DestinyLies
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Love it. Can't wait for Chapter 7...like the stop mid-sentence.
Adventures during the Golden Age in Narnia
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QueenLucyTheValient
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Thanks... I stopped midsentence cause I did not know what to have her say that Peter would get angry about... If y'all have any ideas please share. 
I don't know... Perhaps there was a dwarf in the room, and she made some rude, "racist" comment about him? I have no idea...
QueenLucyTheValient
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I may make it so that you will never know. but if you guys have any brilliant ideas you think would be perfect, let me know.
@missr.-that kind of idea could work.
but if you guys have any brilliant ideas you think would be perfect, let me know. @missr.-that kind of idea could work.
DestinyLies
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Something like MissR's instead of a "racist" comment something about how she is "higher" than the dwarf or just a "servant" or something.
I think that would work best, and get Peter pretty riled up. I don't have any better suggestions.
QueenLucyTheValient
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Yea! That would would work nicely. I can see the scene playing through my mind now..
Okay! I can't wait to read the next entry!Yea! That would would work nicely. I can see the scene playing through my mind now..
DestinyLies
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Glad to help.
World Wanderer
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Good story.
~Queen~Wylla~
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I like it!
Very good! I can't wait for more!
Very good! I can't wait for more!
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TheRadiantSouthernSun
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That was really good... whats coming up????
QueenLucyTheValient
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you will just have to wait and see what is coming up. I do not have time to post a whole chapter or anything now, but I will post it later, probably tomorrow.
@QW-Thanks! Im glad that you like it!
@QW-Thanks! Im glad that you like it!
World Wanderer
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I hope whats coming up is good.
QueenLucyTheValient
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here is the next chapter... Sorry I took so long, and thanks for the help, MissR and DestinyLies..
Chapter 7
"I DO NOT BELIEVE HER!!!!! I would do anything to kill her right now!!!!" Peter shouted, pacing the floor in his room angrily.
"Well, Peter, if you do, you could probably start a war with Archenland." Edmund replied. "Besides, what did she do that has gotten you so...." But Ed was unable to finish because Peter had started up again.
"I do not care if it starts a war with TASH!! She insulted not just any Narnian, but Mr. Tumnus!!! She called him an 'animal,' a 'slave,' and a 'threat to mankind'!!!!! She needs to be punished!!"
"Oh. I see.. Well, she does deserve to be punished." Edmund replied carefully. "If you decide to kill her, can I do it?" he asked.
Peter could not hide a smile. He raised his eyebrows and said with an evil grin, "Now, Edmund, remember that if you kill her, you will start a war with Archenland." Edmund understood what Peter was indicating and grinned a mischievious grin. "I think I am going to enjoy this." He said, rubbing his hands together in a playfully malicious manner.
****
"So, Alana, is it true?" Edmund asked as he came alongside her.
"Is what true, Your Highness?" She responded respectfully.
"That you insulted Mr. Tumnus?"
"It depends on what you mean by insulted."
"That is evidence enough for me. Since you have done such a grievous deed, you must be punished for it. Now listen to me closely, because if you do not do exactly as I have told you to do, there will be worse consequences."
****
Alana was furious. She was being forced to do servants work! She despised that King Edmund. "King Edmund the Just, indeed. More like King Edmund the Idiot. If he can not take a joke then I will not bother with him. In fact, why am I even listening to him, I am no subject of his." She thought all but the last sentence, which was said, not very loudly, but as she happened to be scrubbing the floor of the entire Great Hall by herself, it echoed.
"Not a subject of whom, may I ask?" a voice behind her asked. She jumped, spilling some suds on the floor. She turned around to find a handsome, blonde-haired, green eyed, and brawny young man standing behind her. The High King, Peter. She stood up, out of respect.
"Nothing, Your Majesty." She said hastily.
"Good, because you know that while in our country you will abide by our rules." He replied curtly. He then turned and started to head for the door.
"WAIT!! Your Majesty! Am I really to do this entire room, by hand, all by myself?!" She whined.
He stood and thought for a moment before replying, "Yes, you are. And after you are done here, you have to head to the Kitchen. I here that there is a huge pile of dishes just waiting to be washed." and walked out.
****
As Peter walked out, he ran into Edmund, who had overheard the whole thing. "Peter, you are amazing." He said. They both laughed and headed off to the kitchen to create more of a mess for Alana to clean, seeing as they were both hungry.
Chapter 7
"I DO NOT BELIEVE HER!!!!! I would do anything to kill her right now!!!!" Peter shouted, pacing the floor in his room angrily.
"Well, Peter, if you do, you could probably start a war with Archenland." Edmund replied. "Besides, what did she do that has gotten you so...." But Ed was unable to finish because Peter had started up again.
"I do not care if it starts a war with TASH!! She insulted not just any Narnian, but Mr. Tumnus!!! She called him an 'animal,' a 'slave,' and a 'threat to mankind'!!!!! She needs to be punished!!"
"Oh. I see.. Well, she does deserve to be punished." Edmund replied carefully. "If you decide to kill her, can I do it?" he asked.
Peter could not hide a smile. He raised his eyebrows and said with an evil grin, "Now, Edmund, remember that if you kill her, you will start a war with Archenland." Edmund understood what Peter was indicating and grinned a mischievious grin. "I think I am going to enjoy this." He said, rubbing his hands together in a playfully malicious manner.
****
"So, Alana, is it true?" Edmund asked as he came alongside her.
"Is what true, Your Highness?" She responded respectfully.
"That you insulted Mr. Tumnus?"
"It depends on what you mean by insulted."
"That is evidence enough for me. Since you have done such a grievous deed, you must be punished for it. Now listen to me closely, because if you do not do exactly as I have told you to do, there will be worse consequences."
****
Alana was furious. She was being forced to do servants work! She despised that King Edmund. "King Edmund the Just, indeed. More like King Edmund the Idiot. If he can not take a joke then I will not bother with him. In fact, why am I even listening to him, I am no subject of his." She thought all but the last sentence, which was said, not very loudly, but as she happened to be scrubbing the floor of the entire Great Hall by herself, it echoed.
"Not a subject of whom, may I ask?" a voice behind her asked. She jumped, spilling some suds on the floor. She turned around to find a handsome, blonde-haired, green eyed, and brawny young man standing behind her. The High King, Peter. She stood up, out of respect.
"Nothing, Your Majesty." She said hastily.
"Good, because you know that while in our country you will abide by our rules." He replied curtly. He then turned and started to head for the door.
"WAIT!! Your Majesty! Am I really to do this entire room, by hand, all by myself?!" She whined.
He stood and thought for a moment before replying, "Yes, you are. And after you are done here, you have to head to the Kitchen. I here that there is a huge pile of dishes just waiting to be washed." and walked out.
****
As Peter walked out, he ran into Edmund, who had overheard the whole thing. "Peter, you are amazing." He said. They both laughed and headed off to the kitchen to create more of a mess for Alana to clean, seeing as they were both hungry.
World Wanderer
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Oh yeah, this is funny! I can so see Edmund doing something like this.
~Queen~Wylla~
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More more more!! 
I'm getting very very interested!
I'm getting very very interested!
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TheRadiantSouthernSun
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Wow that was so funny.... I love what you did with Peter!!!! She gets what she deserves.
QueenLucyTheValient
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Exactly, RSS! I am having fun with Peter and Edmund's characters, they are the funny ones of this story. Lol, I will prolly try to write more after school, though I am doing school at the shop this week so I will prbably have to work afterwords. I brought my story though!
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TheRadiantSouthernSun
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Great I love it so far!!! How long will the story be? And will we see something between Peter and Alana or not???
I love it so far!!! How long will the story be? And will we see something between Peter and Alana or not???