getting more and more interesting as it goes. Lightning was a lovable add-on, as well as the detailing of his movement and habits. It added a bit of a "Little House on the Prairie" moment (the fact they have a horse at all is pretty cool).
At this point I really don't see the need for flaws in either one of them, since they're only kids at this stage. It's true, they could have some kind of disagreement somewhere soon, but I don't think you'll have to worry about incorporating anything like that for now.
Anyway, lovin' it. Don't know what else to say except you're on a roll! Keep it up!
And man, does Jane have a pink room or what? Even a pink laptop; that's just... actually it sounds like what my sister would've had if she had her way with her room when she was Jane's age (she's 17 now, so I doubt she'll want everything pink
).See, that's the kind of change I'm talking about. You have "eyes sparkled" but it's in a different context, with different descripters surounding it, so it doesn't seem repetitive at all!
Very good; I noticed that and immediately loved it. Sure, it's really a trifle compared to the rest of the story (to be frank, I have no idea why I just mentioned it), but it's just something that caught my eye and I wanted to let you know I liked the change.A lot of times you have "I will be going (seeing; leaving; etc. you get it)" or "It is" in the dialogue. Nothing wrong with that, but it seems like they'd shorten their speech... You don't usually hear people saying every word, usually they shorten themselves to "It's" or "I'll" "Wouldn't"; lots of apostrophes.
Sometimes it's necessary to have "I will" etc., writing out every word, but... you know what I mean.The story is getting more and more interesting as it goes. Lightning was a lovable add-on, as well as the detailing of his movement and habits. It added a bit of a "Little House on the Prairie" moment (the fact they have a horse at all is pretty cool).
At this point I really don't see the need for flaws in either one of them, since they're only kids at this stage. It's true, they could have some kind of disagreement somewhere soon, but I don't think you'll have to worry about incorporating anything like that for now.
Anyway, lovin' it.
Don't know what else to say except you're on a roll! Keep it up!
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I am glad you are reading my stuff....you're really the only one who TRUELY comments. I mean I love Nightcrawler_fan for being my faithful reader but she says the same thing. <3
Again I CAN'T SPELL! ANd I type so fast sometimes the letters get jumbled or I get ahead of myself.
Yeah the scene in Jane's room was totally new! I came up with it as I was typing. Glad you liked it.And man, does Jane have a pink room or what? Even a pink laptop; that's just... actually it sounds like what my sister would've had if she had her way with her room when she was Jane's age (she's 17 now, so I doubt she'll want everything pink
I'm glad you liked the change.See, that's the kind of change I'm talking about. You have "eyes sparkled" but it's in a different context, with different descripters surounding it, so it doesn't seem repetitive at all!
Sorry that's how I type it sometimes. I normally do put "IT's" "I'll" and all of those.A lot of times you have "I will be going (seeing; leaving; etc. you get it)" or "It is" in the dialogue. Nothing wrong with that, but it seems like they'd shorten their speech... You don't usually hear people saying every word, usually they shorten themselves to "It's" or "I'll" "Wouldn't"; lots of apostrophes.
I will attempt to make them have a disagreement soon. I just have to think of something for them to be mad about....hmmmm any ideas?
Anyway, lovin' it.
I am glad you are reading my stuff....you're really the only one who TRUELY comments. I mean I love Nightcrawler_fan for being my faithful reader but she says the same thing. <3
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Joe's Battle
Here is "Joe's Battle". It starts out as in Kandie's view, then switches to Joe's then back to Kandies'. It is about how Joe is "Stuggling" with 'human desires' shall we say. ENJOY!
Joe and I lie on the couch in his living room watching TV. I rested my head on Joe’s chest and listened to his heartbeat. Joe smiled at me, he ran his fingers through my hair. “Are you comfortable?” He asked teasingly.
“Mm-hmm.” I nodded. “I know you are.” I teased him back.
Joe laughed. “Watch the movie.” He said.
I turned my eyes toward the television screen. My eyes began to close as I started to drift off to sleep. Only a few minutes past before I fell asleep.
Joe managed to carry me upstairs to my bedroom and lay me on my bed without waking me up. The young man kissed my cheek before leaving the room.
I pressed my hand to my chest where I could still feel the pressure of Kandie’s head where she had rested it. I didn’t understand how I still loved the same girl after four years. But even more than that I didn’t understand how-why- she still loved me. “God, I know you’re here, you are with me. Please, help me to be strong, stay pure, and to understand.” I prayed aloud to my Father in Heaven. “I love Kandie, you know that. You also know how I don’t want to (defile) her before it’s right. I don’t want to disappoint her, or my parents but most importantly, I don’t want to disappoint you, Lord.” I leaned my head back against the old oak tree and looked up at the starry sky. “God, I don’t know what to do. Having Kandie live with me and my family never felt wrong. We weren’t, we aren’t, doing anything. Now though…” I stopped and stared up at the sky, a cool breeze blew over me. “She need to move back in with her parents.” As I said it I knew it was what God wanted. No, I didn’t like the idea, I wouldn’t be as close in case of an emergency, I wouldn’t see her every morning until I got to school, or her house to pick her up but I could - I would- get over it. “Help me to overcome my emotions, Lord.” I prayed. It was late when I finally stood and walked slowly back to the house.
~Kandie~ I blinked open my eyes as I heard the door to my bedroom open, the door that led outside. I turned over and looked towards the door, seeing Joe I sighed. “What are you doing?” I whispered, I glanced towards the clock on my nightstand. “At two in the morning?” I noticed he still wore his jeans and t-shirt.
“I went for a run.” Joe replied. “I was just checking on you.”
“Oh.” I sat up and looked at the young man, who now sat on the edge of my bed.
“I didn’t meant to wake you.” Joe apologized. “I’m sorry.”
“It’s OK.” I smiled at him. “Are you ok?” I touched my fingers to his cheek. I saw the far away look in his brown eyes.
“Yea, I’m fine.” Joe returned my smile. “Go back to sleep.” He stood.
“I love you.” I told him.
“I love you too.” He leaned down and kissed me on the lips. “Goodnight.”
“Goodnight.” I whispered. I lay back down as he exited the room.
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Here is "Joe's Battle". It starts out as in Kandie's view, then switches to Joe's then back to Kandies'. It is about how Joe is "Stuggling" with 'human desires' shall we say. ENJOY!
Joe and I lie on the couch in his living room watching TV. I rested my head on Joe’s chest and listened to his heartbeat. Joe smiled at me, he ran his fingers through my hair. “Are you comfortable?” He asked teasingly.
“Mm-hmm.” I nodded. “I know you are.” I teased him back.
Joe laughed. “Watch the movie.” He said.
I turned my eyes toward the television screen. My eyes began to close as I started to drift off to sleep. Only a few minutes past before I fell asleep.
Joe managed to carry me upstairs to my bedroom and lay me on my bed without waking me up. The young man kissed my cheek before leaving the room.
~Joe~
The battle going on inside of me as I closed the door to my girlfriends bedroom was strong. Stronger than ever before. I had never before wanted to sleep with Kandie as much as I did now. I released the hold I still had on the doorknob, and practically ran out of the house. I did not stop running until I reached a familiar oak tree. I leaned my back against the base of the tree and slid my body to the ground.I pressed my hand to my chest where I could still feel the pressure of Kandie’s head where she had rested it. I didn’t understand how I still loved the same girl after four years. But even more than that I didn’t understand how-why- she still loved me. “God, I know you’re here, you are with me. Please, help me to be strong, stay pure, and to understand.” I prayed aloud to my Father in Heaven. “I love Kandie, you know that. You also know how I don’t want to (defile) her before it’s right. I don’t want to disappoint her, or my parents but most importantly, I don’t want to disappoint you, Lord.” I leaned my head back against the old oak tree and looked up at the starry sky. “God, I don’t know what to do. Having Kandie live with me and my family never felt wrong. We weren’t, we aren’t, doing anything. Now though…” I stopped and stared up at the sky, a cool breeze blew over me. “She need to move back in with her parents.” As I said it I knew it was what God wanted. No, I didn’t like the idea, I wouldn’t be as close in case of an emergency, I wouldn’t see her every morning until I got to school, or her house to pick her up but I could - I would- get over it. “Help me to overcome my emotions, Lord.” I prayed. It was late when I finally stood and walked slowly back to the house.
~Kandie~
“I went for a run.” Joe replied. “I was just checking on you.”
“Oh.” I sat up and looked at the young man, who now sat on the edge of my bed.
“I didn’t meant to wake you.” Joe apologized. “I’m sorry.”
“It’s OK.” I smiled at him. “Are you ok?” I touched my fingers to his cheek. I saw the far away look in his brown eyes.
“Yea, I’m fine.” Joe returned my smile. “Go back to sleep.” He stood.
“I love you.” I told him.
“I love you too.” He leaned down and kissed me on the lips. “Goodnight.”
“Goodnight.” I whispered. I lay back down as he exited the room.
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I stood with Jane and Mrs. Guyer several feet away from the boys and Mr. Guyer. Standing still and not moving was making me cold. Lightning pounded one hoof impatiently on the ground. “Easy.” I rubbed my hand down his neck to not only soothe the animal but to warm my cold hand. I watched as Joe and Jonah repeatedly swung their axes at the tree.
“Joe has missed you.” Jane said.
I looked at the girl. “What?” I asked not sure if I had heard her correctly.
“He has missed you a lot these past five years.” Jane said. “I haven’t seen my brother this happy, or social, in a while.” She explained.
“Oh,” I looked towards Joe swinging his axe towards the tree, “I missed him too.” I told her. “Maybe that’s why I wanted to run. I was lonely. Even with my family.” I said thoughtfully.
“Don’t leave.” Jane said it more as a plea than a statement.
I looked past her to her mother. Janise Guyer smiled and nodded her head in agreement with her daughter. “I’ll try my hardest not to.” I promised her. I pressed my cheek against Lightning’s neck and watched the boys cut down the tree.
Fifteen more minutes past before I heard a shout “hold Lightning” then a loud crash as the tree fell to the ground. Lightning stepped back and jerked his head. “Easy, boy.” I soothed.
“Lightning, easy. Calm down.” Joe was next to me reaching for the lead rope. Joe spoke to the horse in a language I didn’t understand. Lightning jerked his head one more time before settling down. “Sorry. Are you all right?” Joe asked.
“I-I’m fine.” I assured him.
“Come on, Lightning.” Joe jerked lightly on the lead rope and clicked at the horse. He lead Lightning to the tree where he strapped ropes to the horses harness.. “Kandie, grab Lightning’s lead.” Joe told me.
I hurried to do as he said. I grasped the lead rope in my hand once again and stroked the horses nose. “Good boy.” I muttered to the animal.
Joe finished helping his dad and brother attach the tree to the harness then came to where I stood. “I’ll take him, thanks.” He took the lead rope from me and started leading the horse towards home.
It took a while to get back home because there were certain places that either Lightning or the tree could not fit through so we had to go around some things. I walked beside Joe as he lead Lightning.
“I’m sorry he got so jumpy.” Joe apologized. “He normally isn’t bothered about falling trees or things like it. That's why we use the axes. Chainsaws would scare him.” He said. “Are you sure you’re all right he didn’t hurt you?”
“No, I’m fine.” I assured him. “Don’t worry about it.” I bit my lower lip. I felt like my heart beat was getting faster as Joe showed his care towards me. “He is stronger and bigger than me.”
“A bug is almost stronger and bigger than you.” Joe teased his brown eyes laughed.
“Not funny.” I shoved playfully at his arm. I crossed my arms across my chest and walked a few paces in front of Joe.
Joe laughed again. “I was kidding.” He called. “I’m sorry, come back here.” He pleaded.
I stopped, waited for him to catch up with me, then continued to walk beside of him. “I can’t help it I’m small.” I remarked.
“I like you being small.” Joe said. “It makes me feel bigger, in a good way.” He quickly added.
I smiled. “OK.” I unfolded my arms and let them swing by my sides.
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And more of chapter 1!
Here is one more page of chapter one......
The next part is actually a part I want to keep in but I need my paper to see it and my friend is trying to sleep. I'll try though.
“We’re almost there buddy, good job.” Joe told Lightning as the horse brushed his nose against Joe’s shoulder. Joe stroked his horses face as he talked. Five minutes later we stepped out of the woods and into the Guyers yard. Joe led Lightning towards the house. “Whoa, boy.” He stopped the horse near the house.
“All right, untie Lightning, and we’ll get this tree inside.” Mr. Guyer said.
We untied Lightning who shook his head and then lowered it to the grass. I followed Joe to the side of the tree opposite Jane and Jonah. “OK. On three.” Mr. Guyer said who was beside Jane. I noticed a man who I had not noticed before was on the other side of Joe. “One…two…three.” We lifted the tree and carried it into the house. Mrs. Guyer held onto Lightnings’ lead. Once the huge tree was inside the living room we untied it and stood it up in the stand. Joe left to put Lightning back in his stall and let Mrs. Guyer come inside.
“Thanks, Jeff.” Mr. Guyer thanked the man who had helped with the tree.
“Yes, sir, Mr. Guyer.” The man bowed his head slightly before leaving the room.
I stepped back and looked up at the tree, it was at least ten feet tall, if not taller.
“Tall isn’t it?” I jumped at the voice beside of me.
I looked at Jonah who again I had not heard come up to me. “Um, yes, it’s very tall.” I said.
“Fifteen feet.” Jonah followed my gaze up to the top of the tree.
“Wow, taller than I thought.” I stated. I wished Joe would come back, Jonah was starting to scare me. I couldn’t help the comfortable feeling that ran through me when I saw Joe enter the room a minute later. Joe came up to me his gaze looking over my head at his brother. “Thank you.” I whispered to him.
Joe smiled and quietly laughed. “Come on let’s go help Mama get the ornaments.” He told me.
“OK.” I was more than happier to follow him.
“What’s wrong?” Joe asked once we were out of the room, away from hearing distance of Jonah.
“Jonah scares me.” I admitted to him.
Joe chuckled. “Why?” He asked.
“Twice he’s come up to me and I haven’t heard him either time.” I explained.
“I think he thinks you’re pretty.” Joe said. “I don’t blame him, I think that too.” He then added. “But don’t let him bother you.”
I blushed at his compliment. “I’ll try not to.” I promised with a smile in my voice.
Joe lead me to where Mrs. Guyer was at in the doorway of a storage closet. “Need help, Mama?” He asked.
“Oh, Joe.” Mrs. Guyer turned at her sons’ voice. “You scared me. Yes, take these boxes to the living room.” She handed us a box each of ornaments.
“Sorry.” Joe apologized.
“Guess Jonah’s not the only one who sneaks up on people.” I teased as we headed back to the living room.
“Apparently not.” Joe replied as he entered the room and set the box down.
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Here is one more page of chapter one......
The next part is actually a part I want to keep in but I need my paper to see it and my friend is trying to sleep. I'll try though.
“We’re almost there buddy, good job.” Joe told Lightning as the horse brushed his nose against Joe’s shoulder. Joe stroked his horses face as he talked. Five minutes later we stepped out of the woods and into the Guyers yard. Joe led Lightning towards the house. “Whoa, boy.” He stopped the horse near the house.
“All right, untie Lightning, and we’ll get this tree inside.” Mr. Guyer said.
We untied Lightning who shook his head and then lowered it to the grass. I followed Joe to the side of the tree opposite Jane and Jonah. “OK. On three.” Mr. Guyer said who was beside Jane. I noticed a man who I had not noticed before was on the other side of Joe. “One…two…three.” We lifted the tree and carried it into the house. Mrs. Guyer held onto Lightnings’ lead. Once the huge tree was inside the living room we untied it and stood it up in the stand. Joe left to put Lightning back in his stall and let Mrs. Guyer come inside.
“Thanks, Jeff.” Mr. Guyer thanked the man who had helped with the tree.
“Yes, sir, Mr. Guyer.” The man bowed his head slightly before leaving the room.
I stepped back and looked up at the tree, it was at least ten feet tall, if not taller.
“Tall isn’t it?” I jumped at the voice beside of me.
I looked at Jonah who again I had not heard come up to me. “Um, yes, it’s very tall.” I said.
“Fifteen feet.” Jonah followed my gaze up to the top of the tree.
“Wow, taller than I thought.” I stated. I wished Joe would come back, Jonah was starting to scare me. I couldn’t help the comfortable feeling that ran through me when I saw Joe enter the room a minute later. Joe came up to me his gaze looking over my head at his brother. “Thank you.” I whispered to him.
Joe smiled and quietly laughed. “Come on let’s go help Mama get the ornaments.” He told me.
“OK.” I was more than happier to follow him.
“What’s wrong?” Joe asked once we were out of the room, away from hearing distance of Jonah.
“Jonah scares me.” I admitted to him.
Joe chuckled. “Why?” He asked.
“Twice he’s come up to me and I haven’t heard him either time.” I explained.
“I think he thinks you’re pretty.” Joe said. “I don’t blame him, I think that too.” He then added. “But don’t let him bother you.”
I blushed at his compliment. “I’ll try not to.” I promised with a smile in my voice.
Joe lead me to where Mrs. Guyer was at in the doorway of a storage closet. “Need help, Mama?” He asked.
“Oh, Joe.” Mrs. Guyer turned at her sons’ voice. “You scared me. Yes, take these boxes to the living room.” She handed us a box each of ornaments.
“Sorry.” Joe apologized.
“Guess Jonah’s not the only one who sneaks up on people.” I teased as we headed back to the living room.
“Apparently not.” Joe replied as he entered the room and set the box down.
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~"Joe's Battle": I was wondering for a long time whether or not you'd venture to this subject, especially when they were actually married, in bed together, but still just loving each other like they were before with no change...
Still though, it's really not necessary for you to go that far, but this scene made it clear you understand there are certain boundries that can be broken, yet respected. That's what Joe was doing, and I'm glad you addressed this issue without totally ignoring it. Very realistic touch that kept it simple in the descriptive sense, yet complex in the storytelling sense. I've read other stories (other websites) by other people who've had to "rate" their story, as in ratings for movies (G, PG-13, R, etc.) in the thread title, because they weren't capable of keeping the descriptors simple like you did.
This same "simplicity" was achieved in "The Scarlet Letter," where Hawthorne never used the term "adulteress" to convey the meaning of the "A," yet his mastery of storytelling made it clear to any reader that this was the intent of the brand on Hester Pryne. You managed to accomplish such in the Joseph/Katherine stories with a short-but-sweet addition to Joe's emotions, which isn't easy all the time. Bravo! As far as cons go, I didn't detect any; not even a spelling mistake.
~The Continuation of Chapter 1 (Updates 1 and 2): You needn't ask me where to put in any slight disagreements, because you just did in that first update! It wasn't over-the-top, and it gave additional character to each of the protagonists. It seemed like you went with the John Cusack from "Must Love Dogs" being awkward for a moment... Probably not what you were even thinking of when you wrote it, but that's what I was thinking of, and it made me smile.
Loved the "his brown eyes laughed" line. Again, great variation of a catchy phrase! It's really working.
The conversations are getting more and more realistic-sounding the more you post on the Joe/Kandie chapters. Only con I have is the cutting of the tree... Wouldn't they use chainsaws? I mean, when I said Lightning was sort of a "Little House" addition, you went in with axes to the tree. Sure, I can understand axes are more time-consuming, which allows for more conversation, especially when they aren't deafeningly loud. But chainsaws just seem more efficient... very helpful for cutting down a 15 foot pine. But that's all I object to.
The chapter would end perfectly with her mother arriving. Chapter endings, IMO, should make the reader keep reading, so having Kandie's mother arrive at the end of the chapter should give us all a good anticipation for what comes next. As it's going now it's just fine; everyone is acquainted (except the mother, but she can come later, as I suggested). The relationships are established. Very good! Anxious to read more, DL!!
By the way... I notice the times you comment on my comments you never use smilies, maybe because I use a lot of 'em too, and I know how you love using them, so... just wanted to say you can clear my smilies if you quote me, so you can post your own.
Still though, it's really not necessary for you to go that far, but this scene made it clear you understand there are certain boundries that can be broken, yet respected. That's what Joe was doing, and I'm glad you addressed this issue without totally ignoring it. Very realistic touch that kept it simple in the descriptive sense, yet complex in the storytelling sense. I've read other stories (other websites) by other people who've had to "rate" their story, as in ratings for movies (G, PG-13, R, etc.) in the thread title, because they weren't capable of keeping the descriptors simple like you did.
This same "simplicity" was achieved in "The Scarlet Letter," where Hawthorne never used the term "adulteress" to convey the meaning of the "A," yet his mastery of storytelling made it clear to any reader that this was the intent of the brand on Hester Pryne. You managed to accomplish such in the Joseph/Katherine stories with a short-but-sweet addition to Joe's emotions, which isn't easy all the time. Bravo! As far as cons go, I didn't detect any; not even a spelling mistake.
~The Continuation of Chapter 1 (Updates 1 and 2): You needn't ask me where to put in any slight disagreements, because you just did in that first update!
It wasn't over-the-top, and it gave additional character to each of the protagonists. It seemed like you went with the John Cusack from "Must Love Dogs" being awkward for a moment... Probably not what you were even thinking of when you wrote it, but that's what I was thinking of, and it made me smile. Loved the "his brown eyes laughed" line. Again, great variation of a catchy phrase! It's really working.
The conversations are getting more and more realistic-sounding the more you post on the Joe/Kandie chapters. Only con I have is the cutting of the tree... Wouldn't they use chainsaws? I mean, when I said Lightning was sort of a "Little House" addition, you went in with axes to the tree. Sure, I can understand axes are more time-consuming, which allows for more conversation, especially when they aren't deafeningly loud. But chainsaws just seem more efficient... very helpful for cutting down a 15 foot pine.
But that's all I object to.The chapter would end perfectly with her mother arriving. Chapter endings, IMO, should make the reader keep reading, so having Kandie's mother arrive at the end of the chapter should give us all a good anticipation for what comes next. As it's going now it's just fine; everyone is acquainted (except the mother, but she can come later, as I suggested). The relationships are established. Very good! Anxious to read more, DL!!
By the way... I notice the times you comment on my comments you never use smilies, maybe because I use a lot of 'em too, and I know how you love using them, so... just wanted to say you can clear my smilies if you quote me, so you can post your own.
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Where did I put a disagreement?????????????
It was late at night when I was typing so I was trying to think of ways they could cut down the tree...and chainsaws didn't even come to my mind. HAHA.Loved the "his brown eyes laughed" line. Again, great variation of a catchy phrase! It's really working.
The conversations are getting more and more realistic-sounding the more you post on the Joe/Kandie chapters. Only con I have is the cutting of the tree... Wouldn't they use chainsaws? I mean, when I said Lightning was sort of a "Little House" addition, you went in with axes to the tree. Sure, I can understand axes are more time-consuming, which allows for more conversation, especially when they aren't deafeningly loud. But chainsaws just seem more efficient... very helpful for cutting down a 15 foot pine.
I am glad you noticed I love using smilies. It's normally when I am commenting on your "review" because they make me smile. Which is very difficult to do. I don't smile alot. That is how I will end it...is Mrs. Bryson "Sarah Katherine" coming in. {the popcorn and M&M's isn't really the second chapter; at the top of the page I have Ch.__ Popcorn and M&M's} Thanks Truman!
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Well duh! I thought you knew what you were doing!
Wasn't this a playful disagreement? :?? I thought it was a pretty good inclusion.
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OK that's what I thought you ment I wasn't quite sure though. OK I have to type more so....shhhhhhh! It might take a minute....or two.Well duh! I thought you knew what you were doing!
?? I thought it was a pretty good inclusion.
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Chapter 1 Continued "Cookies and tree decorating"
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“Apparently not.” Joe replied as he entered the room and set the box down. “I do it sometimes for fun.” He straightened up and smiled at me his dark eyes sparkled with mischief.
“That is good to know.” I set my own box down and opened it. “Now lets decorate this tree.” I told him.
Joe laughed. “All right.” He leaned down and picked up a box of Christmas tree lights out of the box he had carried in. “Lights first, Kath.” He held the box out to me.
I blushed again at the nickname and took the box from him. “Right, lights.” I stood and followed him to the tree. I helped him untangle the lights and wrap them around the trees limbs.
“How about some cookies?” Mrs. Guyer said from where she now sat on the couch with a third box of Christmas decorations.
“Oh, may I make them, Mrs. Guyer?” I asked willingly.
“Of course.” Mrs. Guyer smiled at me. “Go on in to the kitchen. Esther Jean should be gone home.” She told me.
“OK.” I said. “I want to do it by myself.” I added so that no one would follow me.
“All right.” Mrs. Guyer’s hazel eyes smiled as she nodded.
I made my way to the Guyers’ kitchen to find that it, like almost every room in the house, was big. I found a bowl, and the ingredients to make peanut butter cookies and started mixing the dough. Ten minutes past before I heard the door open.
“Are you done yet?” I heard Joe’s teasing voice behind me. He reached over me, stuck his finger in the now almost empty bowl of peanut butter cookie dough, then stuck it in his mouth.
“Joe.” I grabbed his arm.
Joe swallowed the cookie dough. “Mmm, that’s good.” He said.
“Is it?” I let go of his arm.
“Yep.” Joe nodded , he wiped the rest of the dough off of his finger with water then dried it with a towel.
“Thank you.” I set the bowl in the sink.
“You’re welcome.” Joe put the towel back on the rock above the sink.
I smiled, reached up, and wiped the dough that had gotten on his chin.
Joe smiled down at me. “Thanks.” He slightly started to turn pink. “So, what do you want for Christmas?” He leaned against the counter.
“Um.” I tilted my head thoughtfully. “Whatever you want to get me. You don’t really have to get me anything.” I glanced at the timer on the oven, ten more minutes.
“I know I don’t have to but I want to.” Joe looked away from my gaze.
“I may not be able to see you at Christmas.” I moved away from him, and opened one of the cupboards and started taking glasses down.
“You’re parents wouldn’t ground you from seeing someone at Christmas. Would they?” Joe asked. He didn’t move from where he still stood at the sink.
“I don’t think so, no. I am not sure though.” I looked over at him. “I hope not.” I said with a small smile.
“I’ll come see you if they don’t let you come here.” Joe moved over to me then.
I looked away from him then, and continued getting glasses down. “That’s sweet of you to say.” I told him.
“You say that you don’t believe me.” Joe said. I couldn’t tell if he was disappointed or just hurt.
“I’m sorry.” I apologized feeling my face redden. “I didn’t mean to sound like that. I-I’m not use to guys paying attention to me that’s all.” I explained.
“Well, they’re all blind, jerks then.” Joe traced his finger along the edge of the countertop. “Because I think you’re the nicest, most beautiful girl I’ve ever seen.” He lifted his eyes to mine.
“You do?” I felt my face grow hot as it got redder. “Thank you.” I tried to reach for one more glass but wasn’t quite tall enough to reach it.
Joe reached up and easily plucked the glass from it’s spot. “You’re welcome.” He handed me the cup, his fingers brushed against mine. “I think my brother agrees with me.” He added.
I glanced again at the timer; three minutes. I moved over to the refrigerator, got the milk out, took it back to where Joe stood, and filled the glasses. “I’m not saying guys don’t think I’m pretty. They tell my siblings I am a lot, they just never tell me .” I looked up at him. “Thank you for saying it to my face.”
“Again, you’re welcome.” Joe smiled and retrieved a tray from beneath the counter. I set the cups down on the tray. “I am sure everyone loves you.” I looked up at him. “You are very sweet guy.” I opened the oven door and took out the first tray of cookies, and slid the second one in.
Joe smiled. “I guess a lot of people do. I don’t know. I wouldn’t say everyone though.” He pulled a plate down, and a small cookie spatula out for me. “I appreciate the compliment.”
I let the cookies cool for a minute before transferring them from the hot pan to the plate. “Everyone disserves to be complimented.” I told him.
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“Apparently not.” Joe replied as he entered the room and set the box down. “I do it sometimes for fun.” He straightened up and smiled at me his dark eyes sparkled with mischief.
“That is good to know.” I set my own box down and opened it. “Now lets decorate this tree.” I told him.
Joe laughed. “All right.” He leaned down and picked up a box of Christmas tree lights out of the box he had carried in. “Lights first, Kath.” He held the box out to me.
I blushed again at the nickname and took the box from him. “Right, lights.” I stood and followed him to the tree. I helped him untangle the lights and wrap them around the trees limbs.
“How about some cookies?” Mrs. Guyer said from where she now sat on the couch with a third box of Christmas decorations.
“Oh, may I make them, Mrs. Guyer?” I asked willingly.
“Of course.” Mrs. Guyer smiled at me. “Go on in to the kitchen. Esther Jean should be gone home.” She told me.
“OK.” I said. “I want to do it by myself.” I added so that no one would follow me.
“All right.” Mrs. Guyer’s hazel eyes smiled as she nodded.
I made my way to the Guyers’ kitchen to find that it, like almost every room in the house, was big. I found a bowl, and the ingredients to make peanut butter cookies and started mixing the dough. Ten minutes past before I heard the door open.
“Are you done yet?” I heard Joe’s teasing voice behind me. He reached over me, stuck his finger in the now almost empty bowl of peanut butter cookie dough, then stuck it in his mouth.
“Joe.” I grabbed his arm.
Joe swallowed the cookie dough. “Mmm, that’s good.” He said.
“Is it?” I let go of his arm.
“Yep.” Joe nodded , he wiped the rest of the dough off of his finger with water then dried it with a towel.
“Thank you.” I set the bowl in the sink.
“You’re welcome.” Joe put the towel back on the rock above the sink.
I smiled, reached up, and wiped the dough that had gotten on his chin.
Joe smiled down at me. “Thanks.” He slightly started to turn pink. “So, what do you want for Christmas?” He leaned against the counter.
“Um.” I tilted my head thoughtfully. “Whatever you want to get me. You don’t really have to get me anything.” I glanced at the timer on the oven, ten more minutes.
“I know I don’t have to but I want to.” Joe looked away from my gaze.
“I may not be able to see you at Christmas.” I moved away from him, and opened one of the cupboards and started taking glasses down.
“You’re parents wouldn’t ground you from seeing someone at Christmas. Would they?” Joe asked. He didn’t move from where he still stood at the sink.
“I don’t think so, no. I am not sure though.” I looked over at him. “I hope not.” I said with a small smile.
“I’ll come see you if they don’t let you come here.” Joe moved over to me then.
I looked away from him then, and continued getting glasses down. “That’s sweet of you to say.” I told him.
“You say that you don’t believe me.” Joe said. I couldn’t tell if he was disappointed or just hurt.
“I’m sorry.” I apologized feeling my face redden. “I didn’t mean to sound like that. I-I’m not use to guys paying attention to me that’s all.” I explained.
“Well, they’re all blind, jerks then.” Joe traced his finger along the edge of the countertop. “Because I think you’re the nicest, most beautiful girl I’ve ever seen.” He lifted his eyes to mine.
“You do?” I felt my face grow hot as it got redder. “Thank you.” I tried to reach for one more glass but wasn’t quite tall enough to reach it.
Joe reached up and easily plucked the glass from it’s spot. “You’re welcome.” He handed me the cup, his fingers brushed against mine. “I think my brother agrees with me.” He added.
I glanced again at the timer; three minutes. I moved over to the refrigerator, got the milk out, took it back to where Joe stood, and filled the glasses. “I’m not saying guys don’t think I’m pretty. They tell my siblings I am a lot, they just never tell me .” I looked up at him. “Thank you for saying it to my face.”
“Again, you’re welcome.” Joe smiled and retrieved a tray from beneath the counter. I set the cups down on the tray. “I am sure everyone loves you.” I looked up at him. “You are very sweet guy.” I opened the oven door and took out the first tray of cookies, and slid the second one in.
Joe smiled. “I guess a lot of people do. I don’t know. I wouldn’t say everyone though.” He pulled a plate down, and a small cookie spatula out for me. “I appreciate the compliment.”
I let the cookies cool for a minute before transferring them from the hot pan to the plate. “Everyone disserves to be complimented.” I told him.
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