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Copperfox said:
Well, when it comes to cliches, there isn't really any proof that Mary Magdalene was ever a prostitute. It makes a good story, and there certainly WERE prostitutes led to a new life by Jesus and indeed by John the Baptist as Jesus' herald; but it is not known that Mary Magdalene in particular was ever a "registered companion." She might equally have been a conventional farm wife who became demon-possessed as a result of attending a seance on a dare.
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I've heard many theories about her, but what is certain is that she wasn't always a good girl...so yeah thats what im referring to.
 
Dayhawk, there is no conceivable stretch of morbid or frivolous imagination by which I can ever begin to picture you desiring to be that form of professional woman. On the other hand, I can imagine you armed with two 9mm semi-automatics, ventilating the rotten skulls of modern pimps who trick or kidnap girls into that horrid existence.
 
lol, I was never a tart if that's what you mean...but as far as being someone with a bad rep, like Mary M I'm sure had (for whatever reason) I had that in spades.

ha ha yes...yes I would. lol
 
So, what, were you in circles where, if you wore a skirt whose hem was not at the VERY MOST unflattering level about ten inches down the calf, you were considered indecent?
 
Oh....no it was ... alot more than THAT :rolleyes::eek: yeah...lets just say I was very self destructive in that substances were being used....that kind of rep.
 
God was extraordinarily merciful to me, protecting me from substance abuse by the way He designed my chemosensory equipment. I always HATED the smell of both tobacco and marijuana, and hated the TASTE of alcoholic drinks. Thus I don't brag about my abstinence from all those things, because all the work was done for me.
 
ha ha lucky you...yeah my parents were HUGE hippies (especially my mom, oh wow). and I guess it was you know sins of the father, kinda thing.
 
To the extent that my parents had any bad habits, those habits REPULSED me, causing a reaction in favor of healthier things. Well, MOSTLY in favor of healthier things.
 
Okay, back to POETRY! While I'm waiting for new questions or poetry submissions, let me return to the subject of "near-rhymes," which I have barely touched up to now.

Near-rhymes are more vital with feminine rhyming, since you have to make TWO syllables match. Here then, are a couple of sets of feminine rhyme, freely making use of assonance or dissonance.


Adage, advantage, banish, brackish, cabbage, catfish, damage, faddish, lavish, MacTavish, manage, radish, rampage, ravage, sandwich, savage, vanish.

Bubble, buckle, bumble, bundle, crumble, double, fumble, gumball, Hubble, humble, knuckle, mumble, puddle, rubble, rumble, stubble, stumble, supple, trouble, trundle, tumble.
 
More feminine rhymes, including near-rhymes:


Abandon, anthem, bantam, demand 'em, fandom, hand 'em, Landon, phantom, plant 'em, random.

Above her, another, brother, butter, cover, cutter, discover, duffer, flutter, gutter, hover, lover, mother, muffler, puffer, rougher, rubber, shove her, tougher.

Bubbly, cuddly, dub me, Dudley, fussy, gutsy, lovely, mumbly, stubbly, tubby, ugly.
 
And a few more:


Arthur, Barker, barter, Carter, darter, farther, garter, harder, larder, martyr, sharper, starter, Tartar (which, however, is more properly said as Tatar).

Beauty, cootie, duty, fruity, gloomy, Julie, moody, newly, roomy, sue me, truly.
 
ONE more go-round with feminine rhymes including near-rhymes:


Fickle, giggle, jiggle, nickel, pickle, sickle, tickle, trickle, wiggle.

Beady, feed me, heed me, meaty, needy, seedy, speedy, weedy.

Adoring, boring, exploring, flooring, goring, mooring, poring, soaring, warring.
 
I am a HORRIBLE writer but I love coming up with ideas and scenes for suspense/action. I can't bring myself to share most of my work though because I admittedly have low self esteem. I've been working on one project for over 4 - 5 years and I have a ton of info on it but I've never written it down yet.
 
NON-OBJECTIVE SONNET

The dawn begins the starting of the day
Three poodles have their tails docked at the vet
When ice is warmed it slowly melts away
An elephant, they say, shall ne'er forget

Yes fools rush in where angels fear to tread
A sucker every minute passed is born
The Romans prized their circuses and bread
The crows are cawing loudly in the corn

Regardless of the cost, some choose to go
It's always darkest just before the dawn
In every life a little rain must go
Appreciate the moment ere it's gone

Not every set of couplets with a rhyme
Make reading drivel like this worth your time
 
John, do you remember the scene in Act Two of "H.M.S. Pinafore" in which Buttercup and Captain Corcoran sing a duet mostly composed of cryptic proverbs? "Once a cat was killed by care; / Only brave deserve the fair." Your satiric sonnet seems to have been playing at the same entertaining silliness.
 
I have a question that had to do with alliteration-
If you want to write one, how would you start? I mean, with a normal rhyming poem you just think of some words that rhyme, and then put it together. Do you just come up with different words that have the same beginning sounds or... something else?
 
Protagonist said:
I am a HORRIBLE writer but I love coming up with ideas and scenes for suspense/action. I can't bring myself to share most of my work though because I admittedly have low self esteem. I've been working on one project for over 4 - 5 years and I have a ton of info on it but I've never written it down yet.
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I know what you mean about coming up with ideas for scenes. I do that all the time. :D You shouldn't be afraid to share your work... as long as you are prepared, meaning that you don't expect just ALL positive feedback. (There are some people out there who get very offended by the tiniest piece of criticism.)
 
Q-A: Just start thinking of words. Alliteration is easier than rhyme, because it does not require as close a match of sounds as rhyme does.


Copperfox came to his cranky computer;
He found the forum and flagged all his friends.


I just dashed those off now. For each of those two lines, one word--"Copperfox," "forum"--was easiest to think of, because of the intended subject. "Computer" and "found" were next, as I realized what I wanted to depict myself doing; then I stretched a little more to fill in the lines. "Flagged" was the last alliterative word I thought of; you can see that it is not the first word you would think of for communicating, but it provides another letter F.


Lila, you are SO right. Early in my time here, a few girls got furious at me because I didn't rate their stories with "War and Peace."
 
Another sample of alliterative lines:


Chewing a chunk of cheddar cheese,
I ate each apple on the plate,
Then tippled a tankard of tepid tea,
And settled onto the sofa to snooze.
 
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